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Emptiness

Silence sought

22 total reviews 
Comment from jake cosmos aller
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â?¢ a powerful and moving poem using emotionally charged language and traditional meter and rhyming schemes Imagery includes natural elements ("thunder clouds," "lightning bolts," "dry winds," "waters gurgling") and abstract concepts ("dreams," "prayers," "possibilities," "love," "silence").

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Jake, you covered the gamut, thank you for your comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This abecedarian, Emptiness, has the proper formatting and waxes negatively on seemingly all aspects of life which are both empty and losing light all night.

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Bill, you covered the concept well with your feedback, thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It is a pity that there is a feeling of emptiness here and you drove home your point by repeating this word. Silence forces us to contemplate our life and some may feel lonely, a poignant write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Dolly, I so appreciate your comments.
Comment from QC Poet
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Alphabetic poem is quite full of topics that can inspire more poems seemingly ready to be acted upon. That is a good starting point, next comes the will to make it happen, Thanks for sharing your alphabet poem Good Luck on your next adventure.

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    QC I do beleive these can be the start of 26 poems...I will have to unpeel the onion and see what stinks and what will not.
Comment from lyenochka
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Hi Jim! Welcome back! I thought you were focusing more on pottery than poetry. Good idea to use an abecedarian to help you compose and the refrain of emptiness. Everything is empty and vain (Ecclesiastes "all is vanity") without the Lord.

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Thank you for the welcome back. I am back in the pottery studio and dusting off my writing tablet. Had to deal with some recovery challenges that come with aging....all is well, all is good!
Comment from Mark Jackson
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Well, I am not sure if I got a message from reading this but it did feel important and certainly was written in a way I was able to enjoy the words. Good luck with dipping some more toes and I hope I get to read more.

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 10-May-2024
    My sincere thanks for you review.
Comment from patcelaw
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You have taken us all through the alphabet to show us how many things in life are just in emptiness. Without love and understanding and respect I guess all things pretty much are empty. Patricia .

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 10-May-2024
    Hi Patricia, thanks for your note.
Comment from EeanBlack
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And found. Truly you are not empty. The depths of this poem prove that. You may lack another socially acceptable way of expression, but not empty. Full in fact.

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 10-May-2024
    Good intuation. Thankls for the read and comments.
reply by EeanBlack on 10-May-2024
    Thanks for the read
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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A-Z, and you mastered it. Nothing seemed forced. I would say you nailed this getting back into writing poem. This is excellent. Please bless us with more poetry.

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 10-May-2024
    Barbara, you are so very kind. I will attempt to stick my big toe back into the river that flows with words.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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All the way to the letter Z!!! Plus you nailed Z spectacularly:

Zigzagging scorching lava
Emptiness.

I think you got more than a toe in with this...maybe a whole foot!

D

 Comment Written 10-May-2024

reply by the author on 10-May-2024
    Doug thank you, it has been awhile...sitting at my computer with a blank page.