Life's Twisted Road
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Comment from royowen
So, that is the problem, ah I was just thinking of the attractive quarter back, and the stealing of the tablets, and how is Nat's grandmother going? Well.done Carol a high class tale, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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So, that is the problem, ah I was just thinking of the attractive quarter back, and the stealing of the tablets, and how is Nat's grandmother going? Well.done Carol a high class tale, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Trouble of allshapes and sizes await these girls. Each with a different road to travel. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Hugs, Carol
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Well present Carol, great food for thought.
Comment from karenina
Ah...."tale as old as time....). (Borrowing from Beauty and the Beast)
Pregnant! As if "protection" would be harder to get one's hands on than vapes or oxy!
Sadly, I can't say this doesn't ring true.
There are a whole lot of kids running circles around any mild attempt to discipline them.
This is going to get interesting!
one little funny character jumped in here:
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"But Nat â?" I didn't think you had enough money yet."
Oxy! For arthritis! I wish my doc were more empathic!
Karenina
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Ah...."tale as old as time....). (Borrowing from Beauty and the Beast)
Pregnant! As if "protection" would be harder to get one's hands on than vapes or oxy!
Sadly, I can't say this doesn't ring true.
There are a whole lot of kids running circles around any mild attempt to discipline them.
This is going to get interesting!
one little funny character jumped in here:
*
"But Nat â?" I didn't think you had enough money yet."
Oxy! For arthritis! I wish my doc were more empathic!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Hello, dear friend
Hope life is treating you better and your health has improved. I think of you often.... in between my life's curve balls lol. Thanks for the kind review. I appreciate your time as always.
Hugs, Carol
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Life is a challenge but beats the alternative, so we keep on swimming in the deep end...
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This certainly comes to a dramatic moment. You might name who is speaking in a few more times but otherwise the only other problem I see is the word misplaced is not spelled missed placed. These girls do sound very like modern teens and you have done a good job of beginning to separate their characters and make them more individual.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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This certainly comes to a dramatic moment. You might name who is speaking in a few more times but otherwise the only other problem I see is the word misplaced is not spelled missed placed. These girls do sound very like modern teens and you have done a good job of beginning to separate their characters and make them more individual.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Carol. Three friends with different thoughts on life and different paths to walk. Thanks for pointing out my error and for reading the story. I appreciate it very much.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Teri7
These are very well written chapters. What a surprise that she is pregnant. That is something most girls do not want to hear. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. I look forward to the next chapter. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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These are very well written chapters. What a surprise that she is pregnant. That is something most girls do not want to hear. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. I look forward to the next chapter. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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It willl be a rocky road for Gabby and later for her friends. I believe Gabby will make the right choices but it won't be easy. As for Natasha, she believes the world is her oyster and she deserves to have what ever she wants. Sad!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a bombshell this is. Gabby is pregnant. This will them a very different kind of Three Musketeers. I saw the movie before and loved it. I can't wait to read your version.
Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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What a bombshell this is. Gabby is pregnant. This will them a very different kind of Three Musketeers. I saw the movie before and loved it. I can't wait to read your version.
Well done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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It's going to be a rocky road for all three girls...and they will have to make decisions that will affect their entire lives. Thanks for reviewing.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
"Three heads are better than one." Uh, well, sometimes that might be right. But other times three heads might get you into three times as much trouble. At least that was the way it was when I was young. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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"Three heads are better than one." Uh, well, sometimes that might be right. But other times three heads might get you into three times as much trouble. At least that was the way it was when I was young. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Sorry for my delay in thanking you, my friend. Life threw another curve ball and I was busy dodging it. Thanks again for reading and reviewing. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Just used my last six on your last chapter! But this one was just as worthy. I thought Gabby must be pregnant. So Natasha and Becky are stealing and dealing drugs. And Isabella is an easy prey for their theft of her jegitimate drugs. Yes, I can see why Nat is annoyed when her grandmother confronts her! Your writing skills make this an engrossing story, but a very sad one, because it's based on fact.
Wendy
Edit: " ... she missed placed them." (misplaced)
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Just used my last six on your last chapter! But this one was just as worthy. I thought Gabby must be pregnant. So Natasha and Becky are stealing and dealing drugs. And Isabella is an easy prey for their theft of her jegitimate drugs. Yes, I can see why Nat is annoyed when her grandmother confronts her! Your writing skills make this an engrossing story, but a very sad one, because it's based on fact.
Wendy
Edit: " ... she missed placed them." (misplaced)
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much for continuing to read and enjoy the story. These girls are going to face a lot of trouble and will need to make decisions they shouldn't have to deal with in their young lives. Appreciate the review as always.
Hugs, Carol