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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This prologue is well-written. It would draw in readers like me and others.
Only the tiniest of suggestions:
I'm pouring shudders out in gratitude that I do not have to go back there"
Just put a period after there and before the quotations marks at the end of the sentence.
Step lightly intrepid ones....
Just insert a comma after lightly.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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This prologue is well-written. It would draw in readers like me and others.
Only the tiniest of suggestions:
I'm pouring shudders out in gratitude that I do not have to go back there"
Just put a period after there and before the quotations marks at the end of the sentence.
Step lightly intrepid ones....
Just insert a comma after lightly.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you again, my friend for this wonderful rating and fine review. You are the best thanks so much!
Comment from Douglas Goff
Sounds like this will be interesting and powerful!
Quick fix:
been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar ans then some.
A story of survival, of three
(and)
Good owning.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Sounds like this will be interesting and powerful!
Quick fix:
been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar ans then some.
A story of survival, of three
(and)
Good owning.
D
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you, my friend going in for the big fix. I appreciate you as always don't forget! Of course you wont forget. I tell you lots! I appreciate your Eagle eye pointing out the edits. Because I need that that's like gold to me! Thank you again my friend Make sure you have the best and most relaxing evening ever!
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Good opening. (Ha! We all make booboos. )
Comment from BermyBye50
Lea,
This is a courageous first step forward in telling your life story. Your revelations will surely provide the strength and comfort to others who have lived similar life experiences. I know this is a deeply personal story but I want you to know that I am profoundly touched by your willingness to share your life's story here on Fanstory.
I have bookmarked each chapter of your book. You're my hero.
Blessings always,
Eugene
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Lea,
This is a courageous first step forward in telling your life story. Your revelations will surely provide the strength and comfort to others who have lived similar life experiences. I know this is a deeply personal story but I want you to know that I am profoundly touched by your willingness to share your life's story here on Fanstory.
I have bookmarked each chapter of your book. You're my hero.
Blessings always,
Eugene
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you again my friend!!
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By the way you're
?Simply Beautiful?
You are the epitome
of loveliness
the true essence
of a woman
breathtakingly
defined
You are perfection?s
exquisite aura
conceived
in every
beguiling
sensuous curve,
You are naturally
spellbinding
truly paradise
to men?s
enchanted
minds,
You are imagined
romantic
notions
of
blissful
endless love,
You are simply
?Beautiful?
a wonder
an innocent
splendor
to behold.
© Eugene Harvey
Comment from BethShelby
So this book will be going back again over some of the same things you covered in the first book? You mention violence and I'm wondering how this will be different. Maybe you are planning to tell more about your sisters? I thought this book would be what happened after you managed to get away, but now I'm not sure.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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So this book will be going back again over some of the same things you covered in the first book? You mention violence and I'm wondering how this will be different. Maybe you are planning to tell more about your sisters? I thought this book would be what happened after you managed to get away, but now I'm not sure.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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The 1st book covers my life from birth to age of 17 2nd book. Will cover from that age up until 15 years later. And then there will be a third, which is my life to. Now there is so much to tell so very much happy to have you along for the ride! My sister's at that time we're safe. Mom was with her father, the youngest one and my sister was with an ant in-law of The Valley far enough. They couldn't do anything to her. Life for me carried on being difficult in different ways. I was wholly unprepared for being on my own and so it was very difficult at first I also went to a place. I shouldn't have been some place i'd known before. However, that will come up in the next book. Thank you again thank you again thank you so much for reading. I appreciate your consistency. You are a very kind human being and I appreciate all your words thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Thank you for sharing this beautifully expressed prologue to your next book. It's an excellent preparation for what is to come and we brace ourselves for it. There are some small edits: anonymous; an(d); Take care, Lea. Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you for sharing this beautifully expressed prologue to your next book. It's an excellent preparation for what is to come and we brace ourselves for it. There are some small edits: anonymous; an(d); Take care, Lea. Love Debbie x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie, thank you. Thank you. I'm hoping I can publish. And there's so many people I would like to acknowledge. Nudge nudge wink wink! Thank you again I appreciate you very much For your review and you're fine rating too have a great night!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I wish you luck with the next step in your story Lea and we are all waiting to see what happened next.
Just a couple of suggestions for these lines for you Lea:
A story of three young, (anonymous) girls. A story of children who had been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar (and) then some.
Love Dolly x x. x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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I wish you luck with the next step in your story Lea and we are all waiting to see what happened next.
Just a couple of suggestions for these lines for you Lea:
A story of three young, (anonymous) girls. A story of children who had been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar (and) then some.
Love Dolly x x. x
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Once again, another amazing review of which I am grateful for and you're fine suggestions. Keep them coming. You're absolutely gold to me and you are very very talented writer! I hope you are joining the sun where you are and that you are well and happy Thanks again for your fine review hope you having a good time there!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I'm guessing the one who didn't grow up, or out of the past is the one telling this story.
notes:
A story of children who had been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar {ans} then some.
-and
gratitude that I do not have to go back{ there"}
-there."
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Hmm, I'm guessing the one who didn't grow up, or out of the past is the one telling this story.
notes:
A story of children who had been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar {ans} then some.
-and
gratitude that I do not have to go back{ there"}
-there."
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Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Hey, thank you so much for spying those edit. I feel much appreciate those those are like gold to me. I don't appreciate having them in though. I appreciate you having a read and offering your kind thoughts and your wonderful review. And you're great rating, thank you again. Thank you so much. I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Chuck Keller
I look forward to seeing "the rest of the story."
Even though it's painful for you to share, it hopefully has some therapeutic affect and makes going forward with your life a little easier.
Let the healing begin.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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I look forward to seeing "the rest of the story."
Even though it's painful for you to share, it hopefully has some therapeutic affect and makes going forward with your life a little easier.
Let the healing begin.
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Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Yes, let the healing begin exactly my head feels lighter. That's for sure a couple more chunks to get rid of and I think I could move a bus in there that run frame cell that I got kick in around and just move over a little bit lol. Thank you so much. I appreciate you so very much. I know I said it. I'll say it some more and some more and more LO l,
Are you ready for a truly rude joke?
What do a walrus and tupperware have in common?
They both like a tight seal. LLO LOL so bad I couldn't help myself. Have a great night and thank you again my friend!
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😁