Treasure Hunt
A treasure can be right beside you19 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Barry, it sounds like this adventure did more good for the father son relationship than all that expensive counseling.
You did a great job of building up the excitement of adventure in spite of circumstances that might have been discouraging.
I also liked the information about the Bushrangers. A great tale for adventurers of all ages.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Hi Barry, it sounds like this adventure did more good for the father son relationship than all that expensive counseling.
You did a great job of building up the excitement of adventure in spite of circumstances that might have been discouraging.
I also liked the information about the Bushrangers. A great tale for adventurers of all ages.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Rhonda,
Thanks very much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the story. Yes, often trips away can be a wonderful bonding experience. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Teenage/parent relationships can be a bit tricky to get through but this was a trip that ended with them both finding the treasure was there all along. I enjoyed this Aussie bush story Barry, nicely told.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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Teenage/parent relationships can be a bit tricky to get through but this was a trip that ended with them both finding the treasure was there all along. I enjoyed this Aussie bush story Barry, nicely told.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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Thanks Pearl for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed it. Make sure you enjoy your day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an enjoyable story! No booty found but an opportunity for father and son to bond together, especially after the ankle issue when, clearly, the hunt didn't matter any more. Your dialogue is excellently expressed and the whole story has good pace and credibility. Small edit: dialogue starting "The bushrangers... even when they had no idea what (lay) ahead.." Good job! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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This is an enjoyable story! No booty found but an opportunity for father and son to bond together, especially after the ankle issue when, clearly, the hunt didn't matter any more. Your dialogue is excellently expressed and the whole story has good pace and credibility. Small edit: dialogue starting "The bushrangers... even when they had no idea what (lay) ahead.." Good job! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thanks Debbie for the review. Also thanks for the tip re the dialogue. Always good to have another pair of eyes. Please take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from Sanku
Just think about it! so much of treasure could lying around the area. Can't blame people for trying to get a hand on them .
Nice story and booty or no booty the father -son relation was sealed ..
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Just think about it! so much of treasure could lying around the area. Can't blame people for trying to get a hand on them .
Nice story and booty or no booty the father -son relation was sealed ..
Comment Written 19-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Thanks for your review. Yes, treasure can have a wide meaning. Glad you enjoyed the story. Have a wonderful day and take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from karenina
I enjoyed the story and smiled as the twists and turns of their adventure brought them to their most prized treasure...one another!
I recall similar bonding experiences between my dad and my brothers when they were in their teens.
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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I enjoyed the story and smiled as the twists and turns of their adventure brought them to their most prized treasure...one another!
I recall similar bonding experiences between my dad and my brothers when they were in their teens.
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2023
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Karenina,
Thanks so much for your review. Teenage boys and fathers can often have bonding issues but a trip away together can often be the solution. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry
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You as well!
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a terrific story that builds scene by scene as the father and son pair adventure into the hard-to-reach spots. You take the readers with you to see the terrain and feel the environment. This type of effort and revelations from Dad rebuild bridges between them. Well done. It makes me feel good. Owe you a six.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
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This is a terrific story that builds scene by scene as the father and son pair adventure into the hard-to-reach spots. You take the readers with you to see the terrain and feel the environment. This type of effort and revelations from Dad rebuild bridges between them. Well done. It makes me feel good. Owe you a six.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
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Glad it made you feel good Bill. To me that is the most important thing. Take care and have a most wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Wendyanne
This is quite a nice story. I guess bushrangers are similar to the highwaymen we had in England many years ago. I noticed one typo, ie, "your worth more" should be "you're worth more". Overall. a nice little tale.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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This is quite a nice story. I guess bushrangers are similar to the highwaymen we had in England many years ago. I noticed one typo, ie, "your worth more" should be "you're worth more". Overall. a nice little tale.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thanks for your review. Thanks also for your keen eye picking up the mistake. Yes Bushrangers were exactly like your Highwaymen. Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from JSD
A great story. Lovely relationship described here and brought beautifully to life with your description and authentic sounding dialogue. Two excellent characters too. Well done and thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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A great story. Lovely relationship described here and brought beautifully to life with your description and authentic sounding dialogue. Two excellent characters too. Well done and thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Thanks for the kind review. Glad you enjoyed it. I am pretty happy with the way it turned out. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul McFarland
H ow many times has a father/son relationship been rescued with a trip such as this? The father being a workaholic, and the son being lured away by his peer group or girlfriend.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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H ow many times has a father/son relationship been rescued with a trip such as this? The father being a workaholic, and the son being lured away by his peer group or girlfriend.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
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Yes you are so right about that. Perhaps there should be more father /son trips. Thanks for the review and I hope you are well. Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.