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Miranda's Trouble In Paradise

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Miranda tries to find Dougie.

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Comment from royowen
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So it seems that Dougie really is in danger, and the surrounding atmospheric sound is danger, but from whence the danger will come is a trifle uncertain, I think you're onto a winner, well done Gretchen, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much. I have no idea where this is going. Gretchen
reply by royowen on 26-Jan-2024
    Wow
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I think it is best to say nothing in this situation as not admitting to what you know is not lying is it? Ha ha ha, another fine chapter and it doesn't sound like things will end well for Dougie, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
    It could ruin her relationship with Waylon if he finds out she's been withholding information. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
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This a terrible situation for her to be in, and I can understand her distress, caught in the middle of what is potentially a very dangerous situation. Excellent story, very relatable, as we all face difficulties where we feel cornered, but in other ways. Enjoying it a lot.
Wendy
Edits: He let's go a sigh (lets)
(someone whos happy to assist as much as score), (who's, short for "who is")

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
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Just keep quiet and see what transpires. No need to stir anything up right now. Something's up. I just feel it. Great story. I hope everyone comes through this okay.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Yvonne . I'm glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
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This is still one of my favourite stories. I love all the new angles you come up with. Hopefully, I will give you some stuff of mine to read. Do you remember Bob Hartson? Now passed on, murder mystery writer I forget his FS name. He encouraged me to do some fiction. Never have. May never get there.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
    It's never to late to start. Lol. As long as there is lead in your pencil and blank paper you've still got time. Thank you for this awesome review. Glad you are still enjoying this story. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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I enjoyed your chapter. It's moving right along. The plot is intriguing and you have interesting characters...well developed. I wonder what Dougie is up to.

Well done.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by
reason." - Novalis

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
    Thank you. I think Dougie was being used and left holding the "empty" bag. I appreciate your nice review. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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I agree erase him from the earth. Don't tell Waylon he called. He might find out later, but give him peace while you can. But, the again, if he wants to be thought of as dead, who is leaving the beer bottles?
Don't tell me, write some more! Karen

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 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
    The beer bottles might be just coincidence ... or not. They haven't found a body so Waylon has no proof that his dad is deceased. He would need that physical piece of the puzzle to get closure. Thanks so much, Karen. Gretchen
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 21-Jan-2024
    I will keep reading. And, coincidence, my Aunt Fanny!
    :-) Karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Nice movement... the story, not the basketball.
Error-free writing. Good work.
This chapter has some good, credible dialogue in it.
Best wishes.

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 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Wayne. I appreciate this. Gretchen