2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from lyenochka
That's a gorgeous presentation! I think you captured the narrator's feeling of being completely in love or infatuated with someone whom he doesn't really know but idealizes!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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That's a gorgeous presentation! I think you captured the narrator's feeling of being completely in love or infatuated with someone whom he doesn't really know but idealizes!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Yes, you got it. (*=*) as always. Thank you big sister. I am happy you like it.
love,
marival
Comment from Lea Tonin1
You always have some great poems, one incredibly talented writer you are I swear if I had another sex it be yours but for now I must give you a virtual six.
" In crystal spray bottles" That's a very cool line!
I think it's a wonderful job You've got gorgeous artwork hair along with super peppermint chip it's a plus all around. Thank you for sharing this. I hope you have the best day!
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You always have some great poems, one incredibly talented writer you are I swear if I had another sex it be yours but for now I must give you a virtual six.
" In crystal spray bottles" That's a very cool line!
I think it's a wonderful job You've got gorgeous artwork hair along with super peppermint chip it's a plus all around. Thank you for sharing this. I hope you have the best day!
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for reading my poem. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
love the single lines between the senryu
maybe have the last line the same colour as the first? just a thought ;)
great imagistic word choices with smooth flow
the bottom pic is totally cool!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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love the single lines between the senryu
maybe have the last line the same colour as the first? just a thought ;)
great imagistic word choices with smooth flow
the bottom pic is totally cool!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Good suggestion, I changed the color of all the one lines.
Thank you very much for reading my poem. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs