The wind
A short coronavirus lament20 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a charming entry for this contest! Your meter and rhyme are excellent, but it is the imagery your poem evokes that is such a delight. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with this gem.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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What a charming entry for this contest! Your meter and rhyme are excellent, but it is the imagery your poem evokes that is such a delight. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with this gem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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Thank you Dawn, I?m so glad you like it. It?s wonderful to be able to reach people around the world through this platform and hear their thoughts.
With my very best wishes
Caroline
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is another great one that I enjoyed, Caroline! Beautifully metered and rhymed (a favourite verse form of mine). The sentiments are elegantly expressed without getting overly sentimental whilst using the metaphor of wind as a means of sending your feelings to loved ones. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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This is another great one that I enjoyed, Caroline! Beautifully metered and rhymed (a favourite verse form of mine). The sentiments are elegantly expressed without getting overly sentimental whilst using the metaphor of wind as a means of sending your feelings to loved ones. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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Hi Debbie,
yes it?s my favourite verse form too, although I?m determined to step out of my comfort zone and try some more! I always try to steer away from too much sentimentality so comments on this will always be very welcome.
Best wishes Debbie
Caroline
Comment from royowen
The wind, the seas, sunsets, and rises, the clouds and nature in general are brilliant metaphors for what goes on in life and beyond, what would do without them, this is no exception, beautifully written my friend, great entry, blessings. Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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The wind, the seas, sunsets, and rises, the clouds and nature in general are brilliant metaphors for what goes on in life and beyond, what would do without them, this is no exception, beautifully written my friend, great entry, blessings. Roy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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They are indeed Roy! And it?s so much fun to choose the words to represent this.
Thanks so much for your review Roy.
With best wishes
Caroline
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Most welcome
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
welcome to fanstory! I hope you enjoy your stay!
That said,
You put to good use the time our governments locked us up.
I'm a loner so being on my own didn't weigh on me( the virus freaked me out instead)
Humans are social creatures and peoples social lives shrank over night and it was a nightmare for most.
Parents could not go visit their elders, kids teens missed their friends.
I love the idea of you asking the wind to deliver a kiss to those that you were missing during Covid lockdowns.
I love the artwork you provided , it's what made me initially want to check out the poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Ciao!
welcome to fanstory! I hope you enjoy your stay!
That said,
You put to good use the time our governments locked us up.
I'm a loner so being on my own didn't weigh on me( the virus freaked me out instead)
Humans are social creatures and peoples social lives shrank over night and it was a nightmare for most.
Parents could not go visit their elders, kids teens missed their friends.
I love the idea of you asking the wind to deliver a kiss to those that you were missing during Covid lockdowns.
I love the artwork you provided , it's what made me initially want to check out the poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the great review and sharing your thoughts about the imagery. I loved writing it, it was such a turbulent time and such a shock to have our freedom curtailed. I hope you made it through the time with the virus unscathed too. Thanks re the artwork - glad you can see it - it appears some people can?t.
Thanks again and very best wishes.
Caroline
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Very good writing here. I loved the cadence of it.
Your picture did not show up. Pinterest offers free pictures and they have tons on anything you can think of. They only ask you mention where your picture came from in your authors notes. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Very good writing here. I loved the cadence of it.
Your picture did not show up. Pinterest offers free pictures and they have tons on anything you can think of. They only ask you mention where your picture came from in your authors notes. Karen
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thanks Karen, I really appreciate your review. Strange about the photo - I can see it on my laptop. I?ll see if I can change it and add a different one - thanks so much.
Best wishes
Caroline
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Sometimes they disappear for no reason, It is best to preview your work at least once before submission. Karen :-)
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Comment from Janet Foor
Covid was devastating for many people but it seems you channeled your lament into a poem of how you dealt with the virus. Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Covid was devastating for many people but it seems you channeled your lament into a poem of how you dealt with the virus. Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thanks Janet, much appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to review.
Best wishes
Caroline
Comment from Sally Law
This is such a lovely, sweet poem inspired by thoughts during the Covid lockdown. I wrote a novella with Covid, LOL. Sometimes I felt like prefacing the chapter with my symptoms for the day, but I didn't. I just kept on. FaceTime with my grandchildren was really a blessing. Much like the whispers on the wind. Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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This is such a lovely, sweet poem inspired by thoughts during the Covid lockdown. I wrote a novella with Covid, LOL. Sometimes I felt like prefacing the chapter with my symptoms for the day, but I didn't. I just kept on. FaceTime with my grandchildren was really a blessing. Much like the whispers on the wind. Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you Sally, for your review, Covid did encourage us to develop our creative talents didn?t it? I hope you did something with your novella? FT was great but nothing like a real hug!
Thanks again.
Best wishes
Caroline
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Most welcome. Oh yes, I have six published books and three Audible books. I'm on my eighth crime fiction book on FanStory. My eyesight is declining to the point I'll be switching to poetry more this year. It's getting harder to write a book. Each chapter takes about 30 hours a week. I love poetry too so it's all good.
Blessings,
Sal :))
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Wow! This is incredible Sally, I shall definitely look those up (when I have worked out all the nuances of how this platform works!) Thanks again, best wishes Caroline
Comment from lancellot
This is a very nice poem, and the theme of missing and long to share with ones' friends is an appealing one, especially for FanStory members.
I do think, although there are no rules, that the poem would benefit from more separated and defined stanzas of four lines, with a space between each stanza. Also, I recommend not beginning a continued sentence/ line with a capital letter. Judges can be picky.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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This is a very nice poem, and the theme of missing and long to share with ones' friends is an appealing one, especially for FanStory members.
I do think, although there are no rules, that the poem would benefit from more separated and defined stanzas of four lines, with a space between each stanza. Also, I recommend not beginning a continued sentence/ line with a capital letter. Judges can be picky.
Good luck.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Ooh good tips, thanks Lancellot. I very much appreciate your review. Thank you.
Best wishes
Caroline
Comment from Wy Jung
This is a beautiful and well-written poem. It perfectly captures that time. I wrote one of my own that wasn't quite as beautiful, it was a little more frantic and silly, but reading this, I am reminded of what that time did to us as 'creatives'. So much art was made during that short era.
The lines below were my favorite. It truly felt like that.
And we each one is solitary,
Confined in our own jar,
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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This is a beautiful and well-written poem. It perfectly captures that time. I wrote one of my own that wasn't quite as beautiful, it was a little more frantic and silly, but reading this, I am reminded of what that time did to us as 'creatives'. So much art was made during that short era.
The lines below were my favorite. It truly felt like that.
And we each one is solitary,
Confined in our own jar,
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review and thank you for comparing favourably with your own - it?s always challenging to do that isn?t it?!
I know a number of people who took up various creative pursuits and are now doing amazing things - there were benefits despite being stuck in our own jars!
With my best wishes
Caroline
Comment from Gunner Lil
A great job of writing this poem.
It is an easy read and has a good flow and pace.
A picture of some sort may help with the contest.
Thank you and good luck!
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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A great job of writing this poem.
It is an easy read and has a good flow and pace.
A picture of some sort may help with the contest.
Thank you and good luck!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you Gunner Lil, I really appreciate your review. I did add a photo, is it not showing? Or did you mean that I should pick one which is more themed to the poem?
Many thanks and best wishes
Caroline
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Picture is not showing up. But still great work!
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Thank you! I need to check why the pic isn?t showing - some people can see it - I?ll check with Tom.
