2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "How Can you Stand there".
14 total reviews
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Ekphrastic poem- excellent picture presentation of the moon goddess- poem paints an interesting picture- soul's shared activities - wore the poor fellow out? Lol - suggest 'once were'? Good Job! AP
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I like your Ekphrastic poem- excellent picture presentation of the moon goddess- poem paints an interesting picture- soul's shared activities - wore the poor fellow out? Lol - suggest 'once were'? Good Job! AP
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I just changed it right before said it. It sounds better. Thank you!
I appreciate your time and review, be well.
Gypsy
Comment from LovnPeace
Wow. this almost needs a sex warning. Steam heat. It is sad when once a love and joining turns cold. Does make you wonder HOW, Why? And How, you could misjudge so far. It hurts so much and mystifies. XO Blessings. B
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Wow. this almost needs a sex warning. Steam heat. It is sad when once a love and joining turns cold. Does make you wonder HOW, Why? And How, you could misjudge so far. It hurts so much and mystifies. XO Blessings. B
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I appreciate your time and review, be well.
Gypsy
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THank you.
Comment from lyenochka
I like the use of repetition of "How can you stand there" in the title, in the first line and at the end. It gives us that feeling of disappointment because of the intense closeness they had experienced.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I like the use of repetition of "How can you stand there" in the title, in the first line and at the end. It gives us that feeling of disappointment because of the intense closeness they had experienced.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Yes! you always get me. I appreciate your time and review, be well, big sister.
love,
marival
Comment from GWHARGIS
That's the thing with breakups, you want to know why things turned out like they did. One moment you can't imagine life without this person. The next they are a stranger. You captured the hurt and confusion in this. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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That's the thing with breakups, you want to know why things turned out like they did. One moment you can't imagine life without this person. The next they are a stranger. You captured the hurt and confusion in this. Gretchen
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I appreciate your time and review, be well.
Gypsy