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Comment from teafor2
Unknown bard, the presentation of this contest entry's verbiage married to
the picture of earth tone leaves and ambiguous connotation gives the post
a nice flexibility. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Unknown bard, the presentation of this contest entry's verbiage married to
the picture of earth tone leaves and ambiguous connotation gives the post
a nice flexibility. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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thank you tf2 :-)
Comment from lyenochka
A great senryu! And it's those quiet autumn moments that can bring up a memory from the past. I like the word play of the "leaves bare memories" as the "leaves" fall from the trees and the revealing/baring the memories of the past.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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A great senryu! And it's those quiet autumn moments that can bring up a memory from the past. I like the word play of the "leaves bare memories" as the "leaves" fall from the trees and the revealing/baring the memories of the past.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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yup! thank you helen 😎😊✌️💙🖋️🦄🌈
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
paint a good word picture of the scene.
-The first line establishes the mood.
-A very good concluding line that relates
to autumn but also to memories from the past.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
paint a good word picture of the scene.
-The first line establishes the mood.
-A very good concluding line that relates
to autumn but also to memories from the past.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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thank you pam! :-)
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You are welcome.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I love autumn, was curious and opened the page.
Nice idea to compare our memories to falling autumn leaves.
The opening line is impactful too.
PS. I would have had more autumn leaves still hanging on the tree.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Ciao !
I love autumn, was curious and opened the page.
Nice idea to compare our memories to falling autumn leaves.
The opening line is impactful too.
PS. I would have had more autumn leaves still hanging on the tree.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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thank you tempest - and thank you for the pumps, too! :-)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, your poem is beautifully stated and has good sensory appeal.
Of special note:
leaves bare memories
(when someone's voice gets inside your head, there's no getting it out.
It's there forevermore.)
Lovely, perfect photo choice. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Hello author, your poem is beautifully stated and has good sensory appeal.
Of special note:
leaves bare memories
(when someone's voice gets inside your head, there's no getting it out.
It's there forevermore.)
Lovely, perfect photo choice. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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so true!!! thank you LB :-)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, what a pretty presentation for a very clever Senryu! I enjoyed this immensely, and I loved the inference that the leaves would have memories like a human would have -- nicely done! Bet this is the winner!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Oh, what a pretty presentation for a very clever Senryu! I enjoyed this immensely, and I loved the inference that the leaves would have memories like a human would have -- nicely done! Bet this is the winner!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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hehe thank you dawn! :-)
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My pleasure!
Comment from XinaD
Very clever. Vivid imagery, a little entendre, and that third line... I reread this over and over with different inflections and it completely changes the vibe each time. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Very clever. Vivid imagery, a little entendre, and that third line... I reread this over and over with different inflections and it completely changes the vibe each time. Excellent work!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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yup!! thank you xina :-)
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A beautiful example of a Senryu poem. The artwork you chose to accompany the poem is reflective of how the past leaves us with bare memories the same way an autumn breeze leaves the tree bare in its wake. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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A beautiful example of a Senryu poem. The artwork you chose to accompany the poem is reflective of how the past leaves us with bare memories the same way an autumn breeze leaves the tree bare in its wake. Nicely written.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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thank you marilyn! :-)
Comment from Crowstar
Awesome!!! Brilliant!!! I love it !!!! You have a unique way of writing this post. You can tell it's original poetry!!! Keep up the good work!!! Blessings!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Awesome!!! Brilliant!!! I love it !!!! You have a unique way of writing this post. You can tell it's original poetry!!! Keep up the good work!!! Blessings!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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thank you crow!! :-)
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Thank you,
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-crafted poem. Your poem reads and flows well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Great personification in the last line. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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This is a well-crafted poem. Your poem reads and flows well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Great personification in the last line. Nice poem.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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thank you baltimore! :-)