Chair
Free Form Contest27 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Jessica, this is an exceptional free verse. The metaphor of a missing presence that once was the centre of attention is now thin, muted whispers.
I especially liked the dangle by a thread of missing words.
I wish you great luck with the contest committee with this gem. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Jessica, this is an exceptional free verse. The metaphor of a missing presence that once was the centre of attention is now thin, muted whispers.
I especially liked the dangle by a thread of missing words.
I wish you great luck with the contest committee with this gem. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Gloria, thank you so much for this encouraging comment. I'm honored by your words!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
I love the visuals in this. It is so perfectly written. I love the way it begins when you say , "I rest in the hammock of your palm. As it sways suspended over a steep canyon." It excites me the reader. Thank you for posting this! Great job!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I love the visuals in this. It is so perfectly written. I love the way it begins when you say , "I rest in the hammock of your palm. As it sways suspended over a steep canyon." It excites me the reader. Thank you for posting this! Great job!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Jodi, I apologize for my delayed response. Thank you so much for this wonderful comment! It means a lot! Xo
Jessica
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like someone is greatly missed here and I could not get over the silence in my house when my husband died and I know I would never see him walk through the door again and smile at me. A heartfelt free write Jessica, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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This sounds like someone is greatly missed here and I could not get over the silence in my house when my husband died and I know I would never see him walk through the door again and smile at me. A heartfelt free write Jessica, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Oh, Dolly, I am so sorry. I know what you mean. My sister lived with us before she passed, and it took a long time for me to stop expecting her to walk in the door after work. Thank you for this comment, and I'm so very sorry for what you've gone through.
Xo
Jessica
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Thank you for your kind words Jessica, they mean a lot. We have to cope with grief in life when we love, we also lose, love Dolly x x x
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I am sorry you lost your sister x x x
Comment from Treischel
Your use of metaphor and simile is outstanding. Wonderful visualizations abound in this free verse poem sand pended about this vacant chair. I like the thought of being in the hammock of a hand, chained to sentence ellipses, and dangled by a thread of missing words. Sounds macabrely entangled.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Your use of metaphor and simile is outstanding. Wonderful visualizations abound in this free verse poem sand pended about this vacant chair. I like the thought of being in the hammock of a hand, chained to sentence ellipses, and dangled by a thread of missing words. Sounds macabrely entangled.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I apologize for my delayed response! Thank you, your lovely comment made my day!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Mrs. KT
Stunning emotion and imagery, Jessica!
I so appreciate what you have done here in your exceptionally well-crafted free verse.
Each line flows beautifully into the next, but the ending... whew! That's a stunner for certain!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Stunning emotion and imagery, Jessica!
I so appreciate what you have done here in your exceptionally well-crafted free verse.
Each line flows beautifully into the next, but the ending... whew! That's a stunner for certain!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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diane, thank you so much! I'm so sorry for my delayed response. I truly appreciate this encouraging comment. Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Begin Again
Too many families face that missing chair every day...losing the young, the old, the greatest love. I love how you expressed the loss...dangle by a thread of missing words and hung up on the presence in a vacant chair. Grief is a powerful thing.
Carol
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Too many families face that missing chair every day...losing the young, the old, the greatest love. I love how you expressed the loss...dangle by a thread of missing words and hung up on the presence in a vacant chair. Grief is a powerful thing.
Carol
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Carol, thank you so much for this wonderful comment. I apologize for my delayed response. Xo
Comment from Jim Wile
Often, your poetry can be so deep and thought-provoking, Jess, and enjoyable to discern your message.
I take from this a woman looking at a chair once occupied by a man who who held her in thrall but has most likely moved out of her life. But she's still hung up on him and thinking how she was never certain about their relationship. He had such power over her that she was comfortable one moment, and on edge the next, always at his mercy and never sure of herself or the extent of his commitment to her.
Chained to the things left unsaid, trying to see them in a favorable light, but never sure about him and what he really felt about her. Delighting in being one of the crowd of his followers, but hoping to be more than that with him and never being quite sure where she stood with him. And now his chair stands vacant. He is gone, yet she can't help thinking about him and what might have been.
Really well written. - Jim
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Often, your poetry can be so deep and thought-provoking, Jess, and enjoyable to discern your message.
I take from this a woman looking at a chair once occupied by a man who who held her in thrall but has most likely moved out of her life. But she's still hung up on him and thinking how she was never certain about their relationship. He had such power over her that she was comfortable one moment, and on edge the next, always at his mercy and never sure of herself or the extent of his commitment to her.
Chained to the things left unsaid, trying to see them in a favorable light, but never sure about him and what he really felt about her. Delighting in being one of the crowd of his followers, but hoping to be more than that with him and never being quite sure where she stood with him. And now his chair stands vacant. He is gone, yet she can't help thinking about him and what might have been.
Really well written. - Jim
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I truly appreciate your feedback, Meter Man, and I must admit, I find your discerning interpretations equally enjoyable!
I wrote this piece shortly after the holidays, (tweaking it some before posting) in a fit of inspiration. Initially, it was sparked by a comment my dad made to me about my sister's absence sometimes feeling like a palpable presence. During the process, I found my thoughts shifting to a predicament my cousin is currently facing, which pretty much mirrors your interpretation. The narrative inevitably veered in that direction. Thank you for always taking the time to read my stuff, Jim. I value your viewpoints Immensely!
Xo
Jess
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Just repaying the favor of your wonderful poetry, Jess.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, that's quite poem! At first, I was lost in the metaphors as I wasn't sure who the addressee was. But by the end, it was clear that the missing loved one has left a lot emotions in the vacant chair. I especially liked "I dangle by a thread
of missing words."
This reminds me of youngest daughter writing about the empty chair where her sister used to sit at meals when our oldest had gone to college.
Hope this does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Wow, that's quite poem! At first, I was lost in the metaphors as I wasn't sure who the addressee was. But by the end, it was clear that the missing loved one has left a lot emotions in the vacant chair. I especially liked "I dangle by a thread
of missing words."
This reminds me of youngest daughter writing about the empty chair where her sister used to sit at meals when our oldest had gone to college.
Hope this does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Helen! I apologize for my delayed response. I am catching up today! lol
Xo
Jess
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I'm always delayed so please don't worry, Jessica. Life keeps us busy!
Comment from Sugarray77
This is excellent poetry that flows beautifully from concept to concept. the ethereal quality permeates this read and we feel a bit disjointed until we read the last line. An very well-written verse, Jessica!
Melissa
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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This is excellent poetry that flows beautifully from concept to concept. the ethereal quality permeates this read and we feel a bit disjointed until we read the last line. An very well-written verse, Jessica!
Melissa
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Melissa! I am so sorry for my delayed response; I am catching up today! lol I truly appreciate your encouraging comment.
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I'm impressed by your metaphor-filled free verse. I like many of them "hammock of your palm", "sting of your cold, bent air", and "dangle by a thread of missing words." You really used a leap of imagination in this poem.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I'm impressed by your metaphor-filled free verse. I like many of them "hammock of your palm", "sting of your cold, bent air", and "dangle by a thread of missing words." You really used a leap of imagination in this poem.
Excellent.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I apologize for my delayed response! Thank you so much, Jasmine, for your lovely and encouraging comment! It really means a lot.
Xo
Jessica