Rainbow Tableau
Japanese Poetry Club entry- tableau26 total reviews
Comment from Paul Manton
A very accomplished, perfectly formed tableau poem with a correct title presentation. Good use of alliteration and consonance.
Most importantly the writer paints a picture with her words. I might have liked a brighter rainbow, but that's because I love rainbows. 'The colorful bridge sweeps across the sky' is a highlight.
Thank you, Jessica.
Paul
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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A very accomplished, perfectly formed tableau poem with a correct title presentation. Good use of alliteration and consonance.
Most importantly the writer paints a picture with her words. I might have liked a brighter rainbow, but that's because I love rainbows. 'The colorful bridge sweeps across the sky' is a highlight.
Thank you, Jessica.
Paul
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Paul!
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Welcome, Jessica.
Have a great Thursday.
London 08.46 GMT
Paul
Comment from JSD
A beautiful little piece of writing. Never heard of a tableau before, but it seems to work very well as a form. Your best moment here in 'storm's scent'. Gorgeous. x
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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A beautiful little piece of writing. Never heard of a tableau before, but it seems to work very well as a form. Your best moment here in 'storm's scent'. Gorgeous. x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much! Xoxo
Comment from lyenochka
I love this! And that you used the rainbow to be a "bridge where sun and rain meet" is such a lovely way to describe it. I think you did a beautiful job with your tableau poem!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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I love this! And that you used the rainbow to be a "bridge where sun and rain meet" is such a lovely way to describe it. I think you did a beautiful job with your tableau poem!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from leather
I am out of six-star ratings, so I apologize for the five-star rating. This is a lovely Tableau poem-- a style I know very little about other than what you have explained. You chose a beautiful mellow shade for the background color, which works well with the rainbow.
Thanks for writing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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I am out of six-star ratings, so I apologize for the five-star rating. This is a lovely Tableau poem-- a style I know very little about other than what you have explained. You chose a beautiful mellow shade for the background color, which works well with the rainbow.
Thanks for writing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much!! Xo
Comment from Deborah Dybowski
I think your poem is well written. I like the alliteration and the images
you have presented. A storm's scent lingers. I can almost smell the rain.
My favorite line is where rain and sun meet.
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I think your poem is well written. I like the alliteration and the images
you have presented. A storm's scent lingers. I can almost smell the rain.
My favorite line is where rain and sun meet.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
Comment from Navada
Thank you for the explanation of this form. I like the way you've incorporated various senses - sight, scent, sound (harmonious can qualify as both sight and sound, potentially) - and ended with the understanding of how the rainbow is created. You've chosen your words so carefully to meet all these requirements in an aesthetically pleasing way. Lovely writing!
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Thank you for the explanation of this form. I like the way you've incorporated various senses - sight, scent, sound (harmonious can qualify as both sight and sound, potentially) - and ended with the understanding of how the rainbow is created. You've chosen your words so carefully to meet all these requirements in an aesthetically pleasing way. Lovely writing!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Holy smokes are you amazingly talented! that was beautiful! I really enjoyed that one! I was trying to think of which line I liked best. But when you put them all together, they're all the best really! only one thing to be done about this. And I hope you have a great night too!
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Holy smokes are you amazingly talented! that was beautiful! I really enjoyed that one! I was trying to think of which line I liked best. But when you put them all together, they're all the best really! only one thing to be done about this. And I hope you have a great night too!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
Jess! It is a beautiful tribute to my favorite weather phenomena. Your words are perfect, and I learn so much from all these different poetry styles. I loved it! best, JohnC
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Jess! It is a beautiful tribute to my favorite weather phenomena. Your words are perfect, and I learn so much from all these different poetry styles. I loved it! best, JohnC
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written Rainbow haiku. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
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This is a very beautiful and very well written Rainbow haiku. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hello beautiful lady. Awe, just at the same time that I was writing mine, I come check on you and I find you have written yours too. What a beautiful photo with lovely descriptive words for your poem to go with it. Absolutely stunning Tableau.
You are so good at these. They say they can be rhymed but don't know if I will change it to rhyme or not. Awesome job, my sweet Jess!!
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Hello beautiful lady. Awe, just at the same time that I was writing mine, I come check on you and I find you have written yours too. What a beautiful photo with lovely descriptive words for your poem to go with it. Absolutely stunning Tableau.
You are so good at these. They say they can be rhymed but don't know if I will change it to rhyme or not. Awesome job, my sweet Jess!!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
