The Night Santa Came to Dinner.
Santa has many skills.16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely and most engaging story and one which would appeal to children (and oldies) alike. Sometimes there are full stops missed at the ends of sentences, but otherwise really well written. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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A lovely and most engaging story and one which would appeal to children (and oldies) alike. Sometimes there are full stops missed at the ends of sentences, but otherwise really well written. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Thanks Wendy. I will do another edit and see if I can catch all the necessary full stops. Hope you had a wonderful Christmas. Take care and have a wonderful New Year.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice Christmas story. Very well written, too.
Just a couple tiny hiccups:
tomorrow nights dinner. - (night's)
at your Schools Annual Sports Carnival. - (School's)
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Very nice Christmas story. Very well written, too.
Just a couple tiny hiccups:
tomorrow nights dinner. - (night's)
at your Schools Annual Sports Carnival. - (School's)
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Wayne,
Thanks for the review and also the tips as to some errors. Very helpful thanks. I trust you had a great Christmas and I wish you all the best for the New Year. Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
While it will never rival "Guess Who's coming to Dinner" with Hepburn and Tracy, this is a nice little story. Good luck in the contest. I remember when I was new here and My Mom died in August, how folks I did not even know dropped me lines. people tell me who is sick, or had someone pass, and I send the news along because at these moments kind words, prayers, poems, songs, and stories can give us hope and joy. Please add to the new book for Kathy, Bill Schott's wife. Happy Holidays. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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While it will never rival "Guess Who's coming to Dinner" with Hepburn and Tracy, this is a nice little story. Good luck in the contest. I remember when I was new here and My Mom died in August, how folks I did not even know dropped me lines. people tell me who is sick, or had someone pass, and I send the news along because at these moments kind words, prayers, poems, songs, and stories can give us hope and joy. Please add to the new book for Kathy, Bill Schott's wife. Happy Holidays. Karen
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Karen,
Thanks so much for your review. Yes, my story will not rival "Guess Who is coming to dinner?" but I am glad you still enjoyed it. Trust you had a good Christmas and thanks for the tip on Kathy , Bill Schott's wife. I read his work quite often.
Hope you have a great New Year. We will message again no doubt.
Take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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You are welcome. I hope you add a chapter to the book "For Kathy" you write well and it will be appreciated. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, this is a very sweet story, well expressed with excellent dialogue and an intriguing sense of mystery as we wonder what's in store for Sally when this visitor arrives. In the end, what makes Christmas for our protagonist is not material gifts but the excitement of her mother having another man in her life. This is an enjoyable read, perfectly fitting the brief. Well done, Barry, and good luck! Debbie
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Well, this is a very sweet story, well expressed with excellent dialogue and an intriguing sense of mystery as we wonder what's in store for Sally when this visitor arrives. In the end, what makes Christmas for our protagonist is not material gifts but the excitement of her mother having another man in her life. This is an enjoyable read, perfectly fitting the brief. Well done, Barry, and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Debbie,
Thanks so much for your review. I am glad you enjoyed the story. I am pretty happy in the way it turned out. I hope you enjoy New Year. Take care and keep well.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from patcelaw
This is quite good and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you a very merry Christmas and a very happy and prosperous new year. Continue to write and continue to share with us. I am sure we will all enjoy your work.
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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This is quite good and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you a very merry Christmas and a very happy and prosperous new year. Continue to write and continue to share with us. I am sure we will all enjoy your work.
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Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your kind review. I also wish you a prosperous New Year and hope that you had an enjoyable Christmas. Very glad you enjoyed the story. Take care and I will continue to write.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Great Christmas story, Barry. We all need stories like that when all the world around us is going crazy. This story should do very well in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Great Christmas story, Barry. We all need stories like that when all the world around us is going crazy. This story should do very well in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Paul,
Thank you so much for your six star review. Yes, the world is going crazy but hopefully we can inject some hope and happiness into it through our writings. Hope you have a wonderful New Year. Take care and thanks again.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
