As I Sip on My Chardonnay
The horrors of war disgust and frustrate us all.30 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Chardonnay perhaps might drown out the sorrows but only until morning. You have a nice presentation throughout your poem. The imagery presents some sorrow and despair. Enjoyed reading your poem
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Chardonnay perhaps might drown out the sorrows but only until morning. You have a nice presentation throughout your poem. The imagery presents some sorrow and despair. Enjoyed reading your poem
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Rosemary,
I am so glad you enjoyed reading my poem. It is a concept I had running around in my head for some time. Finally it came out. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
You've told us an entire story here of one man's growing frustration, then with his decision to act - while the rest of us will sit at home and sip on our chardonnay.
Very well done!
Pam
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You've told us an entire story here of one man's growing frustration, then with his decision to act - while the rest of us will sit at home and sip on our chardonnay.
Very well done!
Pam
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Thanks Pam for taking the time to read and review my poem. Not a happy topic but it was a concept I wanted to get out there. Please take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
PS Thanks so much for the six stars.
Comment from jenintorre
I think this poem is brilliant. It is heartbreaking and profound. I particularly like 'Boys are dead never to be men'.
I love the underlying irony in this poem. I hope you win the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
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I think this poem is brilliant. It is heartbreaking and profound. I particularly like 'Boys are dead never to be men'.
I love the underlying irony in this poem. I hope you win the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Jen,
Wow thanks for the six stars and so glad you enjoyed it. It is a concept I had running around my head for some period of time. I am happy with how it eventually turned out.
Please take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is really an excellent poem. The images are "raw" as a revelation of the misery that war brings. I like the changes in the final two sentences that are the poet's reaction to your own visions. (I don't think Nazis needs an apostrophe.)
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This is really an excellent poem. The images are "raw" as a revelation of the misery that war brings. I like the changes in the final two sentences that are the poet's reaction to your own visions. (I don't think Nazis needs an apostrophe.)
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Verna,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I believe I am with you on the spelling of Nazi. I will get to changing that. Glad you enjoyed it . Have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
It is easy to sip on a glass of ... whatever and to distance ourselves from the chaos created by madmen round the world. It isn't affecting us, but the fools in power should be eradicated like vermin in a home be it in Eastern Europe, Iran, Chad and even at our borders.
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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It is easy to sip on a glass of ... whatever and to distance ourselves from the chaos created by madmen round the world. It isn't affecting us, but the fools in power should be eradicated like vermin in a home be it in Eastern Europe, Iran, Chad and even at our borders.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Tom,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Unfortunately, there are a lot of madmen running around at the the moment. Perhaps a big spray can might do the trick.
Anyway, have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment from Carlos' girl
Hey i may be old and grey but i still sip on my chardonnay.
A most clever refrain you have running throughout the poem. I guess it is meant to indicate the blase attitude one may have towards war. I think like the poor, there will always be war. Look at the good things you've got...
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Hey i may be old and grey but i still sip on my chardonnay.
A most clever refrain you have running throughout the poem. I guess it is meant to indicate the blase attitude one may have towards war. I think like the poor, there will always be war. Look at the good things you've got...
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and I to think that there will always be war. Anyway, while you can, enjoy the day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Elizabeth Henderson
Well written. This paints a great picture of someone who wants to tune everything out, but eventually can't. I think it shows the dilemma we all experience with pressing social issues and wars that we cannot do anything about.
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Well written. This paints a great picture of someone who wants to tune everything out, but eventually can't. I think it shows the dilemma we all experience with pressing social issues and wars that we cannot do anything about.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Elizabeth,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem.It was a concept I had running through my head for quite some time. Anyway you take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from royowen
One could imagine some of the dictators that went to war on the world while they sipped on their Chardonnay, (my wife love's white wine, but just one a week) Putin, Hitler, Nero, Ghengis Kahn, I loved this Barry, most inventive, well dine, blessings Roy
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One could imagine some of the dictators that went to war on the world while they sipped on their Chardonnay, (my wife love's white wine, but just one a week) Putin, Hitler, Nero, Ghengis Kahn, I loved this Barry, most inventive, well dine, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Roy,
Thanks for reviewing my poem and I am glad you enjoyed it. I had the concept running through my head for some time and finally got it down on paper. Take care and have a great day. Oh, and I do also like a white wine or two.
Regards
Barry
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Well done
Comment from Wendy G
A thoughtful and poignant poem about the futility and horror of war. It is easy to be complacent about it, horrific to be traumatised by it. And the desire to return in order to make a difference is compelling. A elegant change in the last lines as the decision is considered and then made. Best wishes for your free form poem.
Wendy
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A thoughtful and poignant poem about the futility and horror of war. It is easy to be complacent about it, horrific to be traumatised by it. And the desire to return in order to make a difference is compelling. A elegant change in the last lines as the decision is considered and then made. Best wishes for your free form poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Wendy,
Thanks so much for your review. I am glad you enjoyed it.I have had the concept for the poem running around in my head for quite some time. Finally got it out. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Regina Elliott
A 6 star poem, but alas, I'm
out of 6 stars, so a 6th star
from Heaven. This is a sad
and poignant write on the
tragedy of war and its many
victims. We lose both military
and civilians of all different
ages. A sorrowful shame.
My very best wishes for the
contest. All the best to you. ~
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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A 6 star poem, but alas, I'm
out of 6 stars, so a 6th star
from Heaven. This is a sad
and poignant write on the
tragedy of war and its many
victims. We lose both military
and civilians of all different
ages. A sorrowful shame.
My very best wishes for the
contest. All the best to you. ~
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Just love your 6th star from heaven. Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Please take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.