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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "No Change Without Change"Biography/Supernatural
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Comment from prettybluebirds
As I read more of your story, I can only feel the deepest, sincere compassion for you. What an awful way for two little girls to grow up. As you said, you had no childhood. It must be terribly hard to relive and share these memories with us. I hope telling us your tragic story brings you some measure of relief.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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As I read more of your story, I can only feel the deepest, sincere compassion for you. What an awful way for two little girls to grow up. As you said, you had no childhood. It must be terribly hard to relive and share these memories with us. I hope telling us your tragic story brings you some measure of relief.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Hi! I cannot tell you how much your support means to me. You and others have really leaned into the things that I'm trying to say even though it's so difficult to read. As I write these I'm like a Blood Pressure cuff. When you have the test done, the Blood Pressure. Cuff Is very tight and the slowly over a amount of time the cugf releases. that is what it's like to write each and every chapter. And I know that when I'm done, the door will close. In there and reading it is like gold to me enjoy your evening!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
A reader if they are a writer, will be able to identify the with your first paragraph. I can fully identify with you, as I an up to ch. 5 for my autobiography. It's stressful as I bare my soul.
You have great courage. I've had a few thank me as what I wrote was healing for them. I'm sure there will be readers here who may whisper to you they can relate. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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A reader if they are a writer, will be able to identify the with your first paragraph. I can fully identify with you, as I an up to ch. 5 for my autobiography. It's stressful as I bare my soul.
You have great courage. I've had a few thank me as what I wrote was healing for them. I'm sure there will be readers here who may whisper to you they can relate. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your insight and for your understanding. So I was unable to get back to you sooner but I am back now and happy to receive your review. Thank you so much. I hope your day is great!
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Comment from JSD
Oh Lea. Lost for words again. Thoughts and prayers for you. Xxx. My only hope is that you can take solace in your exceptional writing. Your poetic voice comes out even in your prose. Take care.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Oh Lea. Lost for words again. Thoughts and prayers for you. Xxx. My only hope is that you can take solace in your exceptional writing. Your poetic voice comes out even in your prose. Take care.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your words your insight and your empathy always valuable to. Yes, I write for the specific purpose of peeling off the layers I've been dragging around for too long. Create the path of releasing this all. I'm afraid it gets worse before it gets better. It is difficult to write about it but at the same time cleansing. I thank you again for your attention. Have an awesome day!
Comment from Ricky1024
Unfortunately we all have some degree of misery to face.
Some even at ayoung age.
This was well written and documented, rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this Lea and enjoy this day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Unfortunately we all have some degree of misery to face.
Some even at ayoung age.
This was well written and documented, rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this Lea and enjoy this day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Thank you again and you too I appreciate you and your review and all that you do have a marvelous day!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Hi Lea,
I'm glad I stumbled across this today. Your experiences are not totally foreign to me (I was never hit), and I know what it takes from you emotionally every time you have to sit down at the computer. It leaves you drained and angry and sad, but in the long run, it helps to purge those feelings. At least, that's been my experience.
This is very well-written, thoughtful, emotional . . . It reads like a diary. I hope you will continue your story.
Just a couple of comments:
The sentence that begins, "Now during the time . . ." I would move the comma so that it reads, "Now during the time my mom was with her second husband, we moved four or five times I can recall."
For the sake of making this more reader-friendly, I would add a space between paragraphs. Perhaps you're spacing it this way for drama - pouring your soul out in one long narrative - but this piece has plenty of drama without that.
Take care,
Pam
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Hi Lea,
I'm glad I stumbled across this today. Your experiences are not totally foreign to me (I was never hit), and I know what it takes from you emotionally every time you have to sit down at the computer. It leaves you drained and angry and sad, but in the long run, it helps to purge those feelings. At least, that's been my experience.
This is very well-written, thoughtful, emotional . . . It reads like a diary. I hope you will continue your story.
Just a couple of comments:
The sentence that begins, "Now during the time . . ." I would move the comma so that it reads, "Now during the time my mom was with her second husband, we moved four or five times I can recall."
For the sake of making this more reader-friendly, I would add a space between paragraphs. Perhaps you're spacing it this way for drama - pouring your soul out in one long narrative - but this piece has plenty of drama without that.
Take care,
Pam
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Thank you pam those are really good suggestions are differently going to implement! And thank you too, for your insight. Only a poet knows how it do they not? Your kind words. And your comments are important to me as well as your time. So thank you again and I hope you have an amazing day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is brilliant Lea and yet I have no sixes! Your story-telling just gets better and better and I was immersed with horror all the way through and could actually feel some of your pain and backbone. This was an horrific experience of childhood but so important to release it from your memory and try to distance yourself like a third party. Though all your descriptive detail is excellent, the one sentence that stands out for me as being impressively simple and evocative is: "my world and my sister's world shrank down to the end of a large fist." Well done! Debbie
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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This is brilliant Lea and yet I have no sixes! Your story-telling just gets better and better and I was immersed with horror all the way through and could actually feel some of your pain and backbone. This was an horrific experience of childhood but so important to release it from your memory and try to distance yourself like a third party. Though all your descriptive detail is excellent, the one sentence that stands out for me as being impressively simple and evocative is: "my world and my sister's world shrank down to the end of a large fist." Well done! Debbie
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Debbie, so much for your amazing insight. And you're kind review I'm very much honored and pleased by it. Your comments ever important to me and I am especially privileged to receive your review. I hope your day is amazing thank you again!