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Comment from Douglas Goff
Beautifully written. You really captured a magical moment here.
I also learned a new word. Would be a great word for alliteration!
I just wrote a piece called The Edge, although it has a different vibe.
This is a great piece to go to sleep after. Have an awesome night!
Douglas
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Beautifully written. You really captured a magical moment here.
I also learned a new word. Would be a great word for alliteration!
I just wrote a piece called The Edge, although it has a different vibe.
This is a great piece to go to sleep after. Have an awesome night!
Douglas
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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I'll look for your poem. Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent five stars review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from Navada
I particularly liked your reference to a "rock of time" and the fact that it is "uncomplaining/with the heavy weight of being". This is something we have probably all felt at one time or another, some more than others, and hopefully we have all also felt the relief of a huge weight lifting off our shoulders as well. Thank you so much for sharing this.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I particularly liked your reference to a "rock of time" and the fact that it is "uncomplaining/with the heavy weight of being". This is something we have probably all felt at one time or another, some more than others, and hopefully we have all also felt the relief of a huge weight lifting off our shoulders as well. Thank you so much for sharing this.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Navada. Have a wonderful weekend
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Comment from Brenda Strauser
Both pictures are beautiful. The words connect with the pictures. The girl looks si peaceful. Happy and free. I really enjoyed this. Great job. Written well
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Both pictures are beautiful. The words connect with the pictures. The girl looks si peaceful. Happy and free. I really enjoyed this. Great job. Written well
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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You two. You have beautiful poems
Comment from Julie Helms
I learn so much from you with new styles of poetry. This one strikes me as almost surrealism. It also feels like it is building... From the first stanza being gentle...dancing, willow leaves, clouds float. The second stanza builds with casting a rock, watch it drown, heavy weight, flowing stream and gurgling trout. Then the final stanza bursts forth with flaming passions and rebelling. It's very captivating. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I learn so much from you with new styles of poetry. This one strikes me as almost surrealism. It also feels like it is building... From the first stanza being gentle...dancing, willow leaves, clouds float. The second stanza builds with casting a rock, watch it drown, heavy weight, flowing stream and gurgling trout. Then the final stanza bursts forth with flaming passions and rebelling. It's very captivating. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was like being caught up in a very vivid dream. The sights and actions that hover between realistic and theatrical. I liked the fantasy feel to this. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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This was like being caught up in a very vivid dream. The sights and actions that hover between realistic and theatrical. I liked the fantasy feel to this. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from Daylily
I have never heard of this form before and it is very beautiful. You have written mystical lines that coordinate well with the gorgeous artwork. Your choice of color scheme is very good as well. Smiles, Lily
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I have never heard of this form before and it is very beautiful. You have written mystical lines that coordinate well with the gorgeous artwork. Your choice of color scheme is very good as well. Smiles, Lily
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs