Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Mark, this is using your imagination my friend, I rather like it, you must have had a brief thought, and then you've put ink to paper, well dine, blessings Roy

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Thanks Roy for those kind words.

I can look out my front window and see a few of my Norway Maple leaves still dotting the green - with no snow yet - lawn. The late autumn wind will change that picture soon.

Best wishes for a happy holiday season.

Mark

reply by royowen on 16-Dec-2023

Most welcome

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very well written, Kelly lune poetry. I enjoyed reading it very much and I enjoyed your presentation. It's beautiful I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May God bless you. Patricia.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Thanks for that review Patricia! Pleased you liked my overall presentation.

Mark

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Author,

Your poem-
crinkly maple leaves
paint pastures ~
wind colors canvas

Completes the proper syllable count with a fine picture. Though I don't have a pasture, I do have a significant amount of leaves which portions do look like wind blown canvas.

Good luck in the contest,
John

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Thanks John for those comments for my Kelly Lune poem.

I too do not have a pasture to gaze upon. My own yard now has but a few leaves. Some are from my Norway Maple in the front of my home. Others will disappear with the wind or may soon be covered by snow.

Mark

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

I do love Moonwillow's artwork. Your lune captures the sight and sound of a crisp autumn morning. Beautiful imagery, Mark. But the leaves here are long gone. Well done.

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 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

June,
LA few still sprinkle my lawn. The wind or snow will eventually make them disappear.

Thanks for your review.

Mark

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Indeed Fall leaves can "paint" a landscape before a gusty wind "alters [the] canvas." Nice use of alliteration in line two.
And Moonwillow's artwork is superb. I've raked up the leaves and dread the coming of snow. Rod

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 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Rod?

Just a few leaves are scattered in my yard. The wind hopefully will take care of the same. Today on my northeast corner the temp is about 10 degrees warmer than the normal high for this day. Sunny and almost 50 is a perfect day.

Thanks, as always, for support of my short stuff. I likely have used MoonWillow?s artwork previously.

Enjoy the upcoming holidays.

Mark