Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Letter"Young girl with special abilities.
20 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh dear, such a sad ending and sounding as if Heddy's brother (?) has been either seriously injured or killed. Although, if killed, one would think the information would have come from a more official source. I'm really enjoying this lovely escape you're giving the reader and particularly the strong rapport between Heddy and her grandmother (in turn contrasting with the rather more restrained and less animated relationship with her mother) This is a truly magical read which hooks me in every time. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Oh dear, such a sad ending and sounding as if Heddy's brother (?) has been either seriously injured or killed. Although, if killed, one would think the information would have come from a more official source. I'm really enjoying this lovely escape you're giving the reader and particularly the strong rapport between Heddy and her grandmother (in turn contrasting with the rather more restrained and less animated relationship with her mother) This is a truly magical read which hooks me in every time. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm glad you enjoyed this. I think Heddy realizes her mother is fragile. Nonni was more down to earth. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear! We don't get to find out how badly he's been hurt. I hope it's not serious. But the way you have ended this, does tend to make me think it is.
This is another wonderful chapter, my friend, I'm enjoying the non-stop read. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Oh dear! We don't get to find out how badly he's been hurt. I hope it's not serious. But the way you have ended this, does tend to make me think it is.
This is another wonderful chapter, my friend, I'm enjoying the non-stop read. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much. I have no idea if he is critical or dictated it. I will find out when you do. Lol. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This letter isn't at all good, is it? I really like this story and you're doing a great job writing it. Thank you for sharing it with us.
I stomp my foot on the step as I sit down. (you can omit, 'down', it's understood)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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This letter isn't at all good, is it? I really like this story and you're doing a great job writing it. Thank you for sharing it with us.
I stomp my foot on the step as I sit down. (you can omit, 'down', it's understood)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I'm not sure if he's critical or just dictated the letter. I'll know when you do. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Great chapter, Gretchen!
The hanger in this is perfect and has us believing he may be deceased. I'm considering the fact that Nonni would have given some foreshadowing for the reader, so I'm guessing his life may be in peril but not dead? Perhaps?
Great story! I'm hooked! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Great chapter, Gretchen!
The hanger in this is perfect and has us believing he may be deceased. I'm considering the fact that Nonni would have given some foreshadowing for the reader, so I'm guessing his life may be in peril but not dead? Perhaps?
Great story! I'm hooked! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thanks, John. He isn't dead but I'm not sure if he's critical or just dictated the letter. I'll find out about the same time as you. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice ending to the chapter.
This is very well written. You allow us to feel like Heddy is a real person. I like that Nonni doesn't admonish her for speaking with the man.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Nice ending to the chapter.
This is very well written. You allow us to feel like Heddy is a real person. I like that Nonni doesn't admonish her for speaking with the man.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Nonni is more like a conscience. At least in my mind. A spirit who let's Heddy do what she wants but guides her. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Navada
Oh dear. This situation affected so many families all around the world. Let's hope for the sake of his family that Willis recovers. I continue to enjoy Heddy's interactions with her grandmother.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Oh dear. This situation affected so many families all around the world. Let's hope for the sake of his family that Willis recovers. I continue to enjoy Heddy's interactions with her grandmother.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you for this awesome review. Nonni and Heddy are a good team. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I love the way you capture the way a little girl thinks and speaks. Especially the part about running to meet her father and being able to receive his hug unharmed, unlike most people. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I love the way you capture the way a little girl thinks and speaks. Especially the part about running to meet her father and being able to receive his hug unharmed, unlike most people. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Tom. My father passed when I was thirteen. I remember thinking he was larger than life. I'm trying to have Heddy see her father the way I remember seeing mine. I really appreciate the six. Gretchen
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Hello Gretchen, I'm so sorry to hear that your dad passed at such a crucial time in your life. He missed out on so many high points in your life I'm sure.
Comment from jmdg1954
Oh boy... the dreaded letter a momma receives when her boy is off at war.
I enjoy your style of writing. I don't know how to explain it other than saying, it's quiet, soothing and makes me feel like I'm right there enjoying the play.
Now I have to wait to find out what happened to the son.
John
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Oh boy... the dreaded letter a momma receives when her boy is off at war.
I enjoy your style of writing. I don't know how to explain it other than saying, it's quiet, soothing and makes me feel like I'm right there enjoying the play.
Now I have to wait to find out what happened to the son.
John
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, John. I'm glad you like this. I was aiming for exactly the description you gave my writing. So I'm thrilled. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Heddy is a very fortunate young lady, she's got a momma and a dad who love her dearly, not to mention a dead Nonni who watches over her with old fashioned wisdom and support, as nonni's do, my grands have the, I wonder why momma is crying, not good news, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Heddy is a very fortunate young lady, she's got a momma and a dad who love her dearly, not to mention a dead Nonni who watches over her with old fashioned wisdom and support, as nonni's do, my grands have the, I wonder why momma is crying, not good news, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Willis was injured but I'm not sure how badly. I'll find out when you do. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
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Good read
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent chapter again, but leaving the reader with so many questions. Well done! I do enjoy the realism and authenticity of the two parenting styles and the relationships with Heddy. Always good.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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An excellent chapter again, but leaving the reader with so many questions. Well done! I do enjoy the realism and authenticity of the two parenting styles and the relationships with Heddy. Always good.
Wendy
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. This was how I was raised. My dad was superman and my mom had rules. I broke most. Lol. I'm glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen