Comment from Debi Pick Marquette

Exceptional

This is amazingly beautiful and loved the metaphors, I find it wonderfully symbolic and sensual. Sorry, I don't pretend to know exactly how to describe it, but there that is why I enrolled in Gypsy University. LOL -
I just found it fascinating, the art lovely and I loved the repeating quote too.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023

You did just fine explaining yourself in how the poem made you feel. (*<>*)

Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. Love.

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I think this poem would go well with the Twilight Saga but I never watched the movies or read the books. I think you captured the passion well. I had to smile at the "bag of bones" comment because decades ago, my office mate said if I overslept, I might become just a pile of bleached bones because I ate a little all the time. Lol.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023

LoL that is funny. I never heard the bleached bones. A bag of bones is a title of a Stephen King book.

I edited the poem to improve flow. I may check it again. Thank you very much for the pump, you are the best.

love,
marival

Comment from Chuck Keller

Excellent

Beautifully written.
I write a lot about my "fantasy" sailboat. It's called:
"The Dreamland"
The ocean and romance are forever linked in my imagination.
Thank you for sharing this one with us.
I look forward to reading more of your work

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023

Thank you, Chuck. I really appreciate your kind review. "dreamland'' is the perfect name for a sailboat.

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Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

Thank you for that reminder of Bram Stoker's quote, or I would be pounding my head all night long. Speaking of my head, I tried to wrap what little brain is left round this and found it too elaborate for my meager talents. I try to write a love poem and it goes nowhere. You write one and your words shine like stars in the firmament.

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 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023

I edited the poem to improve the flow, I hope it flows better. What do you find too elaborate? I like to improve when appropriate.

Thank you, Jim. I really appreciate your kind review.

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reply by jim vecchio on 13-Nov-2023

Nothing needs to, or should, be changed. I probably should have used another word. I just meant your words flowed so smoothly and presented themselves so vividly, I was in awe!

reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023

Thank you, Jim. (*÷*)

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reply by jim vecchio on 14-Nov-2023

Oh, how I love those hugs!

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers. I enjoyed reviewing this. This is also very visually pleasing to see. Thank you for sharing it.

Best wishes,

Alexan

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 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023

Thank you, Alexan. I really appreciate your kind review.

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