Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Every person's idea of heaven varies but they all share one common thread. It will be amazing. Your poem was a beautifully written poem. He does wait for us. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Thank you my dear Gretchen. I sure appreciate your very kind words!

Comment from Barbara H.

Excellent

The picture you chose was lovely. I liked the font of the poem. Made the piece stand out from others I have read. I did notice that the word love was not capitalized in the second stanza like the others. Was there a reason for that?
Barbara H.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Hi Barbara, actually the word love only appeared in by poem once. But
As far as addressing the caps, l couldn't agree with you more. That font looks so gorgeous capitalized but some believe you shouldn't use any caps except proper noun. So l didn't start my lines with them and I believe it robs it of the beauty. - Thanks for your awesome review and comments my friend.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Good entry for the Write a 5-7-5 Haiku Suite.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Thanks Gypsy. Your kind words mean a lot to me.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi,
This is a good religious haiku suite. Each seems to be inspired by a Bible verse and reminds us what waits for believers.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Thanks Joan, for your lovely review and comments. Your kindness is so appreciated.

reply by dragonpoet on 14-Aug-2023

You're welcome.
Joan

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

Each stanza of your Haiku suite is well connected and the repeat of the third line is very effective. This is a good entry for the contest. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Thanks Ginda, for your very kind review and comments.

Comment from Sally Law

Exceptional

I really enjoyed your spiritual response to the hailu suite, mystery poet. Beautifully penned and illustrated with a likeness of heaven awaiting those who believe. I believe as I have chosen Jesus as my Savior and Lord.

Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :)) xo

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Sally, thank you so very much for this lovely review and such sweet comments and words. I do appreciate your six stars, as I am truly honored.

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

This is a lovely suit of haikus .You stress the importance of heaven and say a lot about how everyone is welcome and happy there .All the best for the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Thank you Santha, for such lovely comments for my poem.

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Love your presentation. The silvery script...the Font and the image are perfect for your Haiku poem.
And, of course your gentle words float off the page...
Lisasview

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Thank you Lisa, for such a kind review and lovely comments for my Haiku Suite

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

I love a good haiku and you have given us three. Beautiful imagery in the first two lines that are grammatically connected. The satori line is perfect.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

HI Janet, I hope I don't confuse you too much, but the post that you reviewed has been changed. The reason, I got a couple messages saying that it wasn't a true haiku, as it didn't have the surprise satori ending. The truth is I am not a haiku person, and I was afraid of getting disqualified. Could you please tell me if this is more what they are looking for?

Thanks, my dear friend, and I appreciate your kind review and comments. And lol, how many people can say they reviewed one poem, but by the time they got thanked, it was a different one. Hehehe~

reply by Janet Foor on 13-Aug-2023

I used to write haiku a lot and the rules are many.
The first two lines are to be like one sentence broken into two lines. The last line should be an aha thought - like a surprise.
Other rules include no capitalization except for proper nouns. Little to no punctuation.
Haiku requires 17 syllables or less. This contest is for a 5/7/5 count so you?re kind of stuck with that. But real haiku can be less.
I personally like your satori line so it?s kind of subjective but your title gives it away so it?s not a surprise.
Your third haiku is formatted correctly except for the capitalization.
I think FanStory has some guidance for haiku.
Hope this helps some and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet

reply by Janet Foor on 13-Aug-2023

I used to write haiku a lot and the rules are many.
The first two lines are to be like one sentence broken into two lines. The last line should be an aha thought - like a surprise.
Other rules include no capitalization except for proper nouns. Little to no punctuation.
Haiku requires 17 syllables or less. This contest is for a 5/7/5 count so you?re kind of stuck with that. But real haiku can be less.
I personally like your satori line so it?s kind of subjective but your title gives it away so it?s not a surprise.
Your third haiku is formatted correctly except for the capitalization.
I think FanStory has some guidance for haiku.
Hope this helps some and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023

Janet, you are a dear and I will show you just how much I appreciate it. So I took out the unnecessary caps and reworded some. So I should probably change the title, right?
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

These are more like a 5/7/5 than a haiku, the haiku has a aha moment, called a satori, they are harder, but you've got beautiful artwork, so good luck with the contest, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Oh no Roy, I screwed this up then. I don't do too many so I thought when it said it could be any subject, that meant I could pick my own. Thanks and I will try to think of something else I can change it to.

reply by royowen on 12-Aug-2023

Of course you can choose your own, just the surprise third line, and it doesn?t have to be 5/7/5, it can be less, mind you, the contest sponsor might not know, throw out the question,

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Ok, thank you my kind friend.

reply by royowen on 12-Aug-2023

Most welcome

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023

Hi Roy, I took your advice as I don't know much about Haikus and have even only done a few 5-7-5's in my life. I am a poet, but not been my style much. So I appreciate your advice and not sure if this ending is any better, but I can guarantee for those who don't heed the call, someday it will be a surprise ending.
Not funny, but couldn't resist.
Thanks against dear Roy.

reply by royowen on 12-Aug-2023

My pleasure, all forms helps us grow, so well done, keep going.