Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Odd Behavior"Miranda tries to find Dougie.
22 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This story just gets better and better. She wants Rita to know her husband isn't good enough for her. She wants Missy to quit bugging her. Also, she is concerned about Waylon's problems at school. The beer bottle adds even more things to worry about.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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This story just gets better and better. She wants Rita to know her husband isn't good enough for her. She wants Missy to quit bugging her. Also, she is concerned about Waylon's problems at school. The beer bottle adds even more things to worry about.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Miranda would be bored if she didn't have multiple things going on. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, I'm all about characters and what they do, what they tell me is supposed to be called plot. Whatever the hell they want to call anything doesn't matter to me. Character make the stories, and nobody makes them more relatable to me, than you. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Yes, I'm all about characters and what they do, what they tell me is supposed to be called plot. Whatever the hell they want to call anything doesn't matter to me. Character make the stories, and nobody makes them more relatable to me, than you. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Thanks, Ric. I'll admit, Miranda has my smart mouth but I'm in envy of her guts and determination. I appreciate this. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter. I love your Miranda stories. I like Waylon, too and glad Miranda is taking care of him. More mystery around the corner, ha. Keep it coming.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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This was a great chapter. I love your Miranda stories. I like Waylon, too and glad Miranda is taking care of him. More mystery around the corner, ha. Keep it coming.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
I like Miranda's diction. She sounds very normal. Example - (I take a liberal swig.) I don't think very many FanStorians swig.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Well written.
I like Miranda's diction. She sounds very normal. Example - (I take a liberal swig.) I don't think very many FanStorians swig.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Lol. I've been known to take a liberal swig now and again. Thank you do much for this. Gretchen
Comment from w.j.debi
Miranda had a busy day off. Lots of intrigue in her life as she investigates her friend's husband and his activities. And now we have a mysterious bottle showing up. Great job building the suspense and raising questions.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Miranda had a busy day off. Lots of intrigue in her life as she investigates her friend's husband and his activities. And now we have a mysterious bottle showing up. Great job building the suspense and raising questions.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Miranda doesn't stay still for very long. Lol. She's a tad on the nosy side. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting developments in your story. Missy is weird and yet she has her supporters. She will soon have Rita's husband against her as well, and Mitch will not be happy with her involvement in this. Well written and enjoyable read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Interesting developments in your story. Missy is weird and yet she has her supporters. She will soon have Rita's husband against her as well, and Mitch will not be happy with her involvement in this. Well written and enjoyable read.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Nope. Mitch is very concerned about Miranda. But there really is no controlling her. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is another great chapter as Miranda continues her investigations. It's always so easy to engage with her because her character is beautifully defined, especially with her beer swilling. Now she has this bottle as further potential evidence, the mystery for her and the reader has still a way to go before being resolved. Thanks for sharing, Debbie.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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This is another great chapter as Miranda continues her investigations. It's always so easy to engage with her because her character is beautifully defined, especially with her beer swilling. Now she has this bottle as further potential evidence, the mystery for her and the reader has still a way to go before being resolved. Thanks for sharing, Debbie.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Debbie. So glad you enjoyed this. Yes, Miranda is a real character. Like her or not. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
She is a master mind-f***, that Missy Toblerone. The best thing I can say about her is that her last name makes me think of that delicious candy. Other than that, the woman's worthless. And dangerous.
I think it's cool that Gretchen doesn't even read her letters. Myself, I would be far too curious. But we established long ago that Miranda is way cooler than most people. (She's you, in my eyes. Just so you know.)
I also love the name: Garden of Eden Trailer Park. HAHAHA. You slay me.
Nice chapter. Definitely moving us forward, but maintaining a steady pace with the story and "little details." That's one of my favorite things about your writing. You mention the little things...like the neighbor's cheap cigarette and Waylong dragging his feet and making brown clouds. Your 'artist' way paints little mini pictures for us. Barbara Kingsolver, who's one of my favorite authors does that, too.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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She is a master mind-f***, that Missy Toblerone. The best thing I can say about her is that her last name makes me think of that delicious candy. Other than that, the woman's worthless. And dangerous.
I think it's cool that Gretchen doesn't even read her letters. Myself, I would be far too curious. But we established long ago that Miranda is way cooler than most people. (She's you, in my eyes. Just so you know.)
I also love the name: Garden of Eden Trailer Park. HAHAHA. You slay me.
Nice chapter. Definitely moving us forward, but maintaining a steady pace with the story and "little details." That's one of my favorite things about your writing. You mention the little things...like the neighbor's cheap cigarette and Waylong dragging his feet and making brown clouds. Your 'artist' way paints little mini pictures for us. Barbara Kingsolver, who's one of my favorite authors does that, too.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Well, thank you for this awesome review. Sorry it took so long to answer back. This week has done its best to suck the life out of me. Lol. Your reviews are always that lifeline I need. Gretchen
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You know you never have to apologize to me for that. You're Miss Conscientious, so if I don't hear back, I know you're swamped. xoxo
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, those bottles keep popping up occasionally, don't they?
This is a great chapter.
I'm beginning to believe there is more (or perhaps less) then meets the eye with Dougie's death. Hmm? best, JohnC
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Well, those bottles keep popping up occasionally, don't they?
This is a great chapter.
I'm beginning to believe there is more (or perhaps less) then meets the eye with Dougie's death. Hmm? best, JohnC
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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You need to write a mystery. You think like a detective. You notice little things that have escaped other reviewers. Thank you so much for this awesome review. Gretchen
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It may be part of why my kids never got away with anything; that and they weren't good liars! LOL. Always enjoy the read, Gretchen.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent story. Your presentation is very good. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader. Your dialogues are interesting and authentic.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent story. Your presentation is very good. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader. Your dialogues are interesting and authentic.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Thanks so much, Alexandra. I really appreciate this kind review. Gretchen