Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

the first pic seems upside-down (or it could be just me lol)

ooohh i loved these lines!!!
"cuddled by ocean whispers
and the fire of our souls"
very cool imagery!

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024

The picture is a view from above, that's how it was in pinteres.

Thank you very much. 😊

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Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

I love that first line: the sun forgot us yesterday
That has to be the most original way of saying it was cloudy that I've ever heard!

Typo: to kept us warm (keep)

You say this is the man's POV. I've never met that man (sigh)

Really beautiful. Thanks for sharing! Julie

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 Comment Written 30-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024

Thank you very much. 😊

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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

A lovely, romantic verse! Always enjoy that contrast between the cold of the weather and the fire of passion and love. A sweet reference in "the sun forgot us." And the idea of being "breaded in sand" is delightfully evocative, giving birth to the poem. An excellent read, Gypsy. Thanks for sharing Debbie. Small edit "to ke(ep) us warm"

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 Comment Written 30-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024

I corrected keep , thank you!

Thank you very much. 😊

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