Life's Twisted Road
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Comment from Wendy G
Engrossing read, and now the pieces are starting to be filled in. Semms like Natasha is a piece of work, helping herself to her grandmother's pills. Excellent writing. It's compelling.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Engrossing read, and now the pieces are starting to be filled in. Semms like Natasha is a piece of work, helping herself to her grandmother's pills. Excellent writing. It's compelling.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Dear Wendy, how kind of you! Seems as if I can't keep up with things anymore. Life keeps throwing curve balls. I truly appreciate your time, your kindness and the glittering stars. Glad you enjoyed the story.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an excellent, faultlessly written read which kept me hooked all the way through, even though, I'm afraid, I'm a bit new to the book. We obviously don't know what is causing the sickness yet, then, with poor old Gabby. But that was quite an episode and I could imagine every retch:( But it looks like these girls are going to be very actively up to some kind of rebellious mischief. Thanks for sharing this very engaging read. Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent, faultlessly written read which kept me hooked all the way through, even though, I'm afraid, I'm a bit new to the book. We obviously don't know what is causing the sickness yet, then, with poor old Gabby. But that was quite an episode and I could imagine every retch:( But it looks like these girls are going to be very actively up to some kind of rebellious mischief. Thanks for sharing this very engaging read. Debbie
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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My apologies for such a long delay in responding to your kind and generous reply. Life got in the way as it does so often. I truly appreciate your time and review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This girls sound like terrors. I'm glad I"m done with the teen age scene. My granddaughters turned out fairly square. One of a little too much like her mother hut at least they are grown now so I do have to deal with. I'm not sure I could handle it. I'm looking forward to reading it though.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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This girls sound like terrors. I'm glad I"m done with the teen age scene. My granddaughters turned out fairly square. One of a little too much like her mother hut at least they are grown now so I do have to deal with. I'm not sure I could handle it. I'm looking forward to reading it though.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I'm drawing from some real life events so you can see one of my granddaughter's path way is not to good. Her and her friends have pulled some awful stunts. Worse part about it, the parents go "Poor things" as if they are just misunderstood. Needless to say I am now on the outside and I am not trying to get back in. Thanks again for reading and giving me all those shiny stars. I truly appreciate, Beth.
Hugs, Carol
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I figured you were drawing on real experience and I'm assuming you are the grandmother thankful not in a coma. I guess the girl with the grandmother might be yours? Maybe in time she start to appreciate all you've done for her.
Comment from Carol Clark2
I'm wondering why Nat has access to her grandmother's house, her food, and her meds while Isabella is gone. Suggestion: You gotta be better by Saturday(.) I hope Becky is sensible about not using Isabella's meds. Looking forward to reading the rest of the beginning chapters. Have a great weekend. Carol
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I'm wondering why Nat has access to her grandmother's house, her food, and her meds while Isabella is gone. Suggestion: You gotta be better by Saturday(.) I hope Becky is sensible about not using Isabella's meds. Looking forward to reading the rest of the beginning chapters. Have a great weekend. Carol
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Hello, Carol - Thanks for catching the punctuation error. That's what I get when I change the wording but leave the ending. Oops!! Unfortunately, I think the girls are more interested in selling the drugs than using them. Thanks again!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent story. I can sympathize with poor Gabby. I threw up in Civics class when I was in high school, all over the poor guy who was sitting next to me, too. Good story. You still got it, girl.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Excellent story. I can sympathize with poor Gabby. I threw up in Civics class when I was in high school, all over the poor guy who was sitting next to me, too. Good story. You still got it, girl.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Oh my! That's a uncomfortable horror story to reminese about. I'd probably have died on the spot. Thanks for the kind review and encouragement. It's worth more than you will know.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
As always you can put me right in the moment of whatever you're writing. But today, I'd have to say I'd rather you hadn't altogether, since with your description of Nat blowing chunks, I could even smell it. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Sorry, but as always, this late in the week, this cowboy is out of bullets, or is that stars. Hope you're having a great weekend! :-)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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As always you can put me right in the moment of whatever you're writing. But today, I'd have to say I'd rather you hadn't altogether, since with your description of Nat blowing chunks, I could even smell it. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Sorry, but as always, this late in the week, this cowboy is out of bullets, or is that stars. Hope you're having a great weekend! :-)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Ric for your generous and kind remarks. Never worry about the star count because your words and smile are worth more than the glitter.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
Okay! So, pregnancy seems to be the first guess, although I know you love to throw curve balls. (smile) And these gals have a bit of a wild streak, don't they? About to sell drugs to earn money for dresses.
My only suggestion would be:
" The acid taste coated her throat again, dangerously suggesting it was about to spew out of her mouth." (I don't think the acid TASTE is about to spew....)
So glad you're wowing us with your writing again!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Okay! So, pregnancy seems to be the first guess, although I know you love to throw curve balls. (smile) And these gals have a bit of a wild streak, don't they? About to sell drugs to earn money for dresses.
My only suggestion would be:
" The acid taste coated her throat again, dangerously suggesting it was about to spew out of her mouth." (I don't think the acid TASTE is about to spew....)
So glad you're wowing us with your writing again!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you, my dear. I corrected the sentence to read "an acidic slime coated her throat." I appreciate the suggestion.
Yes, I've unfortunately discovered that this generation of teenagers aren't anywhere near the same realm of living as I am. And their parents patronize them and reward them for some strange actions which should have landed them in hot water. Thanks for reading and for your kindness.
Hugs, Carol
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Kids want participation trophies for waking up in the morning!
No wonder so many are derailing!
Comment from royowen
Wow what has Nat done? Stolen her grandmother's medication while she in the hospital receiving treatment, and it's possible that money isn't a problem because?!? You haven't lost any of your writing skillls Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Wow what has Nat done? Stolen her grandmother's medication while she in the hospital receiving treatment, and it's possible that money isn't a problem because?!? You haven't lost any of your writing skillls Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Roy. I've been so nervous about returning, but it helps a lot when I get comments like yours. It's been a good day and I'm putting the finishing touches on Chap. 4 It went much easier. Lots of stuff going on with these girls. Thanks for reading. Hugs, Carol
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It had me transfixed Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm wondering if Gabby's pregnant. No matter, these girls are up to no good and it's oblivious. I'm enjoying this story and you're doing a great job of telling it. I couldn't find any way to improve this post.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I'm wondering if Gabby's pregnant. No matter, these girls are up to no good and it's oblivious. I'm enjoying this story and you're doing a great job of telling it. I couldn't find any way to improve this post.
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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"Sherlock, I presume?" There's a lot of trouble going on between these three girls. I am thankful for your review and for your encouragement.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Allieas
I'm just jumping in here, but I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Your characters are well developed, the pacing is easy and flows well, and your descriptions and dialogue felt realistic. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I'm just jumping in here, but I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Your characters are well developed, the pacing is easy and flows well, and your descriptions and dialogue felt realistic. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Hello, Allieas - Welcome to my story. Luckily you haven't missed a lot. Isabella, the grandmother, confronted Natasha and ended up unconscious. She was rushed to the hospital but her "spirit" was confronted by Peter and she was sent back for unfinished business. This chapter was how the story unraveled. Thanks so much for stopping by and I hope you continue to follow my efforts.
Hugs, Carol