Hypnopompia
Wait to wake27 total reviews
Comment from estory
The interesting titled grabbed me, and the poem did not disappoint. I liked the abstract language, the vague imagery, the wavering emotions in the voice of this piece. Everything seems to be wavering between light and shadow, between day and night. There's great uncertainty in the landscape, and that seems to be a metaphor for uncertainty in a relationship. There was a lot of nice echoing effects in the free verse, nice alliteration too, and the musical effects underpinned the theme. Good use of form to articulate theme. estory
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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The interesting titled grabbed me, and the poem did not disappoint. I liked the abstract language, the vague imagery, the wavering emotions in the voice of this piece. Everything seems to be wavering between light and shadow, between day and night. There's great uncertainty in the landscape, and that seems to be a metaphor for uncertainty in a relationship. There was a lot of nice echoing effects in the free verse, nice alliteration too, and the musical effects underpinned the theme. Good use of form to articulate theme. estory
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for this incredibly insightful review. It means a great deal to me!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Navada
I really liked the description of that half-asleep, half-awake state of unreality that we experience as we slowly wake in the morning. I particularly liked your language use and your choice of alliteration to create an aesthetic sense of sound.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I really liked the description of that half-asleep, half-awake state of unreality that we experience as we slowly wake in the morning. I particularly liked your language use and your choice of alliteration to create an aesthetic sense of sound.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I really appreciate that. Thank you!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your poem, it makes me look at the dark side of life and then when you wake up, you thank God for another tomorrow. Is this kind of like a deep sleep yet you're in a daze?
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Like your poem, it makes me look at the dark side of life and then when you wake up, you thank God for another tomorrow. Is this kind of like a deep sleep yet you're in a daze?
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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It's sort of a transition phase- from asleep to awake.
Thank you!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is quite a hauntingly atmospheric free verse in which the narrator seems to be in a half-way house between sleep and waking up. Your visual is captivating and complements your words beautifully as you long for sunlight to break through your veil of consciousness. An excellent entry! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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This is quite a hauntingly atmospheric free verse in which the narrator seems to be in a half-way house between sleep and waking up. Your visual is captivating and complements your words beautifully as you long for sunlight to break through your veil of consciousness. An excellent entry! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Nicely done. Winter seems to bring out memories and gives voice to both good memories and bad, Your picture is exquisite and adds to the quality of your writing. good work. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Nicely done. Winter seems to bring out memories and gives voice to both good memories and bad, Your picture is exquisite and adds to the quality of your writing. good work. Karen
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Karen!
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You are welcome Karen
Comment from jim vecchio
Sometimes this effect is heightened when you have lost a loved one and your heart yearns for him/her. As you are in a half-dream state, you may ponder on the dream visions and partly want to return there and partly rise to reality.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Sometimes this effect is heightened when you have lost a loved one and your heart yearns for him/her. As you are in a half-dream state, you may ponder on the dream visions and partly want to return there and partly rise to reality.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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This is very true, Jim. Thank you! Xo
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I enjoy your writing. Keep on doing it!
Comment from Wendy G
That is different and interesting, exploring that time as one starts to waken but is not yet ready to waken fully. Very well written, nice alliteration and imagery. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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That is different and interesting, exploring that time as one starts to waken but is not yet ready to waken fully. Very well written, nice alliteration and imagery. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Daylily
We have no control over our dreams. When they are the bad ones, the most we can hope for is not to remember anything about them afterward. But when we do, we can strive to keep any troubling emotions from surviving in the light of day.
Your posting is an excellent study of internal reaction. Often, time is going to deal kindly with the situation, but not always. Your two concluding lines speak strongly to the reader.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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We have no control over our dreams. When they are the bad ones, the most we can hope for is not to remember anything about them afterward. But when we do, we can strive to keep any troubling emotions from surviving in the light of day.
Your posting is an excellent study of internal reaction. Often, time is going to deal kindly with the situation, but not always. Your two concluding lines speak strongly to the reader.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from Mia Twysted
This piece gave me a strange feeling. I felt fuzzy and unsure of what was being said. The note at the bottom helped to clarify things for me and then I felt it was all justified as if I was waking up as I read the poem.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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This piece gave me a strange feeling. I felt fuzzy and unsure of what was being said. The note at the bottom helped to clarify things for me and then I felt it was all justified as if I was waking up as I read the poem.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Poetry should be about words that take you somewhere else. In your case, they do. The words are free flowing and begging at the same time, yet those words also drift smoothly as if in a dreamscape. We all have experienced such a state of mind, but methinks not so eloquently. Good luck.
Kiwi
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Poetry should be about words that take you somewhere else. In your case, they do. The words are free flowing and begging at the same time, yet those words also drift smoothly as if in a dreamscape. We all have experienced such a state of mind, but methinks not so eloquently. Good luck.
Kiwi
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful comment. It made my night!
Xo