Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

cool mountain shape

last line suggestion: "mount everest in its sight"
for some reason 'eyes' sound weird... or it could be just me lol

great double haiku picture poem!!

thank you for sharing
shelley :)




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 Comment Written 13-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023

4 stars? Is it for the word eyes?

In its eyes where the tallest mountain are reflected. It's a zen concept. You wouldn't be able to reflect anything in 'sight'.

Thank you very much for your good review and feedback.

Gypsy hugs

reply by shelley kaye on 13-Jul-2023

omg! stupid mouse cursor slipped again! totally meant 5. i fixed it! sorry!!

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023

It's okay. It has happened to me a few times :)

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I love the picture it complements the magic of your poem. "Cold

wind cuts

like sharp glass.

Alpine crow flies

over the tallest peaks --

Mount Everest in its eyes"

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 Comment Written 13-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs