Murphy P.I.
Murphy goes into his detective mode25 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
Sorry, all I have are fives. Very well done. You should have posted this in the "Animal Crackers" Club. I'd write one but I'm not as good as you! Two small concerns: I have a difficult time, sometimes on this site. You have to play at times with the fonts. Yours changed, but not too significantly, through the story. Also, very small
Now perplexed he ran straight to the little girl's room-commas needed after perplexed. Now, that's nitpicking. If your friends don't tell you, who will?:
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Sorry, all I have are fives. Very well done. You should have posted this in the "Animal Crackers" Club. I'd write one but I'm not as good as you! Two small concerns: I have a difficult time, sometimes on this site. You have to play at times with the fonts. Yours changed, but not too significantly, through the story. Also, very small
Now perplexed he ran straight to the little girl's room-commas needed after perplexed. Now, that's nitpicking. If your friends don't tell you, who will?:
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Yes, the fonts seem to jump around. Happy you liked the story and thank you!
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There are many glitches on this site. Fortunately, I love a good challenge!
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a fun and entertaining story, and since I'm a big sucker for happy endings, I could have liked your ending better. Good writing. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your posts.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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What a fun and entertaining story, and since I'm a big sucker for happy endings, I could have liked your ending better. Good writing. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your posts.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Happy you enjoyed this little tale.
Thank you!
Comment from damommy
Cats are natural born detectives, and they are excellent snakers. Nothing gets by them. I like how you wrote from Murphy's viewpoint. Very brave boy.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Cats are natural born detectives, and they are excellent snakers. Nothing gets by them. I like how you wrote from Murphy's viewpoint. Very brave boy.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your great review! Had fun writing it!!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good and cute story you have penned. I love those brave little cats. You used great descriptive words and very nice dialogue. A joy to read and review! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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This is a very good and cute story you have penned. I love those brave little cats. You used great descriptive words and very nice dialogue. A joy to read and review! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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You are so kind with your 6 star review. I enjoyed writing this tale!
Comment from tfawcus
What I like best about this is the authenticity of your description of the cat's movements and actions. Telling the story from Murphy's point of view also works well to put your readers right in the middle of the action.
A couple of typos:
"We got super sharpe claws and neddle point teeth,"
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chipmonks/chipmunks
I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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What I like best about this is the authenticity of your description of the cat's movements and actions. Telling the story from Murphy's point of view also works well to put your readers right in the middle of the action.
A couple of typos:
"We got super sharpe claws and neddle point teeth,"
and
chipmonks/chipmunks
I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thank you for that type-o catch!
Comment from jmdg1954
Well it looks like all the reviewers did there job as I'm doing mine and all they received was a "thank you".
This post is a very good flash fiction piece, it's simply one of my pet be peeves when the reviewer may not even leave looked or read the review.
Best luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Well it looks like all the reviewers did there job as I'm doing mine and all they received was a "thank you".
This post is a very good flash fiction piece, it's simply one of my pet be peeves when the reviewer may not even leave looked or read the review.
Best luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thanks for taking the time to read!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very cute story.
The kitchen is the best place to start he thought. - You need a comma after 'start'.
I'm not sure why you changed the font half way into the story. (and then changed back for the last sentence.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Very cute story.
The kitchen is the best place to start he thought. - You need a comma after 'start'.
I'm not sure why you changed the font half way into the story. (and then changed back for the last sentence.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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I can't figure out why that happened
Thank you!
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Thank you for sharing this cute little story about a determined kitty. I love that once they knew there was danger afoot, he went on the lookout to protect his humans.
Well done,
~Mustang~
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Hi there,
Thank you for sharing this cute little story about a determined kitty. I love that once they knew there was danger afoot, he went on the lookout to protect his humans.
Well done,
~Mustang~
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"Everything was in placed" - PLACE
"he return to the family room" - RETURNED
"Murphy licked Jessie head again" - JESSIE'S
I have always had cats, so I appreciated this tale of Murphy's. You think of cats as not being standoffish, but they really do care about their people and other pets in the house.
Thanks for the fun story; you could also call it "Murphy the Hero".
Take care,
Pam
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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"Everything was in placed" - PLACE
"he return to the family room" - RETURNED
"Murphy licked Jessie head again" - JESSIE'S
I have always had cats, so I appreciated this tale of Murphy's. You think of cats as not being standoffish, but they really do care about their people and other pets in the house.
Thanks for the fun story; you could also call it "Murphy the Hero".
Take care,
Pam
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Begin Again
Murphy, our hero!
What a fun read to see the animals come to life and how they too worry about their humans. A wonderful story to teach children a lesson too.
A few typo errors and spelling, which you might want to correct. Though the story was quite enjoyable.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Murphy, our hero!
What a fun read to see the animals come to life and how they too worry about their humans. A wonderful story to teach children a lesson too.
A few typo errors and spelling, which you might want to correct. Though the story was quite enjoyable.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you!
