Enslaved
Choka20 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
That's heart-breaking! Yes, addiction is a cruel master and so many people are enslaved to drugs in our country. They are often homeless and they refuse shelter because they cannot give up the drugs.
Great job and I love the question at the end. They need to find their feet to flee!!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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That's heart-breaking! Yes, addiction is a cruel master and so many people are enslaved to drugs in our country. They are often homeless and they refuse shelter because they cannot give up the drugs.
Great job and I love the question at the end. They need to find their feet to flee!!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you Helen. Two of my husbands cousins' children had fallen for this lure .IT is heartbreaking to see the parents struggling with guilt ..
Comment from GWHARGIS
As every addict will attest, they can quit whenever they want. This was very visual. It really doesn't have to be drugs. Could be alcohol, sex, porn ... the list goes on and on. Great piece of writing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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As every addict will attest, they can quit whenever they want. This was very visual. It really doesn't have to be drugs. Could be alcohol, sex, porn ... the list goes on and on. Great piece of writing. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Yeah anything in excess is poison.They start for fun but then the control is gone..
Thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This choka, Enslaved, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that the first one is always free, but seconds cost all your money, friends, family, and future.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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This choka, Enslaved, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that the first one is always free, but seconds cost all your money, friends, family, and future.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Line three is not a complete thought. How about: His glance was enough. Ordinarily I would not mention it, but it is for a contest. It is a strong clear poem, and the picture is perfect. Karen
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Line three is not a complete thought. How about: His glance was enough. Ordinarily I would not mention it, but it is for a contest. It is a strong clear poem, and the picture is perfect. Karen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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You have a point .Thank you very much .I will redo it .
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Glad I could help. Good luck on the vote. Karen
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Glad I could help. Good luck on the vote. Karen
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Congratulations on your big 300 Milestone Post, Santha!!! YAY! You and I are so close together on them. I just had mine a couple weeks ago.
So I am also getting a lesson in the real way a Choka is done. And who would have thought I would start with another master such as you, Santha!!! This is wonderful! What an intriguing Choka poem. And what a story it tells. It gives me chills picturing this drug dealer who I know so well. Let me explain that sentence. Mine was my doctor. Twenty years ago pushed the opioids for my pain. Not good!
Same results as a street deal. Same addiction, same craving to increase and same horrible downer trying to rid myself off of them. Only difference was no jabs. Drug free now for five years.
Is a Choka always fiction or can it be non-fiction? Anyway I do love it and can't wait to try the free verse and serious one, such as yours. I shared my experience to let you know what your verse did for me. It put chills down my spine. What a wonderful post, my friend! Awesome job!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Congratulations on your big 300 Milestone Post, Santha!!! YAY! You and I are so close together on them. I just had mine a couple weeks ago.
So I am also getting a lesson in the real way a Choka is done. And who would have thought I would start with another master such as you, Santha!!! This is wonderful! What an intriguing Choka poem. And what a story it tells. It gives me chills picturing this drug dealer who I know so well. Let me explain that sentence. Mine was my doctor. Twenty years ago pushed the opioids for my pain. Not good!
Same results as a street deal. Same addiction, same craving to increase and same horrible downer trying to rid myself off of them. Only difference was no jabs. Drug free now for five years.
Is a Choka always fiction or can it be non-fiction? Anyway I do love it and can't wait to try the free verse and serious one, such as yours. I shared my experience to let you know what your verse did for me. It put chills down my spine. What a wonderful post, my friend! Awesome job!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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It can be nonfiction too.
Thank you Debi for such a long review.Some one WE know very closely have their boys under drug addiction.One died and no one knows where the other is. You know the kind of guilt the parents go through...
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are alarming, concerning and creative. I pondered on
these words and thought about what it is like to be enslaved! The
author's description of this scene is frightening. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and goes well with these words.
Great Poem, Sanku!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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The author's words are alarming, concerning and creative. I pondered on
these words and thought about what it is like to be enslaved! The
author's description of this scene is frightening. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is perfect and goes well with these words.
Great Poem, Sanku!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much .This has become a terrible menace .The drug peddlars haunt the vicinities of school.IT put parent under great stress.
Comment from pome lover
Apparently that is one way it starts. And once is enough to get hooked.
However, it isn't as if the harm drugs do isn't known by everyone. Still, it is sad. I imagine your well-worded poem is a warning, which is good.
Katharine
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Apparently that is one way it starts. And once is enough to get hooked.
However, it isn't as if the harm drugs do isn't known by everyone. Still, it is sad. I imagine your well-worded poem is a warning, which is good.
Katharine
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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That is it .they know the harm but some semse of bravado makes them go into it
Thank you for stopping by.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Congratulations on your 300-milestone post. This is a great post to make this milestone. The artwork, the poem, the coloring all fit together to make this a perfect presentation. I feel the coloring fits the mood of the poem perfectly.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Congratulations on your 300-milestone post. This is a great post to make this milestone. The artwork, the poem, the coloring all fit together to make this a perfect presentation. I feel the coloring fits the mood of the poem perfectly.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
A-1 for the artwork and the Cholka. I do suggest the font selected needs to be bolder or the background lighter. For me, it seems lacking in contrast.
Good luck.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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A-1 for the artwork and the Cholka. I do suggest the font selected needs to be bolder or the background lighter. For me, it seems lacking in contrast.
Good luck.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fine artwork here and this must be referring to a drug dealer maybe who supplies pills for an addict who cannot stop the cycle of addiction, a poignant write, congratulations on your 300th post, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Fine artwork here and this must be referring to a drug dealer maybe who supplies pills for an addict who cannot stop the cycle of addiction, a poignant write, congratulations on your 300th post, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much Dolly.