2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "At the Precipice of Your Lips".
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting poem as it is rather loud. I enjoyed it very much. Your presentation is beautiful. I do wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the best day. Patricia.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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This is a very interesting poem as it is rather loud. I enjoyed it very much. Your presentation is beautiful. I do wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the best day. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
It's been awhile since I was as passionate as this, but there was a time...beautifully written Gypsy, passion is normally part of these great poems of yours, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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It's been awhile since I was as passionate as this, but there was a time...beautifully written Gypsy, passion is normally part of these great poems of yours, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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A pleasure
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The pictures are outstanding and certainly advance the poem. The poetry is very well done. I can feel the need and the urgency. But, I have to ask, why the colored ink? It did not add to the poetry, it deducted from the serious feelings in your poetry. My own small opinion. Karen
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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The pictures are outstanding and certainly advance the poem. The poetry is very well done. I can feel the need and the urgency. But, I have to ask, why the colored ink? It did not add to the poetry, it deducted from the serious feelings in your poetry. My own small opinion. Karen
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
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You are welcome. Karen
Comment from Navada
I really enjoyed your vocabulary choices here, including "precipice", "awe" and "reverie". Such lovely language lends elegance and sophistication to this love story. I do like the variation of font colours and how this adds interest and aesthetic pleasure alongside your chosen words. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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I really enjoyed your vocabulary choices here, including "precipice", "awe" and "reverie". Such lovely language lends elegance and sophistication to this love story. I do like the variation of font colours and how this adds interest and aesthetic pleasure alongside your chosen words. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Another poem of passionate love and dedication. I really liked:
"as the sun rises and sets in your eyes
where my happiness starts and ends
at the open windows of your soul"
But such a love worries me because if that happiness is contingent on that one human being, and that person leaves, dies, or falls out of love with the narrator, that would be so utterly devastating!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Another poem of passionate love and dedication. I really liked:
"as the sun rises and sets in your eyes
where my happiness starts and ends
at the open windows of your soul"
But such a love worries me because if that happiness is contingent on that one human being, and that person leaves, dies, or falls out of love with the narrator, that would be so utterly devastating!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Yes, it's a love poem, in real life there are no guarantees.
Thank you very much, big sister.
Today was my oldest granddaughter, Bella, birthday 🎂 🥳 23 I can't believe it. I was in the room when she was born. ((((Sigh))))
Love
Marival
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Wow! 23! Your oldest granddaughter is ten years older than mine. And you're younger than me!
Happy Birthday to her! 23 is a fun age!
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Thank you, you would love her. I'm lucky all my kids and grandkids are kind, beautiful, talented artists, and very respectful. I love them so much.
I was 40 years old when Bella was born. My son was 20 when she was born. I was not ready to be a grandma at 40 so I asked to be called, Nina, it doesn?t sound as old. LoL
She lives and goes to school in Florida. She works for Disney World.
I see her once or twice a year. I wish she would move back to California. ((((Sigh))))
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Oh, it's so hard when they are far away! Nina sounds like a girl's name.
My father-in-law was plenty old when we had our first and he wanted to be called "Uncle"!! 😂
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Uncle? LoL. That's worse than Nina.
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Lol. His mom (hubby's grandma) heard that and said it just about "made my socks rot." She always used the funniest idioms!
Comment from l.raven
Hi Marival, oh to be so in love my sweet
friend...
that you wrap yourselves into the night...feeling every
emotion of true love...just hoping that the sun never shines...
and your lips never stop touching...sealed with a kiss...
oh such a talent you have for writing sweet girl...
I love your poem...and your picture say it all...
very touching..and very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Hi Marival, oh to be so in love my sweet
friend...
that you wrap yourselves into the night...feeling every
emotion of true love...just hoping that the sun never shines...
and your lips never stop touching...sealed with a kiss...
oh such a talent you have for writing sweet girl...
I love your poem...and your picture say it all...
very touching..and very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. Love you.
Gypsy hugs
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your always so welcome beautiful girl....love xxoo 💖🥰🤗🌼🙏
Comment from Gloria ....
Your poem uses clear language and warm imagery to convey admiration for a lover. Each word deftly emphasizes mounting intensity and emotional depth starting with the precipice of your lips.
Superb presentation and overall terrific free verse poem.
Many thanks for sharing, Gypsy. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Your poem uses clear language and warm imagery to convey admiration for a lover. Each word deftly emphasizes mounting intensity and emotional depth starting with the precipice of your lips.
Superb presentation and overall terrific free verse poem.
Many thanks for sharing, Gypsy. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lancellot
A very nice free verse. Yes, one can get lost in those precious moments, especially when love and passion roar with new flame. Ah, if only those flames lasted. I think you painted a great scene and did well with the matching presentation.
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A very nice free verse. Yes, one can get lost in those precious moments, especially when love and passion roar with new flame. Ah, if only those flames lasted. I think you painted a great scene and did well with the matching presentation.
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Raul1
This is beautifully written poem I have enjoyed reading. The sentences flow with clarity. It is clear and concise. Nice job! Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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This is beautifully written poem I have enjoyed reading. The sentences flow with clarity. It is clear and concise. Nice job! Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you
Comment from GWHARGIS
Gypsy, this was just beautiful. I think it was such a pure poem that shows how deep love can be. The desire, admiration, love and jealousy all rolled into one intoxicating piece. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Gypsy, this was just beautiful. I think it was such a pure poem that shows how deep love can be. The desire, admiration, love and jealousy all rolled into one intoxicating piece. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Gretchen
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I really appreciate your exceptional six stars review.
Gypsy hugs