Forgive Anyway
Potlatch Poetry Club ~ Canzonetta ~ week of 6-17-20 2340 total reviews
Comment from Rena Smith
Great job! I like this poem because the artist sounded genuine in her writing. She was to the point. It was sad which is reality. I like that the poem was easy to dissect. I didn't have to try and read the poet's mine. It kept my attention to the very end.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Great job! I like this poem because the artist sounded genuine in her writing. She was to the point. It was sad which is reality. I like that the poem was easy to dissect. I didn't have to try and read the poet's mine. It kept my attention to the very end.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much! Xoxo
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You're welcome Jessica.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Wish I had six stars for you but I have used them all. Sounds like you had
a hard childhood. Only a very strong person can forgive after mistreatment.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Wish I had six stars for you but I have used them all. Sounds like you had
a hard childhood. Only a very strong person can forgive after mistreatment.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you, your kind words mean so much to me. Xoxox
Jessica
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club poem was well done, Jessica. Great job with
the rhymes and your repeated line. That repeated line
fir in seamlessly wherever is showed. Your message was
clearly expressed, and it was an important one. Yes, in
order to be free, one has to forgive and move on. That
doesn't mean one forgets. Your poem read smoothly.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Your club poem was well done, Jessica. Great job with
the rhymes and your repeated line. That repeated line
fir in seamlessly wherever is showed. Your message was
clearly expressed, and it was an important one. Yes, in
order to be free, one has to forgive and move on. That
doesn't mean one forgets. Your poem read smoothly.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan! Loving the prompts!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Mintybee
This poem was well written in that it follows the form exactly as you explained in your author's notes. The emotion in this poem of a forceful break away from a grudge was impressively conveyed. This shows forgiveness less in the form of restoring a relationship, and more in the form of asserting independence away from needing that relationship. I think the last octave was strong, conclusive, and a satisfactory end to this speech to someone who caused a lot of pain. Well done.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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This poem was well written in that it follows the form exactly as you explained in your author's notes. The emotion in this poem of a forceful break away from a grudge was impressively conveyed. This shows forgiveness less in the form of restoring a relationship, and more in the form of asserting independence away from needing that relationship. I think the last octave was strong, conclusive, and a satisfactory end to this speech to someone who caused a lot of pain. Well done.
Mintybee
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, your perceptive review is very appreciated!
Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Carlos' girl
This is forgiveness?Wow.just wow. Okay.
To me, the entire tone is angry and filled with something really toxic. Get me out of the third ring of hell please.
Maybe try forgetting instead?
Best of luck.
Judith
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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This is forgiveness?Wow.just wow. Okay.
To me, the entire tone is angry and filled with something really toxic. Get me out of the third ring of hell please.
Maybe try forgetting instead?
Best of luck.
Judith
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Hi Judith,
My sincerest apologies for subjecting you to the third ring of literary hell - this may shock you... But your considerate suggestion to ?forget? is one I've tried! No luck though, unfortunately. I'm sorry you found my expression so off-putting. If the residual anger from my eight-year-old self could ever subside, I will hope to, at the very least, inspire purgatory heights for you.
Thanks for the feedback.
Jessica.
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Seems like you havent forgiven imho
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Which is fine. But why be vindictive. Your 8 year old self is a grown up now
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You are obviously free to interpret my writing however you?d like. Just as I am free to my own self expression through my own writing- and in this case, about my own childhood abuse.
I respect your opinion of my writing, even if you find it unenjoyable. Anything we post here is subject to that.
Calling me vindictive and commenting on my adulthood is where you lost me.
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Oh well
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Anyhooo. As per fanstory traditions i still gave you your obligatory five stars. So you are good. I just disagree with your version of forgiveness
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I just find this poem to be powered by anger, not forgiveness. Which is fine. Anger is very empowering. But forgiveness moves way past that
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Understood- we can agree to disagree
Comment from MissMerri
Well done in every way, Jessica. The theme is carried consistently throughout the poem and meter and rhyme were totally consistent as well. I was, once again, greatly impressed by the skillful way this poem was written. Keep it up! MM
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Well done in every way, Jessica. The theme is carried consistently throughout the poem and meter and rhyme were totally consistent as well. I was, once again, greatly impressed by the skillful way this poem was written. Keep it up! MM
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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I am so honored you think so- Your feedback is of immense value to me. Thank you so much for, once again, making my day! :)
Xo
Jess
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This gives the feeling of a child forgiving a mother for ignoring the fact of the father abusing her. This is the sad story of child abuse. It reminds us that forgiveness is something that can't be stolen, like youth and innocence. It also brings to the surface the fact that forgiveness brings peace with the past. Well done entry for the potlatch.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope you've had a good weekend and continue to have one tool
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Hi Jessica,
This gives the feeling of a child forgiving a mother for ignoring the fact of the father abusing her. This is the sad story of child abuse. It reminds us that forgiveness is something that can't be stolen, like youth and innocence. It also brings to the surface the fact that forgiveness brings peace with the past. Well done entry for the potlatch.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Hope you've had a good weekend and continue to have one tool
Joan
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Joan, thank you so much. I have to tell you, I truly appreciate your understanding. You are correct- only it was not a father, but a step-father. Regardless, your perception is spot on and your insight is always very much appreciated! Thank you so much.
Xo
Jessica
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You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from Tom Horonzy
If you say so, who am I to differ what a Canzonetta is?
Is this tale of woe a true tale? Was it a father, mother, or sibling. Friend, lover or even a spouse? Whatever, I get your message.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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If you say so, who am I to differ what a Canzonetta is?
Is this tale of woe a true tale? Was it a father, mother, or sibling. Friend, lover or even a spouse? Whatever, I get your message.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much! It's unfortunately a true situation from childhood involving a parent and step-parent.
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Comment from Sally Law
Virtual six! This is so powerful because forgiveness is powerful. I learned this with my alcoholic father. I just couldn't wait for him to apologise, because if I had, it would have ruined my life. He died before my husband could meet him. A sad end.
Thank you for sharing. These things aren't easy to share. Sen you my best today as always.
Sal xoxo's
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Virtual six! This is so powerful because forgiveness is powerful. I learned this with my alcoholic father. I just couldn't wait for him to apologise, because if I had, it would have ruined my life. He died before my husband could meet him. A sad end.
Thank you for sharing. These things aren't easy to share. Sen you my best today as always.
Sal xoxo's
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Oh sally, I'm so sorry. Alcohol took part in this dynamic, as well. Your strength continues to amaze me!
Xo
Jess
Comment from JLR
Jessica a very commendable Canzetta poem. Excellent presentation in form and word use with a powerful refrain. You are to be congratulated for this effort. Thank you for sharing your talent.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Jessica a very commendable Canzetta poem. Excellent presentation in form and word use with a powerful refrain. You are to be congratulated for this effort. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That means the world to me, thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica