Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Losing someone close takes a lot of time to heal and the shock of it reverberates through families. A fine melancholy post Lisa, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 03-Sep-2023

I am sorry for your loss Lisa x x x

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

Everything will become memories. But I hear that the memories can be uploaded to the computers so they can be downloaded to a new body. It has much longer life than the physical one.

Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Absolutely true, and a very poignant write. Yet even that consolation is bitter-sweet. You have written something memorable and meaningful here, and I send best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.

reply by Wendy G on 03-Sep-2023

I am so sorry to hear that. That?s incredibly sad. It?s clear he meant a great deal to you. Was it the one you rode around Australia on your motor bike with?

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Yes, he was the one who shared the most adventurous activities I have ever done. He made me be brave and realise I could do anything. He was so full of life, always with a project - several - on the go. A complex man, very challenging as part of a couple, but I loved him.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Yes, there are people in my life that are long dead, and some more recent, I sometimes wish they existed in this time frame, but they don't, beautifully written essence poem, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.

reply by royowen on 03-Sep-2023

I?m sorry Jenny

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

This piece is hitting home right now. My 10-year-old wolf was diagnosed with cancer late last year, and it is a battle he just lost. I can't believe I am never going to see him again. The memories make me miss him and be thankful for him. He was a good dog.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.
I hope you can be consoled somehow about the loss of your dear companion wolf. xx

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Lisa,
You've got the inner rhyme, "ries/ease" and ending rhyme, "left/bereft", as well as 6 syllables/line. So you've paid attention to the rules.
Also, you have made a point in your short poem, that when our heart is breaking because a loved one has passed, we can recall memories to help us survive until we meet again. And we will meet again. Even with our pets, I believe.
Nicely penned! I wish you "Good Luck!" in the contest.
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.

Comment from Katie Mae Dead

Excellent

Awe Lisa.
This is not just heartfelt and stunning, it a great use of the prompt. Wish I had a six for you. Beautifully presented as well.
Would you consider using the word "those" bereft in place of the word "the" bereft. Either way it's a stellar poem. I anticipate this will do well. Best one I've read so far.
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023

Thanks for your wonderful comments and for the gift of a great suggestion which I accept with gratitude for the improvement.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This essence poem, Death of a Beloved, has the proper formatting and sends out the mournful tones that must follow such a tragic loss that cannot be consoled.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

Thanks for reviewing. My ex partner died suddenly recently and I am so glad I have lots of photos to remember him by.

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

Your poem is extremely beautiful and incredibly touching.
Losing somebody you love changes your life forever.
Just perfect, thanks so much for sharing.

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 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023

Thank you for the empathy in your review.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Hi Lisa May, thank goodness for a 2 line verse which has depth and meaning here! Your verse scans beautifully, is complemented by the very atmospheric image and has a fine and inspiring message for those suffering loss. Well done and good luck! Debbie

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 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023

Thank you Debbie.
The verse is from the heart. A man I loved died suddenly this week. Although not linked by marriage and children, we shared many adventures together over the past 17 years. I will miss him from my life. I am so glad I have many photos of our times together.

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 25-Aug-2023

I'm so sorry to hear this and I think you have done him proud by commemorating him in this way. It's a beautiful touch.

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023

Thank you Debbie. It flowed out almost without thinking what to say.