Guided by Faith
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Comment from estory
I liked the tense, emotional dialogue between Seth and Emma in this chapter, it was very realistic, as these two have issues they need to sort out before moving forward in the relationship. He finally seems to be frustrated with some of her idiosynchroses, as he shouts for her to just get him any shirt. And she seems defensive, selfdepreciating as she talks about her mom the prostitute and drug addict. He seems determined to overlook it as he tries to pull her closer. The dialogue was really well done there. estory
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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I liked the tense, emotional dialogue between Seth and Emma in this chapter, it was very realistic, as these two have issues they need to sort out before moving forward in the relationship. He finally seems to be frustrated with some of her idiosynchroses, as he shouts for her to just get him any shirt. And she seems defensive, selfdepreciating as she talks about her mom the prostitute and drug addict. He seems determined to overlook it as he tries to pull her closer. The dialogue was really well done there. estory
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the kind and encouraging review.
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow, a roller coaster of emotions and feelings in this chapter. If was easy to follow and the storyline continues.
The following sentence, to me didn't read well.
[[[Officers this happens to go to counseling before they're allowed back on the street."]]]
Maybe something like :
Officers need to go to counseling before they return to the street if this were to happen to them.
Overall, great chapter!
Hope your Thanksgiving was what you wanted it to be...
John
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Wow, a roller coaster of emotions and feelings in this chapter. If was easy to follow and the storyline continues.
The following sentence, to me didn't read well.
[[[Officers this happens to go to counseling before they're allowed back on the street."]]]
Maybe something like :
Officers need to go to counseling before they return to the street if this were to happen to them.
Overall, great chapter!
Hope your Thanksgiving was what you wanted it to be...
John
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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I struggled with that sentence myself and couldn't get it the way I liked it. Thank you for the help. I've changed it.
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You?re welvome..
Comment from Daylily
This is another excellent chapter, Barbara, and I did not notice anything to edit. I like that Seth does not want to rush Emma. The story flows well and feels realistic. I always like it when animals are part of a story. X Lily
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This is another excellent chapter, Barbara, and I did not notice anything to edit. I like that Seth does not want to rush Emma. The story flows well and feels realistic. I always like it when animals are part of a story. X Lily
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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He knows she's been through a lot lately and he doesn't want to add more stress. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
It looked like we were going to see that first kiss, but you keep dragging it out. Probably a good thing. Very clever way to handle the sleepover.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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It looked like we were going to see that first kiss, but you keep dragging it out. Probably a good thing. Very clever way to handle the sleepover.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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The first kiss will happen, but in the most least expected way. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Barry Penfold
Another excellent chapter. Your dialogue is top notch and totally believable. One amendment is found in the Character List . Michael Casey.
Should be stalking not stocking. Anyway, an excellent effort. Have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Another excellent chapter. Your dialogue is top notch and totally believable. One amendment is found in the Character List . Michael Casey.
Should be stalking not stocking. Anyway, an excellent effort. Have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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LOL I will fix that. I wonder what I was thinking when I wrote that. I guess I wasn't. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
there seemed to be a fair bit of tension between the two main characters. Emma seems to be wearing her feelings on her sleeves, and Seth doesn't sound as if he's sure as to how he feels about her, though it appears that he's leaning towards a relationship beyond work. They haven't known each other very long, so I suppose it would be unreasonable that they could love one another yet. It will be interesting to see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Hello Barbara,
there seemed to be a fair bit of tension between the two main characters. Emma seems to be wearing her feelings on her sleeves, and Seth doesn't sound as if he's sure as to how he feels about her, though it appears that he's leaning towards a relationship beyond work. They haven't known each other very long, so I suppose it would be unreasonable that they could love one another yet. It will be interesting to see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Seth is being very cautious. I think Emma's afraid, not sure.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I didn't find a single mistake, but then I do get so invested in the story I could have missed something. They seem to be getting better at making up without too many hurt feelings. I think she needs a really good kiss. It might cure his fear that he is too old for her.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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I didn't find a single mistake, but then I do get so invested in the story I could have missed something. They seem to be getting better at making up without too many hurt feelings. I think she needs a really good kiss. It might cure his fear that he is too old for her.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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I think Seth is being extremely cautious. Emma is unsure of her feelings. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
But I am far from expert!
That can't be good finding your love interest was only doing a job.
Good thing he explained properly! This is an intriguing story. I think you've done a marvelous job with it in spite of the fact that it was holidays! Your poem has great Word selection awesome sentence structure and of course dialogue is perfect! Lol. I hope you're having an amazing day thank you for this chapter in a great story!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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But I am far from expert!
That can't be good finding your love interest was only doing a job.
Good thing he explained properly! This is an intriguing story. I think you've done a marvelous job with it in spite of the fact that it was holidays! Your poem has great Word selection awesome sentence structure and of course dialogue is perfect! Lol. I hope you're having an amazing day thank you for this chapter in a great story!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
Emma is always getting upset over anything Seth does. She's extremely sensitive. She feels guilty that he was shot and feels bad because of who her birth mother was. Now that the guy who's been causing her all the trouble has been apprehended. Seth is grumpy, too, not liking to have his arm in a sling. Just the fact she was arrested may be enough to shake Barton up. Maybe she'll finally get it through her head Seth isn't interested in her. Excellent character development. judi
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Emma is always getting upset over anything Seth does. She's extremely sensitive. She feels guilty that he was shot and feels bad because of who her birth mother was. Now that the guy who's been causing her all the trouble has been apprehended. Seth is grumpy, too, not liking to have his arm in a sling. Just the fact she was arrested may be enough to shake Barton up. Maybe she'll finally get it through her head Seth isn't interested in her. Excellent character development. judi
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're welcome. I know Emma will finally be able to relax once the guy who's been tormenting her has been arrested. Also, she won't mind having Barton out of the way. judi
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This excellent chapter fills in and consolidates events previously and brings Seth and Emma somewhat closer after a very difficult period for them. I wonder what Emma's going to think when she wakes up in the morning on Seth's couch? One small edit: Seth you go on( )to bed. I'll wait for Carl (separate 'on' from 'to'). Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This excellent chapter fills in and consolidates events previously and brings Seth and Emma somewhat closer after a very difficult period for them. I wonder what Emma's going to think when she wakes up in the morning on Seth's couch? One small edit: Seth you go on( )to bed. I'll wait for Carl (separate 'on' from 'to'). Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Debbie
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the catch. I made the correction. I appreciate the help.