Luxury Cruise
How good is cruising?42 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
Ah, you had me fooled. Your twisted ending caught me off guard and I had to smile. The poem itself was excellent, being written in seven quatrains with ABAB rhyming that flowed on a smooth iambic ballad meter of 8-6 tempo. Nice onomatopoeia in clang, hoot. Lots of good poetic imagery throughout. You do need a closing quotation mark after Sally in the first line.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Ah, you had me fooled. Your twisted ending caught me off guard and I had to smile. The poem itself was excellent, being written in seven quatrains with ABAB rhyming that flowed on a smooth iambic ballad meter of 8-6 tempo. Nice onomatopoeia in clang, hoot. Lots of good poetic imagery throughout. You do need a closing quotation mark after Sally in the first line.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I am glad you had a smile at the end. This was a fun poem to write. Thanks for picking up the error. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I was thoroughly impressed with your travels until I found out it was a dream of yours to do so. This poem is well-written and lends itself to a slew of visuals. It excites the mind. The end was perfect! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I was thoroughly impressed with your travels until I found out it was a dream of yours to do so. This poem is well-written and lends itself to a slew of visuals. It excites the mind. The end was perfect! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thanks John, for your review. Glad you enjoyed the poem and the twist at the end. It was fun to write. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers,
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Jacob1395
I liked the last line at the end, which was a nice twist. I love a good cruise though, a couple of years ago I did travel on the Queen Mary Two which was a great experience. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I liked the last line at the end, which was a nice twist. I love a good cruise though, a couple of years ago I did travel on the Queen Mary Two which was a great experience. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Jacob,
Thanks for doing a review. I am glad you enjoyed the twist at the end. I have now completed two cruises one of which was on the Queen Mary 2. Enjoyed it very much.
Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from bob cullen
I love your irreverence. On first read I was envious, then i saw the truth and a smile lit up my face. My envy vanished. I really enjoy humour in verse, and you sure delivered there. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I love your irreverence. On first read I was envious, then i saw the truth and a smile lit up my face. My envy vanished. I really enjoy humour in verse, and you sure delivered there. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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WOW. thanks Bob. so glad you enjoyed the poem. It was fun to write. Six stars is always welcome. More importantly, take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Boogienights
A twist ending! I love how descriptive this poem is, l too would like to go on a cruise. An amazing way to travel, even though l can't swim and it's a little scary. Thanks for a fun poem.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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A twist ending! I love how descriptive this poem is, l too would like to go on a cruise. An amazing way to travel, even though l can't swim and it's a little scary. Thanks for a fun poem.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you liked the twist at the end. Yes, cruising is good. Give it a go one day. No problem if you cannot swim. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from karenina
LOL////
That's the ONLY way I've taken a cruise...courtesy of photos in a pamphlet and a wallet too empty to make any of these dreams come true!
ON the other hand,thank goodness for books, for through them I've traveled the world and beyond!
Clever write!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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LOL////
That's the ONLY way I've taken a cruise...courtesy of photos in a pamphlet and a wallet too empty to make any of these dreams come true!
ON the other hand,thank goodness for books, for through them I've traveled the world and beyond!
Clever write!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Karenina,
Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, you are correct, thank goodness for books. I hope you get on a real cruise though. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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I get seasick on a Canoe...chances are slim I'll take off on a cruise...except in a book! (smile)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I've never been on a cruise. It sounds like a lot of fun.
I love the imagery in your poem. Good rhyming that doesn't sound forced and flows nicely.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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I've never been on a cruise. It sounds like a lot of fun.
I love the imagery in your poem. Good rhyming that doesn't sound forced and flows nicely.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Gypsy,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. Just a bit of fun really. I have since been on a cruise and found it to be great. Yummy food.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from papa55mike
I love taking trips online by viewing breathtaking landscapes through other's pictures. I try to visit Flickr every day. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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I love taking trips online by viewing breathtaking landscapes through other's pictures. I try to visit Flickr every day. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Mike,
Thanks for your review and I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Yes, you can pretty well travel the world on the internet these days. Great way to go and oh so cheap. Have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from RodG
I have never been on an ocean cruise, but your poem made me fantasize just like the Speaker. You give marvelous little snapshots of what you see and do and your rhymes come naturally. I really enjoyed the cruise! Rod
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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I have never been on an ocean cruise, but your poem made me fantasize just like the Speaker. You give marvelous little snapshots of what you see and do and your rhymes come naturally. I really enjoyed the cruise! Rod
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Rod,
Thanks for the review and so glad you enjoyed the cruise. Maybe you will get to the real thing soon. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Jeano
I loved this. I was wondering what cruise that was you were on. I was thinking about looking into it, you made it sound so inviting. Then, like everyone else I'm sure, I had a big laugh at the end. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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I loved this. I was wondering what cruise that was you were on. I was thinking about looking into it, you made it sound so inviting. Then, like everyone else I'm sure, I had a big laugh at the end. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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I am so glad you had a good laugh. We all need as much laughing as possible. Thanks for the review. I have since been on a few cruises. Cunard Line mainly which are headquartered at Southampton. I do sections of
World Cruises. Cannot afford the whole lot. Have a great day.
Cheers,
Barry Penfold.
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Travel agent brochures are over rated. I've been on one, Celebrity Cruise to Alaska. Since Covid, afraid to go on another. Can't even imagine being sick at sea.