The Fix
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Fix - Chapter Three"A mother fights to prove her son's innocence
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like this story very much! The pace is excellent and I love your punchy, economical sentences almost mimicking the rhythm of the train. But, above all, I like the plot so far, combining mystery and a desperate act on Stacy's part to get to the root of her son's possible miscarriage of justice. We're left wondering how Georgia's going to react to Stacy's (normally inadvisable) approach to this jury foreman. Nicely done with your ending. Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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I like this story very much! The pace is excellent and I love your punchy, economical sentences almost mimicking the rhythm of the train. But, above all, I like the plot so far, combining mystery and a desperate act on Stacy's part to get to the root of her son's possible miscarriage of justice. We're left wondering how Georgia's going to react to Stacy's (normally inadvisable) approach to this jury foreman. Nicely done with your ending. Debbie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank yo Debbie, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written, chapter for your book, and it moves along very well when it is read aloud. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the best with this book. May you have a blessed day and enjoy the day as it comes. Patricia .
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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This is a very well written, chapter for your book, and it moves along very well when it is read aloud. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the best with this book. May you have a blessed day and enjoy the day as it comes. Patricia .
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
to announce the trains about to close its doors (should be "train's" as a contraction)
I like how you fit the story of the Goose pub into this - a bit of Stacey's past without dwelling on it.
Unintentional, but this will make for a great way to get inside Georgia's house. We'll see what happens next.
You write at a good pace, Jacob. No wasted words or side trips. I enjoyed the read.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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to announce the trains about to close its doors (should be "train's" as a contraction)
I like how you fit the story of the Goose pub into this - a bit of Stacey's past without dwelling on it.
Unintentional, but this will make for a great way to get inside Georgia's house. We'll see what happens next.
You write at a good pace, Jacob. No wasted words or side trips. I enjoyed the read.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you Pam. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jacob, this was very well written. The chase were so well executed. I lost my breath along the way, and that is a good sign. What and ending. Now what? Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Hi Jacob, this was very well written. The chase were so well executed. I lost my breath along the way, and that is a good sign. What and ending. Now what? Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you Ulla, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this post with us. I can't imagine how Stacey feels. It will interesting where you take this from here. I am enjoying this story.
I find a spare seat and sit down. I look up at the screen which tells me the next station is Romford (You can omit 'down' it's understood)
My eyes clap on the Goose pub to my right, (If pub is part of the name then Pub)
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you for sharing this post with us. I can't imagine how Stacey feels. It will interesting where you take this from here. I am enjoying this story.
I find a spare seat and sit down. I look up at the screen which tells me the next station is Romford (You can omit 'down' it's understood)
My eyes clap on the Goose pub to my right, (If pub is part of the name then Pub)
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you Barbara, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. I haven't read past chapters but thought this was an enjoyable read. Well written! And you ended it at the perfect place - this is a page turner! Great job - well written - and enjoyable.
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Nicely done. I haven't read past chapters but thought this was an enjoyable read. Well written! And you ended it at the perfect place - this is a page turner! Great job - well written - and enjoyable.
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.