Anzac Day
A tribute to military personnel19 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this rhymed two-line poem. I thought you did a good job with your 'd' consonance with crowd, stand, bowed. And the internal rhyme of crowd/ bowed and the end rhyme of erect/respect is great. For some reason I really want to change 'stand' to 'stands." Is 'crowd' considered a collective noun or a plural noun? Good luck in that contest!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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I liked reading this rhymed two-line poem. I thought you did a good job with your 'd' consonance with crowd, stand, bowed. And the internal rhyme of crowd/ bowed and the end rhyme of erect/respect is great. For some reason I really want to change 'stand' to 'stands." Is 'crowd' considered a collective noun or a plural noun? Good luck in that contest!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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That's a very interesting question! Thank you for your feedback! :)
Comment from Sugarray77
Navada, your short and meaningful poem is wonderful. I enjoyed the depth of feeling you included. Thank you for sharing this important occasion with us! It's a wonderful memorial poem.
Melissa
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Navada, your short and meaningful poem is wonderful. I enjoyed the depth of feeling you included. Thank you for sharing this important occasion with us! It's a wonderful memorial poem.
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Spitfire
Well done with both end rhyme and inner rhyme : crowd and bowed. Also alliteration with solemn and stand. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Appreciate the notes too.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Well done with both end rhyme and inner rhyme : crowd and bowed. Also alliteration with solemn and stand. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Appreciate the notes too.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your perceptive review! :)
Comment from jim vecchio
Thanki you, not only for an effective use of two lines, but for educating me about an important day I had not known of previously. I will try to remember April 25 as long as my life goes on.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thanki you, not only for an effective use of two lines, but for educating me about an important day I had not known of previously. I will try to remember April 25 as long as my life goes on.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Much appreciated! :)
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As I appreciate your words!
Comment from jmdg1954
In so few words you have paid the utmost respect to those who serve, served and given their life in the military. I as well share those feelings.
Your poem has a fine internal and concluding rhyme.
Well presented!
John
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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In so few words you have paid the utmost respect to those who serve, served and given their life in the military. I as well share those feelings.
Your poem has a fine internal and concluding rhyme.
Well presented!
John
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, John! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fine words to pay tribute to those soldiers who fought and died, a wonderful few words of remembrance here, much enjoyed, a fine two lines for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Fine words to pay tribute to those soldiers who fought and died, a wonderful few words of remembrance here, much enjoyed, a fine two lines for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Dolly! :)
Comment from Wendy G
That is excellent - you have internal as well as end rhymes, plus you have spoken on a topic dear to my heart. The image supports your words well. Wishing you the best for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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That is excellent - you have internal as well as end rhymes, plus you have spoken on a topic dear to my heart. The image supports your words well. Wishing you the best for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Wendy! I have had family members in the military, so Anzac Day has always been important to us too. :)
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is well done. For such a tiny format, you have managed to evoke emotion, use internal and end rhyme well, and tell a story with your words, not relying on the picture. Still, you also chose great artwork.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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This is well done. For such a tiny format, you have managed to evoke emotion, use internal and end rhyme well, and tell a story with your words, not relying on the picture. Still, you also chose great artwork.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Dawn - I really appreciate your comments! :)
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from lyenochka
I don't know where Chrissy710 is but she always writes about ANZAC day. And your essence poem is perfectly constructed with the internal and end rhymes! Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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I don't know where Chrissy710 is but she always writes about ANZAC day. And your essence poem is perfectly constructed with the internal and end rhymes! Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your positive feedback - you are always so supportive and it is appreciated! :)
