The Night
Many things can happen at Night.15 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You certainly understand the nature of fear. Then there are the fools who rush in and don't discover fear until after they did their thing. You have given fear quite an interesting personification. Darkness is certainly one of his greatest allies. This is good writing, and I didn't find any proof-reading errors.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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You certainly understand the nature of fear. Then there are the fools who rush in and don't discover fear until after they did their thing. You have given fear quite an interesting personification. Darkness is certainly one of his greatest allies. This is good writing, and I didn't find any proof-reading errors.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Carol,
Thanks for your review. Glad you liked the story as it is a little bit out of left field. Lets see where it goes as far as the competition goes. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul McFarland
This was a little different, Barry. You have kept the reader on the edge of his seat until the end. A very good ending. The personification of "Fear" was a good idea.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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This was a little different, Barry. You have kept the reader on the edge of his seat until the end. A very good ending. The personification of "Fear" was a good idea.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Paul, thanks for your review. Yes I decided to come a little bit from the left field. Something different. Lets see if it works for the competition. Hope you are well.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice drama and suspense. Personifying Fear is a novel concept. Good work.
Tonight though I will watch, waiting, - 'Though' needs separated with commas.
I am not defined by one type of appearance,I can only be described by you. - With a complete sentence on each side, a semicolon would work better.
Others have had and will have their chance later. - You need a comma after 'had'.
There are several other opportunities to tidy up comma usage. Also, there are a few instances of lost spacing after periods.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Nice drama and suspense. Personifying Fear is a novel concept. Good work.
Tonight though I will watch, waiting, - 'Though' needs separated with commas.
I am not defined by one type of appearance,I can only be described by you. - With a complete sentence on each side, a semicolon would work better.
Others have had and will have their chance later. - You need a comma after 'had'.
There are several other opportunities to tidy up comma usage. Also, there are a few instances of lost spacing after periods.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Wayne,
Thanks so much for your review and I am glad you enjoyed the story.
Thanks also for your noting of errors and possible corrections within the work. I will tend to that forthwith.
Havea great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Navada
I enjoyed your personification of fear and the horrible effects he can bring down upon people when given the opportunity. This is a creative and imaginative interpretation of the prompt and a reminder for us to confront fear when it arises. Thanks for the share and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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I enjoyed your personification of fear and the horrible effects he can bring down upon people when given the opportunity. This is a creative and imaginative interpretation of the prompt and a reminder for us to confront fear when it arises. Thanks for the share and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much for your review. I glad you enjoyed it. A little bit different in the story approach but I am quite happy with the response so far.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The writing is engaging, the pacing is well-executed, and the characters are developed with depth. "Confronting Fear" is a tale that lingers in the mind, inviting readers to reflect on their own fears and the potential for triumph in the face of adversity.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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The writing is engaging, the pacing is well-executed, and the characters are developed with depth. "Confronting Fear" is a tale that lingers in the mind, inviting readers to reflect on their own fears and the potential for triumph in the face of adversity.
Well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much for your review. I am glad you enjoyed it. A little bit out of left field, but I feel it worked pretty well. We will see how it goes in the contest. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.