A Special Love Story
Their love became a hope eternal.27 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have no sixes left this late in the week, but this story deserves at least hundreds of sixes. It's the most tender love story I have read in a really long time. It's perfect!!!!!!!!!
"Sorry about that." He said sheepishly. ('He said sheepishly.' or 'said Alan.' shouldn't be in italics and in a few other areas.)
Dr. Bill he has no one but you and us. (comma after 'Bill' you're addressing him.)
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I have no sixes left this late in the week, but this story deserves at least hundreds of sixes. It's the most tender love story I have read in a really long time. It's perfect!!!!!!!!!
"Sorry about that." He said sheepishly. ('He said sheepishly.' or 'said Alan.' shouldn't be in italics and in a few other areas.)
Dr. Bill he has no one but you and us. (comma after 'Bill' you're addressing him.)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you for your review.-Bill
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Why didn't you enter the romance contest? I would have voted for it!
Alan though was much more skeptical, - I would parenthetically (if that's a word) separate 'though' with commas.
"What do you mean by that? You mean......" said Alan - maybe it's only me, but by adding 'by that', it's as if he felt insulted.
coupleness. - I like it. we can make any word we want to.
Great work.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Why didn't you enter the romance contest? I would have voted for it!
Alan though was much more skeptical, - I would parenthetically (if that's a word) separate 'though' with commas.
"What do you mean by that? You mean......" said Alan - maybe it's only me, but by adding 'by that', it's as if he felt insulted.
coupleness. - I like it. we can make any word we want to.
Great work.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Wayne, this is good review and I'm going to made some corrections. And thank you for the six. Just before reading yours, I got a four and it's the first one ever! Again, thanks, Wayne.-Bill
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A four, huh/
There's just no accounting for people.
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I didn't enter the contest because it was under the 2000 word minimal
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ahhhhh
a couple hundredxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx's would not have kept me from votin' for it. (smiley face here)
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Actually, I appealed but I got no response and so I struck out on my own and I think it's doing pretty well.
Comment from Begin Again
Deserving of a six or something greater if it was possible. What a beautiful love story. Even though I was in tears at the end... their love didn't end and they will forever be side by side. Awesome!
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Deserving of a six or something greater if it was possible. What a beautiful love story. Even though I was in tears at the end... their love didn't end and they will forever be side by side. Awesome!
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Carol. I almost put in a disclaimer to read with tissue nearby. -Bill
Comment from prettybluebirds
What a unique and touching story. I was in tears by the time I came to the end. It's wonderful that they found one another in their last time on this planet. Beyond a doubt, they are together.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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What a unique and touching story. I was in tears by the time I came to the end. It's wonderful that they found one another in their last time on this planet. Beyond a doubt, they are together.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you for your review and the six! I sense that not many who view this story will re-view this story and make commentary. It hits too close to home.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, this is one of those few stories that will stick with me forever. So sad, yet a look at true love that we all hope will go on for eternity. Luke 16:19-31, the answer is yes. We will know each other in Heaven.
Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six to reward this fine story properly.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Wow, this is one of those few stories that will stick with me forever. So sad, yet a look at true love that we all hope will go on for eternity. Luke 16:19-31, the answer is yes. We will know each other in Heaven.
Thanks for sharing. I wish I had a six to reward this fine story properly.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Ric, your review of this is far more important to me than the six. I've alsready gotten my fair share. To have you on the list of critics is a
six. Thank you.
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Thank you so much for your kind words, William. It's a pleasure to read your work and fellowship with the kind heart who wrote it. :-)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a beautiful story, William. Although sad that they died so young, they died together and are now fulfilling their eternal life together. It brought a tear to my eyes that they died a moment apart. The best Valentine story I've read. Well done. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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What a beautiful story, William. Although sad that they died so young, they died together and are now fulfilling their eternal life together. It brought a tear to my eyes that they died a moment apart. The best Valentine story I've read. Well done. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Sandra for your review. -Bill
Comment from Jeano
Well, I did the unthinkable. I saved this for the end of my day, and now I'm about to retire for the night with a heavy heart. It's a beautiful, tender, sad, sad story, but you told it well. Not sure, even as an after thought, you should have said, "Happy Valentine's Day".
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Well, I did the unthinkable. I saved this for the end of my day, and now I'm about to retire for the night with a heavy heart. It's a beautiful, tender, sad, sad story, but you told it well. Not sure, even as an after thought, you should have said, "Happy Valentine's Day".
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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I dedicated this story to all Fanstorians as my "Valentine's card." But now that you mentioned it (and I too had reservations) I'm going to remove it. Nice call and thank you for the review.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Bill, you brought me to tears. This is the most beautiful and tender love story I think I've ever heard. I'm so thankful you shared it with us. You are a talented writer with much to say.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Bill, you brought me to tears. This is the most beautiful and tender love story I think I've ever heard. I'm so thankful you shared it with us. You are a talented writer with much to say.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Rhonda, it's reviews like this that leave me speechless. Thank you for the affirmation. I love to write but I have a special resource of story that inspires me to "get it right" everytime. -Bill
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I see that perfectionism in your work. I know how much time that takes to get it all ironed out so as to make your writing seem less. It takes time and energy, but it?s working for you, my friend!
Comment from John Ciarmello
Oh my goodness, William!
This is the most heartwarming, heart-wrenching, beautifully profound story I have read in a long time.
I'm so pleased I had a six for this one. Beautifully written, my friend! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Oh my goodness, William!
This is the most heartwarming, heart-wrenching, beautifully profound story I have read in a long time.
I'm so pleased I had a six for this one. Beautifully written, my friend! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I offer this story as my Valentine's card to all Fanstorians. It's not in a
contest. Thank you, John, for a wonderful and generous review. Feel free to share it with others.-Bill
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very beautiful and very well told story about life, love and there after. It touched my heart as I read it. I am so happy they found each other and were no alone and they both had you! What a great Valentine story. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Bill, This is a very beautiful and very well told story about life, love and there after. It touched my heart as I read it. I am so happy they found each other and were no alone and they both had you! What a great Valentine story. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Teri. I always appreciate your reviews. This was my Valentine's card to Fanstorians. It's not in a contest. -Bill
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Thank you for sharing it with us. I always enjoy reading your work my friend! Blessings, Teri