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An unfortunate late night occurrence42 total reviews
Comment from Jay Squires
hahahaha! Thunder will do that to a body! This is a cute story, with an everyman feeling to it. It's good to see your face again, my dear ageless friend. It's not fair! LOL. I've been away for a few weeks. Yours is a good intro back to reviewing! Hope you are well.
Jay.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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hahahaha! Thunder will do that to a body! This is a cute story, with an everyman feeling to it. It's good to see your face again, my dear ageless friend. It's not fair! LOL. I've been away for a few weeks. Yours is a good intro back to reviewing! Hope you are well.
Jay.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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I am as well as any 80 year old about to celebrate 50 years of marriage to the same woman can be. Frankly I cannot believe that she has not asked for a divorce or tried to hurt me over all these years.
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Hang onto that woman, Nolan!
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, I admire the fact that you can have inspiration such as this, the various folk that have such inspired revelation, talks of a God who is creative, of course we are made in His image, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Heh heh, I admire the fact that you can have inspiration such as this, the various folk that have such inspired revelation, talks of a God who is creative, of course we are made in His image, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you Bro Roy. I am truly blessed.
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Well done
Comment from Teri7
The picture and your comments said it all! You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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The picture and your comments said it all! You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you Teri, your generous comments are welcome and appreciated.
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You are so welcome!!!
Comment from Ulla
Aw, the poor boy had literally lived out that expression.I must say he showed great control of himself and the situation after the event. I can only imagine his parents faces. Great entry. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Aw, the poor boy had literally lived out that expression.I must say he showed great control of himself and the situation after the event. I can only imagine his parents faces. Great entry. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much. I am greatly encouraged by the positive response to this story.
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And with good reason. :)))
Comment from jim vecchio
Perhaps you should keep Jack away from Florida for awhile. We sometimes get roaring thunder and brilliant, slashing lightning like I've never experienced! Anyhow, it was a cute little story and one all parents can relate to.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Perhaps you should keep Jack away from Florida for awhile. We sometimes get roaring thunder and brilliant, slashing lightning like I've never experienced! Anyhow, it was a cute little story and one all parents can relate to.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Personally, I would be more wary of the alligators than lightning.
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On my first trip to Florida, my niece hired a boat to tour a lake and show us alligators. My daughter was on the dock. She came over to us and the next second a huge alligator crawled up to her spot.
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Yikes! That's it, vacation is over. Let's go home right now!
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That was one day I really thanked God!
Comment from Paul Manton
Oh, Nomi, how unfortunate - but most of us have probably had that experience once in our lives. Except now I am old enough, I don't need thunder or lightning to prompt the problem!
Very good use of your hundred words; nothing seemed contrived or cut down - so it read very naturally, including the embarrassment and sensible solution which Jack finds.
Good picture, telling parents to STOP and come no closer - I have to say that it's not that simple at the end of a long drive - far from a bathroom!
Best wishes, Paul
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Oh, Nomi, how unfortunate - but most of us have probably had that experience once in our lives. Except now I am old enough, I don't need thunder or lightning to prompt the problem!
Very good use of your hundred words; nothing seemed contrived or cut down - so it read very naturally, including the embarrassment and sensible solution which Jack finds.
Good picture, telling parents to STOP and come no closer - I have to say that it's not that simple at the end of a long drive - far from a bathroom!
Best wishes, Paul
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thanks Paul. Your humor is very subtle which made it all the more enjoyable.
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Welcome Nomi.
Thanks for your piece.
Paul
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Indeed. This could have been me or you or someone dear, especially back in the fifties before puberty set in. There was a monster beneath the bed and in the closet skeletons or the walking dead. nice entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Indeed. This could have been me or you or someone dear, especially back in the fifties before puberty set in. There was a monster beneath the bed and in the closet skeletons or the walking dead. nice entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I suspect that like me, poetry just comes to us naturally, even when we are not looking to rhyme, we just do.
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At times, for sure. I can/could, once upon a time dance. It takes rhythm. I also glid (sic) playing b-ball.
Thanks
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is so true and you've conveyed it well in this succinct 100 word flash. We can be so squeamish and coy about these things but, at the end of the day, we're only human with very basic bodily functions - which sometimes take us by surprise! Apologies for not seeing this post sooner. I'm going to ensure that it's not such a hit and miss exercise next time! Good luck, Nomi! Debbie. PS I particularly thought you might be interested when I wrote the verse Stephen Lawrence (no longer promoted). Please don't think for one minute you need to review it but I would dearly welcome any single comment.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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This is so true and you've conveyed it well in this succinct 100 word flash. We can be so squeamish and coy about these things but, at the end of the day, we're only human with very basic bodily functions - which sometimes take us by surprise! Apologies for not seeing this post sooner. I'm going to ensure that it's not such a hit and miss exercise next time! Good luck, Nomi! Debbie. PS I particularly thought you might be interested when I wrote the verse Stephen Lawrence (no longer promoted). Please don't think for one minute you need to review it but I would dearly welcome any single comment.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your generous comments. I will go right away to your post and let you know what I think.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, it's such a common saying that it must have come from somewhere. Poor little fella. Mind you, these days, Jack could be 30 and still living with mum & dad...
You did a good job with this and it flows (pardon the expression) well.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Hi there,
Well, it's such a common saying that it must have come from somewhere. Poor little fella. Mind you, these days, Jack could be 30 and still living with mum & dad...
You did a good job with this and it flows (pardon the expression) well.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you. It is an absolute truth that no one can predict how our bodies will react to a sudden bit of fright that comes out of nowhere.
Comment from Isabel Fontes
The story is powerful and emotional, with a realistic tone that resonates in today's world. The descriptive and fluid narrative captivates readers, drawing them into the story.
I really enjoyed reading.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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The story is powerful and emotional, with a realistic tone that resonates in today's world. The descriptive and fluid narrative captivates readers, drawing them into the story.
I really enjoyed reading.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
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Thank you Isabel. I appreciate your kind comments.
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You are most welcome.
