What We See
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
It's hard to believe you are on chapter twenty-seven. Where has time gone?
AS for Warren I smell either a rat who steals his protype or someone that finds the key to make it work. Good luck.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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It's hard to believe you are on chapter twenty-seven. Where has time gone?
AS for Warren I smell either a rat who steals his protype or someone that finds the key to make it work. Good luck.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I've completed writing the story now, and there are about 42 total chapters. Of all the guesses so far, you have come the closest with your suspicions, Tom.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Is Warren going to fill the role of antagonist? Offer some suspense and drama? Will Alan find out that Warren ran his previous employer's business into the ground and also burglarized customers' homes?
Sorry, maybe I need more breakfast this morning.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Is Warren going to fill the role of antagonist? Offer some suspense and drama? Will Alan find out that Warren ran his previous employer's business into the ground and also burglarized customers' homes?
Sorry, maybe I need more breakfast this morning.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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No, no. I love the speculating you're doing. You're on the right track.
Comment from tfawcus
It'll be interesting to see how Warren fits in with this tightly-knit setup. Expansion or friction? We shall see.
There's always going to be a fine line to tread with the explanation of computing. I would beware of long sentences such as It would contain a chip or chips to perform the basic functions of taking the input stream of data points from the digital image produced by the camera and sending it wirelessly, if possible, to the software that converts it to a data stream for input into the speech synthesizer software. Perhaps this would be better split or condensed. e.g. It would contain a chip to take the input stream from the digital image produced by the camera and sending it wirelessly to the software that converts it to a data stream for input into the speech synthesizer software.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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It'll be interesting to see how Warren fits in with this tightly-knit setup. Expansion or friction? We shall see.
There's always going to be a fine line to tread with the explanation of computing. I would beware of long sentences such as It would contain a chip or chips to perform the basic functions of taking the input stream of data points from the digital image produced by the camera and sending it wirelessly, if possible, to the software that converts it to a data stream for input into the speech synthesizer software. Perhaps this would be better split or condensed. e.g. It would contain a chip to take the input stream from the digital image produced by the camera and sending it wirelessly to the software that converts it to a data stream for input into the speech synthesizer software.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Excellent suggestion, Tony. I have modified that section substantially. Once again, I've fallen prey to too many words that could easily be pared down. Thank you for pointing it out.
Comment from lancellot
Well, it seems Alan's circle is expanding, and Tommy's. The writing looks good and you doing a great editing job. We'll see how adding an assistant works. I guess that means Alan is making more money. His invention is a mystery, but we'll see.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Well, it seems Alan's circle is expanding, and Tommy's. The writing looks good and you doing a great editing job. We'll see how adding an assistant works. I guess that means Alan is making more money. His invention is a mystery, but we'll see.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Lance. This new character will shake things up a bit, as it is about time to introduce some conflict into the story (or way past time, you might be thinking!)
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No, not really. I know another writer who adds conflict to her novels for conflict's sake, that have no real impact or meaning to the plot. A 2D villain shows up, does nothing impactful (just a guy who is hated by the old ladies on FS), gets dealt with, then is never heard of again.
I think the rule of thumb, is, if it doesn't advance the plot, throw it out.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It certainly seems like his business is expanding. I hope Warren works out, but he hired him without a background check, which everyone does today. The 1980's were a simpler time, I think, but I never had to apply for a job at that time.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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It certainly seems like his business is expanding. I hope Warren works out, but he hired him without a background check, which everyone does today. The 1980's were a simpler time, I think, but I never had to apply for a job at that time.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I was hired for my eventual 26-year career in the early '80s, and I'm quite sure there wasn't a lot of background checking going on. I had a couple of interviews and gave some references, but I'm not even sure if those were contacted. You're right, though. Today, they check out your social media presence and lots of things.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely to see Callie again:)) Another excellent and detailed chapter with good pace as Alan, methodical and charming as ever, moves ahead with his plans for his new invention. Also, we have Warren on the scene. Call me suspicious but I hope he can be trusted? Sometimes things can go just a tad too smoothly? Well done, Jim. Debbie
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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Lovely to see Callie again:)) Another excellent and detailed chapter with good pace as Alan, methodical and charming as ever, moves ahead with his plans for his new invention. Also, we have Warren on the scene. Call me suspicious but I hope he can be trusted? Sometimes things can go just a tad too smoothly? Well done, Jim. Debbie
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I do call you suspicious, and rightfully so. Things definitely have been going too smoothly for a while now. I love the speculation.