Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello Gypsy :)
I really enjoyed reading your haibun about your daughter.
Young children are like sponges... it is their nature to absorb :)
Whilst succinct, your prose is informative and descriptive, enabling the reader to get a clear picture of Angelica.
The haiku is great - I love the reference to the bud and cuddling and spring - all symbolic to the small child :)
Best wishes, Debra

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023

Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind and helpful review.

Gypsy hugs
"Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist." - Picasso

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was a haibun poem, Gypsy. I loved the picture of Angelica, she was a beautiful child. Her and yours experience were totally adventurous. I really enjoyed your adventures. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023

Thank you, Aryr. . :)

Have a wonderful night. Blessed be.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 06-Aug-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a beautifully written, pros and Japanese poetry that you've written about your daughter. It is amazing how Suella's moms even though we struggle when the babies were little we come to the point where we just really love them more than anything in this world, I appreciate so much what you told us in the story. Patricia.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023

Thank you, Patricia. :)

Have a wonderful night.

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Thank you for sharing about your beautiful spring blossom, your lovely Angelica! And you were in the spring of your years when you had her. Great use of assonance and consonance your poem.

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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023

Thank you very much, big sister. Yes, she was a beautiful baby that has grown into a beautiful person. My children and grandchildren are my treasure, the best part of my life. You know :) you have a beautiful family too.

love,
marival

reply by lyenochka on 05-Aug-2023

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Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

What an adorable little baby. How old is she now? The haiku was warm and perfect for the subject matter in the story. Very well written. I am enjoying learning about you. Keep it coming. Gretchen

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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023

I am going to age myself. I had her when I was 17 years old and she is 48 now. I can't believe it. I still think of her as my baby. :)

Thank you very much, Gretchen. Tomorrow I will post chapter 3 and I will add this haibun to it.

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