Canterbury
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Arrival"a classic tale, retold
29 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
I can't wait to read your descriptions of the people on the journey. I loved the original which revealed the flaws of those who lived during the Middle Ages: the scammers, liars, hypocrites, etc.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I can't wait to read your descriptions of the people on the journey. I loved the original which revealed the flaws of those who lived during the Middle Ages: the scammers, liars, hypocrites, etc.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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The original I studied in school and reread a few years ago so I thought this might be quite an interesting enterprise. lol We'll see. Much appreciated as always. G
Comment from nomi338
A gifted writer has more than one gift, his greatest most often proves to be his ability to observe and report. This done as acutely as possible with an occasional bon mot for entertainment's purpose thrown in.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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A gifted writer has more than one gift, his greatest most often proves to be his ability to observe and report. This done as acutely as possible with an occasional bon mot for entertainment's purpose thrown in.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Much appreciated, my friend. GMG
Comment from estory
I thought it was interesting to tell this from the renowned writer Chaucer's viewpoint, and you portrayed him here as a writer observing people around him. There is that attention to detail in discerning the characters in the bar that make it a great commentary on what writers do best. As an opening for something bigger, it does whet the appetite. estory
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I thought it was interesting to tell this from the renowned writer Chaucer's viewpoint, and you portrayed him here as a writer observing people around him. There is that attention to detail in discerning the characters in the bar that make it a great commentary on what writers do best. As an opening for something bigger, it does whet the appetite. estory
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for your thoughts on this small opener. G
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi G-Man,
It's good to see a post with your name on it pop into my messages. I always enjoy your work. This was no disappointment. You've taken on the character of Chaucer and are about to take us on a journey with him as he journeys with the pilgrimage.
I love your lead in as you guide our senses to engage our interest and to develop your setting. Authentic people and language help put us into the scene.
I look forward to seeing more,
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Hi G-Man,
It's good to see a post with your name on it pop into my messages. I always enjoy your work. This was no disappointment. You've taken on the character of Chaucer and are about to take us on a journey with him as he journeys with the pilgrimage.
I love your lead in as you guide our senses to engage our interest and to develop your setting. Authentic people and language help put us into the scene.
I look forward to seeing more,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I'm hoping to post on a much more regular basis. i haven't done much recently but I've been laid up with a broken leg & ankle so have had a bit of time. Much appreciated. G
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Oh my goodness, I'm sorry to hear it! This book is a good way to re-enter!
Comment from Gloria ....
This promises to be a most entertaining pastiche whilst paying homage to the great Geoffrey Chaucer, G.
I'm not terribly familiar with The Canterbury Tales but my guess is that you are emulating Chaucer's sentence structures which would explain the run on sentence and the sometimes overly descriptive language.
Just a couple of things to consider:
and journeys to strange and distant lands, - replace comma with period.
where the great saint Thomas Becket - capitalize saint
ale mixed with woodsmoke - wood smoke is two words
he swept an arm around a group of four or five tables which had been shoved together. -capitalize He.
Many thanks for sharing and all the best with your new project.
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This promises to be a most entertaining pastiche whilst paying homage to the great Geoffrey Chaucer, G.
I'm not terribly familiar with The Canterbury Tales but my guess is that you are emulating Chaucer's sentence structures which would explain the run on sentence and the sometimes overly descriptive language.
Just a couple of things to consider:
and journeys to strange and distant lands, - replace comma with period.
where the great saint Thomas Becket - capitalize saint
ale mixed with woodsmoke - wood smoke is two words
he swept an arm around a group of four or five tables which had been shoved together. -capitalize He.
Many thanks for sharing and all the best with your new project.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, Gloria. It's certainly a particular style and sort of a period piece. Some things are hard to get away from as many of the characters and tales won't work in a more modern setting. Much appreciated. G
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is great and a heck of a lot easier to read than when I had to do it in Old English. I always enjoy Chaucer stories because they are usually bawdy and lots of fun. Hope this is just the beginning. Haven't read anything of yours for awhile, but I remember I always like your talented writing.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This is great and a heck of a lot easier to read than when I had to do it in Old English. I always enjoy Chaucer stories because they are usually bawdy and lots of fun. Hope this is just the beginning. Haven't read anything of yours for awhile, but I remember I always like your talented writing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Yep, I did the old English in school, lol. It's certainly a bit of a mouthful! Hopefully I can emulate the style whilst making it a bit more coherent. Much appreciated as always. G
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I enjoyed this! Beautifully written in medieval English and instantly creating an atmosphere of the times. And what a great character to take centre stage. The only quibble would be your use of the word 'gregarious' "with her food and wine." I know what you're saying but it doesn't quite sound right to me. But an excellent and entertaining story, thank you. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed this! Beautifully written in medieval English and instantly creating an atmosphere of the times. And what a great character to take centre stage. The only quibble would be your use of the word 'gregarious' "with her food and wine." I know what you're saying but it doesn't quite sound right to me. But an excellent and entertaining story, thank you. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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You may m well be right about gregarious and its usage but I may leave it in for the sound than anything else. I'll have a thinkabout it. Much appreciated. G
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Since, Chaucer's Canterbury Tales has never been out of publication, It is my understanding that you would need permission from his family,estate, or trust, before you could write something like this. This should be mentioned in the author's notes how and who gave you permission. Otherwise you are plagiarizing which is illegal and there are fines and/or prison time. Correct me if I am wrong. I just want to prevent you from getting into trouble. Let me know either way please. Karen
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Since, Chaucer's Canterbury Tales has never been out of publication, It is my understanding that you would need permission from his family,estate, or trust, before you could write something like this. This should be mentioned in the author's notes how and who gave you permission. Otherwise you are plagiarizing which is illegal and there are fines and/or prison time. Correct me if I am wrong. I just want to prevent you from getting into trouble. Let me know either way please. Karen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Nope, Canterbury Tales is in the public domain and has been for a long time. Being in print doesn't affect this, much like Peter Pan, Winnie the Poo, Mickey Mouse, and Sherlock Holmes.
I always do my due diligence when it comes to writing. Many thanks. GMG
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Thanks for the information. Kudos to you. I did like it.
I just posted my next children's story. "Ellie the first Easter Rabbit" The picture is hysterical. Karen
Comment from tfawcus
This is a cracking good start to your retelling of The Canterbury Tales. In updating the language, you have trodden a skilful path, retaining the liveliness and ambience of the original. A noble endeavour and one that has good publishing potential. I suspect you'll get as much pleasure out of writing this as I will reading it.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This is a cracking good start to your retelling of The Canterbury Tales. In updating the language, you have trodden a skilful path, retaining the liveliness and ambience of the original. A noble endeavour and one that has good publishing potential. I suspect you'll get as much pleasure out of writing this as I will reading it.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, Tony. Yeah, it's enjoyable as it's both a study, translation and update as i go. lol I like the challenge of the style, like I did with my period horror a couple of years ago. It's fun to try. All the best
G
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is an intriguing first chapter G, and it was good to see your name come up again. Very descriptive, as always. I almost felt the hand clamp from Harry, and his welcoming t his inn. A good read,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This is an intriguing first chapter G, and it was good to see your name come up again. Very descriptive, as always. I almost felt the hand clamp from Harry, and his welcoming t his inn. A good read,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for the positive response to the piece. I've been a sporadic visitor / poster the last few years but hoping to get back into it more. Much appreciated. G