Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Shoe"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from EILEEN LAW
A hard read but so well written. The poem in the beginning with the red shoe. I like the imagery for that one too. Thank you for sharing this necessary story.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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A hard read but so well written. The poem in the beginning with the red shoe. I like the imagery for that one too. Thank you for sharing this necessary story.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Jacob1395
They do seem like a good family, but I am wondering what is going to happen next, especially with the argument you had at the end of the chapter. Another well told chapter, Lea.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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They do seem like a good family, but I am wondering what is going to happen next, especially with the argument you had at the end of the chapter. Another well told chapter, Lea.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Is good question jacob! Thank you for reading along for your final review and reading. Definitely happy to see you here thank you so much again have a great day!
Comment from Jim Wile
Nothing ever comes easy for you, does it, Lea? You are approached by a wonderful, caring soul who feels your pain and wants to help you from the goodness of her heart, and her husband seems immediately against the idea. Conflict between them ensues with you at the heart of it.
I don't know how this will end up--if the shoe will drop or if it will stay with its mate--but however it goes, at least you learned there are some caring people in this world.
I'm guessing your good fortune will be short-lived because the man usually prevails in Indian culture, and that you will soon be on the road again.
Have you given much thought about whether you really need to see what's in those 12 boxes? You know it's going to be a lot of lies and unbelievable justifications for bad, selfish behavior. - Jim
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Nothing ever comes easy for you, does it, Lea? You are approached by a wonderful, caring soul who feels your pain and wants to help you from the goodness of her heart, and her husband seems immediately against the idea. Conflict between them ensues with you at the heart of it.
I don't know how this will end up--if the shoe will drop or if it will stay with its mate--but however it goes, at least you learned there are some caring people in this world.
I'm guessing your good fortune will be short-lived because the man usually prevails in Indian culture, and that you will soon be on the road again.
Have you given much thought about whether you really need to see what's in those 12 boxes? You know it's going to be a lot of lies and unbelievable justifications for bad, selfish behavior. - Jim
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Well, I should have to because it's evidence for a court. Are things that need to be found out it's going to be hard. I know most of them. I'm sure I know. But there's going to be charges and a civil suit against social services. I just have to find proper legal representation. Sure, but yeah, I do have to look at something unfortunately. So my sister ordered her own set we will do it together. Thank you for your concern Jim. I plan on keeping a big box of tissues by while I read it. I appreciate you your fine review and your great rating. I really hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from JSD
Still hoping and wishing for release and relief for you, dear Lea. Why is it that men ruin everything????? Just watched the film about the reporters who exposed Harvey Weinstein. Great film. Called, 'She Said'.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Still hoping and wishing for release and relief for you, dear Lea. Why is it that men ruin everything????? Just watched the film about the reporters who exposed Harvey Weinstein. Great film. Called, 'She Said'.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I don't have to watch today. I have no way associate one man's actions with another. I have met and spoken with many nice and kind hearted meant like yourself. Yeah, no I don't have any specific grudge towards men. In particular, I don't prepunish as they say.
Everyone gets a clean slate. Thank you very much again. I'm happy to see you here. I hope you are well!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hope this is not more trouble brewing for you Lea, few people do things for no reward just to help a stranger and it sounds like something awful is about to happen, I just hope I am wrong. It is a pity that your Mother did not want to take responsibility for her own children, I would do anything for mine. Another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I hope this is not more trouble brewing for you Lea, few people do things for no reward just to help a stranger and it sounds like something awful is about to happen, I just hope I am wrong. It is a pity that your Mother did not want to take responsibility for her own children, I would do anything for mine. Another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you again Dolly! I know like it's up-and-down so it's not. I went through a few before. I finally connected some dots.
Thank you again so much for your refuse. Thank you for hanging in there with me. And thank you for all the wonderful things you say have a great day!
Comment from Teri7
Lea, it is very sad to me that anyone could leave two precious little daughters and the children not even know what was really going on. I am so sorry you had to go through this. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Lea, it is very sad to me that anyone could leave two precious little daughters and the children not even know what was really going on. I am so sorry you had to go through this. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I thank you for your kind thoughts. Terry, you're always compassionate and have constructive things to say that I appreciate very much. I hope you have a great day!
Comment from BethShelby
This sound better than sleeping under the stairs. I could like you're able to sleep most anywhere. Does this place come with meals if you get to stay? It sound like the man isn't so happy about it. The women seem kind.
I'm wondering who have you all these boxes about your life and why?
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This sound better than sleeping under the stairs. I could like you're able to sleep most anywhere. Does this place come with meals if you get to stay? It sound like the man isn't so happy about it. The women seem kind.
I'm wondering who have you all these boxes about your life and why?
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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At this point I hadn't worked out the details with the lady yet she had fed me and allowed me to rest. It's time for the next step. Thank you again always happy to see you. You know, really have some interesting questions. Answer cool things to say I appreciate that about you! Thank you again!
Comment from jim vecchio
There is no way I would fault you on the storyline as this is YOUR story. I hate to mention this, but there were a few areas where grammar needed a small bit of straightening. These may appear to be very minor, but are indicative of my own works which others have reviewed and given me hints for improvement. He looked at me with a slightly startled expression on his face then quickly replaced it with the narrowing of his black eyes. (comma after face), Her husband flapping his hands in the air (husband was flapping?)
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat. (Needs comma after Mrs. D) Also, the title "African Queen" should be in italics.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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There is no way I would fault you on the storyline as this is YOUR story. I hate to mention this, but there were a few areas where grammar needed a small bit of straightening. These may appear to be very minor, but are indicative of my own works which others have reviewed and given me hints for improvement. He looked at me with a slightly startled expression on his face then quickly replaced it with the narrowing of his black eyes. (comma after face), Her husband flapping his hands in the air (husband was flapping?)
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat. (Needs comma after Mrs. D) Also, the title "African Queen" should be in italics.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Jim yeah, punctuation isn't my strong suit, so my book will soon go for editand we'll clean app all of these fun things and I appreciate you pointing them out to me because they are like gold and they can only improve things. Thank you for your kind review for your time it is top notch to me!
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One of the FS readers has started to teach me about one of my weakest points, which is meter. We all can learn from this site!
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Thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh dear, just when you think you might have found some stability, it feels like it might just as quickly dissipate again. You're exhausted but always vigilant, expecting the worst. You take the reader into that warm, inviting setting and for a moment we find some relief too, however temporary. Thanks for sharing, Lea. Stay strong. Debbie x
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Oh dear, just when you think you might have found some stability, it feels like it might just as quickly dissipate again. You're exhausted but always vigilant, expecting the worst. You take the reader into that warm, inviting setting and for a moment we find some relief too, however temporary. Thanks for sharing, Lea. Stay strong. Debbie x
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hi Debbie, thank you for your support is always very important to me. I always appreciate your reviews too. And happy to see your name. Come up thank you again I hope you have an awesome day!
