Ghost
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Comment from Jim Wile
This chapter was so well done, Lea. You could feel the tension building right from the start as you and your sister got in Opa's car and headed home to what you rightfully knew was going to be awful. It must be how soldiers feel going into battle where they know there is a good chance of being killed.
I think the thing that saved you was your rage. That beats depression and whatever it was that was afflicting your sister. I think it helped you stay focused and keep your sanity in an insane situation.
Even your Opa, as kind to you as he may have been, was complicit because he drove you back there. He should not have done that, but apparently he didn't have the strength to defy his wife and just went along.
I can only imagine how it is affecting you to write this, Lea, but I'm glad you are doing it for the release it is undoubtedly giving you. Remain strong, and get it all out of you. - Jim
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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This chapter was so well done, Lea. You could feel the tension building right from the start as you and your sister got in Opa's car and headed home to what you rightfully knew was going to be awful. It must be how soldiers feel going into battle where they know there is a good chance of being killed.
I think the thing that saved you was your rage. That beats depression and whatever it was that was afflicting your sister. I think it helped you stay focused and keep your sanity in an insane situation.
Even your Opa, as kind to you as he may have been, was complicit because he drove you back there. He should not have done that, but apparently he didn't have the strength to defy his wife and just went along.
I can only imagine how it is affecting you to write this, Lea, but I'm glad you are doing it for the release it is undoubtedly giving you. Remain strong, and get it all out of you. - Jim
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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You are so right jim you hit the nail on the head! He has been difficult but also gratifying I get my truth out there finally. To heck with where the chips fall. Your words are very touching and very insightwell. No, thank you for the fine rating, and I'm wonderful review. You're amazing person, thank you so much, have a great night!
Comment from JSD
So hard to read. It just makes the reader so angry my love. Once again I find my own current struggles contrasted with what you went through and I wonder how the world can be so cruel. Run! Please! x
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So hard to read. It just makes the reader so angry my love. Once again I find my own current struggles contrasted with what you went through and I wonder how the world can be so cruel. Run! Please! x
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Leave me I wish I knew the answer to that. I find this world to be 50 50 bad and good. Its the balance. Another saying would be "life is not fair. Get used to it" useless statements really don't help anything. Thank you john once again the cruel world sucks large sometimes. Thank you again my friend!
Comment from BethShelby
I don't know where you found that amazing picture but from your descriptions, that is exactly the way he was pictured in my mind. I hope you can find a way to get the two of you out. Did your mother work outside the home? Did she have a good relationship with her mother?
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I don't know where you found that amazing picture but from your descriptions, that is exactly the way he was pictured in my mind. I hope you can find a way to get the two of you out. Did your mother work outside the home? Did she have a good relationship with her mother?
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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It complicated between her mother and my mother.
They need each other but they don't respect each other. She used her husband like a slave. I watched the dynamics between them for a long, they become predictable. Of course, my mother never kept a job for very long. She was not a maternal person, nor was she a hot. Because that's not what I would've wished for thank you again for reading. I hope you are well and having a good night!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Their behaviour is utterly despicable and I can well understand how you had thoughts of killing and, certainly, hatred towards your mother for being so entrenched and blinded in that coercive relationship. In many ways, she was as much a prisoner as you and your sister, just lacking the violence. Your story, as ever, as deep and dark poignancy as we search, forever it seems, for some light. Your description of the shell of your poor sister left on the car seat is heart-breaking and your very acute memory of his middle fist. Be careful about punctuation and capitals where they shouldn't be "(h)er willingness..."; "The closer we got to the house (,) the deeper my rage burned." This attention to detail will all help your story to emerge as powerfully as it deserves. Utterly devastating situation but I'm reassured by the force of your determination ("Revenge is a dish best served cold.") Take care, Lea! Debbie x
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Their behaviour is utterly despicable and I can well understand how you had thoughts of killing and, certainly, hatred towards your mother for being so entrenched and blinded in that coercive relationship. In many ways, she was as much a prisoner as you and your sister, just lacking the violence. Your story, as ever, as deep and dark poignancy as we search, forever it seems, for some light. Your description of the shell of your poor sister left on the car seat is heart-breaking and your very acute memory of his middle fist. Be careful about punctuation and capitals where they shouldn't be "(h)er willingness..."; "The closer we got to the house (,) the deeper my rage burned." This attention to detail will all help your story to emerge as powerfully as it deserves. Utterly devastating situation but I'm reassured by the force of your determination ("Revenge is a dish best served cold.") Take care, Lea! Debbie x
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you again once again. You hit the nail on the head.
Oh, man You're amazingly intuitive. W
Went ahead made some corrections Yeas, punctuation as fun as that definitely needs proper as interesting for sure, thank you so much. Appreciate your comments as always. And yes, it's going to be a very cold dish indeed. Thanks again!
Comment from royowen
I've said it before and I'll say it again, I think if I'd have known I would have have tried to rescue you in some way, I can't imagine what it would be like, somehow I don't think I could cope with it, I think I would be tempted to floor him, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I've said it before and I'll say it again, I think if I'd have known I would have have tried to rescue you in some way, I can't imagine what it would be like, somehow I don't think I could cope with it, I think I would be tempted to floor him, beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Roy...I appreciate your sentiments. The next succeeding chapter he has some revelations today I am completely shocked. Thank you so much for your review and your kind comment for your insight. I feel willingness to come along this journey with me, thank you so much!
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is so terrifying Lea, your write is honest and raw and your Mother was probably as terrified as you of your Stepfather but this is no excuse not to protect you. I seem to remember you say you had another sister and there were three of you altogether? You don't mention your other sister here though. It saddens me to think that you and your sister were going downhill fast, losing weight and living in fear, it makes me want to come and get you both and take you away from this monster, another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x x x
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This is so terrifying Lea, your write is honest and raw and your Mother was probably as terrified as you of your Stepfather but this is no excuse not to protect you. I seem to remember you say you had another sister and there were three of you altogether? You don't mention your other sister here though. It saddens me to think that you and your sister were going downhill fast, losing weight and living in fear, it makes me want to come and get you both and take you away from this monster, another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Dolly appreciate your kind words! I wish I could say my mother was scared too. But she was not she got from him. What she wanted, and that was to come and go as she. Please not work, not be apparent. He gave her whatever she wanted. Very affectionate to were dirt on his. She wasn't very interested in changing anything at all and. I'm agitated when approaching her multiple abuses. Textural views from people in the neighborhood her response. Was, well, you shouldn't call me before. Now we can't do anything about it, that is her response. My mother never cared a wit for us. You never did anything for us, we did it all. Ourselwe watched we cleaned, we cooked, we did everything. Yeah, unfortunately, my mother deliberately and premeditatively work with my grandmother to cover everything I wish it wasn't so but it is. I thank you Dolly appreciate you reading and offering your opinions and and and support is very important. To me, I think if I were still that young girl. I would gladly run away with you! Thanks again!