Return To Concorde Valley
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Adam's Trial"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda, tune in to the next editing chapter to see how Theo and company resolve the ongoing crisis; will their daring plan work, or will they'll be extreme disappointment for our brave clan?
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda, tune in to the next editing chapter to see how Theo and company resolve the ongoing crisis; will their daring plan work, or will they'll be extreme disappointment for our brave clan?
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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Hi Mike. I really need to turn you into a novel writer!! You've got a great sense of humor!!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a wonderful chapter, Rhonda, and I'm so sorry I have nothing more to give. Your dialogue is excellent (love "it's my gig") which is so important to the story, the familial bonds and the part each will play in this collaborative struggle to regain peace and harmony in Concorde Valley. The creatures too are, of course, also invested in this fight against evil. Hermes' wisdom and leadership are evidenced in his advice to Theo (who still needs to learn to have an overview of the situation and be less impulsive). His main task now will be to decide on the sacrificial gift he must take to the twins in order to try and win influence against the gods. This choice will be very interesting. A real cliff-hanger, Rhonda, at the end of your beautifully crafted chapter. Well done! Debbie xo
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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This is a wonderful chapter, Rhonda, and I'm so sorry I have nothing more to give. Your dialogue is excellent (love "it's my gig") which is so important to the story, the familial bonds and the part each will play in this collaborative struggle to regain peace and harmony in Concorde Valley. The creatures too are, of course, also invested in this fight against evil. Hermes' wisdom and leadership are evidenced in his advice to Theo (who still needs to learn to have an overview of the situation and be less impulsive). His main task now will be to decide on the sacrificial gift he must take to the twins in order to try and win influence against the gods. This choice will be very interesting. A real cliff-hanger, Rhonda, at the end of your beautifully crafted chapter. Well done! Debbie xo
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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Hi Debbie,
Thank you so much for the much coveted virtual six stars. To know you feel that way is encouraging!
You really nailed it on Hermes' leadership. He's playful, but has his act together when needed. He does have to put a check on his impetuous cousin.
The sacrificial gift will be much debated, and, in the end, may be more than Theo is willing to give.
Take care,
hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional chapter, my friend. Oh my, this is just so thrilling! I thought for sure Theo was going to leave His mission and go and rescue Echo and his family. That's what any normal person would do, but as we see here, Concorde Valley is special and happens to have a battle going on. Theo is proving himself to be a man and has many special qualities. Adam too. Fine pic you have of Adam. ;))
Wonderful addition to your fine book. Beautifully crafted, illustrated, and presented.
Rhonda, as always, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Love and Blessings across the bridge.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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Exceptional chapter, my friend. Oh my, this is just so thrilling! I thought for sure Theo was going to leave His mission and go and rescue Echo and his family. That's what any normal person would do, but as we see here, Concorde Valley is special and happens to have a battle going on. Theo is proving himself to be a man and has many special qualities. Adam too. Fine pic you have of Adam. ;))
Wonderful addition to your fine book. Beautifully crafted, illustrated, and presented.
Rhonda, as always, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Love and Blessings across the bridge.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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Dear Sally, it's always so good to see your name pop up in my review section. In fact, in my message box as well. You're a dear-heart!!
Yeah, that picture of Adam is wonderful. I'll bet in his next picture he won't look so fancy, hehe, but he's still a cutie pie!
Thank you for your comments and for your friendship,
Much love across the bridge,
Rhonda
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My sincere pleasure. Loved the chapter and the all the developments. Love across the bridge tonight.
Sal XOs
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Love back at you, Sally! I?m glad you liked the chapter. I can?t wait for your poem.
Much love across the bridge! 😘🙏🏻🫶🏻💝🤗😍🥰
Comment from barbara.wilkey
And the plot continues to thicken. I have hope for Adam and Theo's success. I can't imagine either of them failing but have no clue how either of them is going to be victorious. I do like this story.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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And the plot continues to thicken. I have hope for Adam and Theo's success. I can't imagine either of them failing but have no clue how either of them is going to be victorious. I do like this story.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2024
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Hi Barbara, thank you so very much for the six stars. They really brightened my day. I am so glad you are following this story so you can help with continuity.
Both brothers have epic struggles ahead of them, for sure.
Take care my friend,
Rhonda