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Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "bandaged in words unspoken"keep your hope alive....
27 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed the first three couplets but not the word bandage as it seems to refer to "windows of my soul", rather than the memories of the dreams. I wondered about "I peer through them ...." This would imply confusion, inability to see clearly. However, it is your poem, and so please feel free to ignore. I really like the theme and creativity of your poem and send you best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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I enjoyed the first three couplets but not the word bandage as it seems to refer to "windows of my soul", rather than the memories of the dreams. I wondered about "I peer through them ...." This would imply confusion, inability to see clearly. However, it is your poem, and so please feel free to ignore. I really like the theme and creativity of your poem and send you best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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hmm... the bandage refers to the mind, heart, soul... but i see what you mean and will play with it after the voting has ended. thank you wendy 😊
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I'm glad you weren't offended, that's good.
W
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and you still had my vote....
Comment from BermyBye50
This is a exceptional free verse entry for the 34-syllable contest. Your carefully crafted short poem of 4 stanzas are infused with a medley of emotional verses that speak to the human experience of lost love culminating in the last line "in words unspoken." This is the number one contender in this contest.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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This is a exceptional free verse entry for the 34-syllable contest. Your carefully crafted short poem of 4 stanzas are infused with a medley of emotional verses that speak to the human experience of lost love culminating in the last line "in words unspoken." This is the number one contender in this contest.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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cool! sure hope so LOL! thank you eugene 😊
Comment from Tom Horonzy
A well deserved win
Congrats
Considering our limitation in regards to syllables, you did as well as a person could with the thirty-four allowed from beginning to end. Well done and best of luck.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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A well deserved win
Congrats
Considering our limitation in regards to syllables, you did as well as a person could with the thirty-four allowed from beginning to end. Well done and best of luck.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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thank you tom 😊
Comment from Sarita Méndez
This is a very well written 34 syllables poem. A few words to express a lot, I love it.
Thank you for sharing your text.
I wish you a beautiful and joyful Christmas' day.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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This is a very well written 34 syllables poem. A few words to express a lot, I love it.
Thank you for sharing your text.
I wish you a beautiful and joyful Christmas' day.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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you too. thank you sarita 😊👍
Comment from Lisasview
I keep recounting your syllables and I keep coming up with only 33... correct me if you feel I am wrong...
Mem'ries 2
of a bro ken mind 5
lost dreams 2
of a sac red heart 5
the win dows to my soul 6
splat tered with icy rain 6
I ban dage them in word 6
un spoke en 3
32 syllabels
Lisasview
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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I keep recounting your syllables and I keep coming up with only 33... correct me if you feel I am wrong...
Mem'ries 2
of a bro ken mind 5
lost dreams 2
of a sac red heart 5
the win dows to my soul 6
splat tered with icy rain 6
I ban dage them in word 6
un spoke en 3
32 syllabels
Lisasview
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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🤔ew...let's check...
mem'ries 2
of a broken mind 5
lost dreams 2
of a scarred heart4
the windows to my soul 6
s p l a t t e r e d 2
with icy rain 4
i bandage them 4
in words unspoken 5
2,5,2,4,6,2,4,4,5 =34
whew 🤔👍
had me scared lol!
thank you lisa! 😁😎💙🖋️🦄
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All of that and I did not add it correctly
I must be nuts or tired
Xmas is taking over
Sorry!
I need to change your stars
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no worries!! math is hard!
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Still thinking how weird it is that I messed up...
And, I am so good at math...
Lisa
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it's the holiday season... lots on everyone's minds :)
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That is for sure... The main thing on mine is my upcoming (January 3) knee replacement... Too many years of running...
Merry Christmas,
Lisa
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lol! good luck!
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Thank you
Comment from Thesis
While you satisfied the requirements of the contest, I was left feeling troubled by the feelings I walked away with. It was very dark for me, and I hope this was not something that you personally have experienced.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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While you satisfied the requirements of the contest, I was left feeling troubled by the feelings I walked away with. It was very dark for me, and I hope this was not something that you personally have experienced.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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sometimes i tend to write dark things lol - never know what my mind will come up with LOL! thank you thesis 😊
Comment from Jacob1395
This is quite an emotive piece. It really brought so many images to my mind as I was reading it and I thought your writing flowed really well. I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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This is quite an emotive piece. It really brought so many images to my mind as I was reading it and I thought your writing flowed really well. I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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cool. thank you jacob 😊
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 34 syllables well
with a good topic.
-Effective imagery in each verse shows
the various ways you feel.
-The third verse about "icy rain" stands out,
and the concluding verse is also very good
showing how you try to cope with these feelings.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 34 syllables well
with a good topic.
-Effective imagery in each verse shows
the various ways you feel.
-The third verse about "icy rain" stands out,
and the concluding verse is also very good
showing how you try to cope with these feelings.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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thank you pam 😊
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You are welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
With just 34 words you've painted a picture of a mournful soul suffering from a devastating loss. Swathed in pain that is beyond words. Very well presented through tearful eyes. Another winner.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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With just 34 words you've painted a picture of a mournful soul suffering from a devastating loss. Swathed in pain that is beyond words. Very well presented through tearful eyes. Another winner.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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thank you june 😊
Comment from Navada
I really like this reflection upon the power of words and how they can be used to heal. Your choice of visual image contributes well to the atmosphere and mood of the poem as well. Good luck for the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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I really like this reflection upon the power of words and how they can be used to heal. Your choice of visual image contributes well to the atmosphere and mood of the poem as well. Good luck for the contest!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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thank you navada. may i ask why the 4 and if you have any suggestions for making it better? 🤔😊
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Whoops! That was purely accidental - I intended to give it a five, but obviously missed! I'm so sorry and thank you for pointing it out. I will update it now.
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I think what happened is that I've run out of sixes, so what I thought at a glance was a five was actually a four. Fixed now - apologies again!
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no problem! i've done that, too! 😊👍