Guided by Faith
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Comment from Teri7
This is another great chapter you have penned. I love Seth and Emma getting to know each other better and little Molly and Ace. You always use great descriptive words. Can't wait til the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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This is another great chapter you have penned. I love Seth and Emma getting to know each other better and little Molly and Ace. You always use great descriptive words. Can't wait til the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are so very welcome!!!
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Nice job Barbara. You said long? I think the read was just the required length, never boring, always pleasant, with well defined characters. I liked the dialogue particularly, and the subtle use of humour.
Congratulations
Great job!!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Nice job Barbara. You said long? I think the read was just the required length, never boring, always pleasant, with well defined characters. I liked the dialogue particularly, and the subtle use of humour.
Congratulations
Great job!!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
In the aftermath of the storm and all the clearing-up something obviously strange is going on with a suspicious man in a Crown Victoria. A tension therefore is brewing in the plot against the more mundane activities being carried out. This fiction is well written with skilful dialogue helping to put flesh on the characters. An enjoyable read with useful background notes. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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In the aftermath of the storm and all the clearing-up something obviously strange is going on with a suspicious man in a Crown Victoria. A tension therefore is brewing in the plot against the more mundane activities being carried out. This fiction is well written with skilful dialogue helping to put flesh on the characters. An enjoyable read with useful background notes. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
I like your story. I enjoy when an author takes the time to properly develope character relationships. Unless, of course a rapid progression fits the nature of the character. Nice work here.
This sentence tripped me up. I am not sure if it's the three dialogues in it or what. I was flowing along, enjoying, then hit this one and had to read it three times. Just a heads up in case you want to smooth it out somehow. (Maybe 'as' as 'when'). Not sure.
"Are you sure?" After he nodded, she said, "Thank you." As Seth shook his head, she said, "You're doing it again."
(Just my two cents.)
Good work, my friend!
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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I like your story. I enjoy when an author takes the time to properly develope character relationships. Unless, of course a rapid progression fits the nature of the character. Nice work here.
This sentence tripped me up. I am not sure if it's the three dialogues in it or what. I was flowing along, enjoying, then hit this one and had to read it three times. Just a heads up in case you want to smooth it out somehow. (Maybe 'as' as 'when'). Not sure.
"Are you sure?" After he nodded, she said, "Thank you." As Seth shook his head, she said, "You're doing it again."
(Just my two cents.)
Good work, my friend!
D
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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I will recheck that area. Emma is speaking the entire time and Seth is reacting. It is a little confusing. Thank you for pointing it out.
Comment from Wendy G
Well, Seth is admitting his feelings for her, at least to himself. She also seems interested. Are there some complications to a romance? The guy in the car is a sinister character, so I presume he has some malevolent scheme which will interrupt their relationship. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Well, Seth is admitting his feelings for her, at least to himself. She also seems interested. Are there some complications to a romance? The guy in the car is a sinister character, so I presume he has some malevolent scheme which will interrupt their relationship. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your kind review. The guy in the car is an evil person.
Comment from estory
Seth is throwing himself into taking care of Emma, it is obvious he is falling for her. She seems to be hanging back a little, playing hard to get, or hard to pin down. She is someone for whom taking care of oneself seems important. The dialogue carries the show, as always in your work, and it is lively, carries an undercurrent of insinuations and emotions, and is quite realistic. You have some well defined characters here. estory
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Seth is throwing himself into taking care of Emma, it is obvious he is falling for her. She seems to be hanging back a little, playing hard to get, or hard to pin down. She is someone for whom taking care of oneself seems important. The dialogue carries the show, as always in your work, and it is lively, carries an undercurrent of insinuations and emotions, and is quite realistic. You have some well defined characters here. estory
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad you have Emma directly confront Seth about his head shaking and that they can have a good-natured banter about it. The fallen branches makes sense but I'm surprised that they even have power and the lumber deliver came just right on time. After a tornado, a lot of things get delayed or stopped just like the town stopped.
But at least the relationship is really picking up!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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I'm glad you have Emma directly confront Seth about his head shaking and that they can have a good-natured banter about it. The fallen branches makes sense but I'm surprised that they even have power and the lumber deliver came just right on time. After a tornado, a lot of things get delayed or stopped just like the town stopped.
But at least the relationship is really picking up!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Only if the tornado is a direct hit. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jim Wile
Great chapter, Barbara. I like all the head-shaking and the fact that they banter about it and kid each other about it now.
Usually head-shaking shows a negative while nodding shows a positive, and it holds here too. What he's saying with his head shakes is: There's no denying--you amuse me, you amaze me, you impress me. He is entranced by what a good and kind and thankful person she is (cute, too) and can't deny that he's falling hard for her.
I also liked how you continued the suspense of the mystery man in the Crown Vic.
I'm wondering when that first kiss will come? I'm really enjoying this story
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The only mistake I detected (and perhaps it was intentional) was the sentence: Why she didn't use the spare bedroom? I thought it should have been "didn't she."
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Great chapter, Barbara. I like all the head-shaking and the fact that they banter about it and kid each other about it now.
Usually head-shaking shows a negative while nodding shows a positive, and it holds here too. What he's saying with his head shakes is: There's no denying--you amuse me, you amaze me, you impress me. He is entranced by what a good and kind and thankful person she is (cute, too) and can't deny that he's falling hard for her.
I also liked how you continued the suspense of the mystery man in the Crown Vic.
I'm wondering when that first kiss will come? I'm really enjoying this story
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The only mistake I detected (and perhaps it was intentional) was the sentence: Why she didn't use the spare bedroom? I thought it should have been "didn't she."
Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the catch. My brain works faster than my fingers and then I read what it's supposed to say and not what it actually says. I always appreciate help.
Comment from Un1qu3
With this story it wasn't at all hard to pick up from where it started without reading the previous chapters. I was able to catch on to the story line with out getting lost in the story. Very good work.
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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With this story it wasn't at all hard to pick up from where it started without reading the previous chapters. I was able to catch on to the story line with out getting lost in the story. Very good work.
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Comment Written 17-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Usually when you give somebody four stars, you tell them what needs to be corrected. You've given me a five-star review. Please let me know how to make it better so I can get five stars.
Comment from lancellot
I know you like to take things slow in your romance, and I'm not suggesting your characters do anything naughty. But... I hope it is clear that... let's take your male protagonists for example. They are all the same. They may have different jobs, and ages (on paper), but they all (including having a dog) behave exactly the same. Look at the ages of Seth and Emma. Do they act their age or any different than the people from your last book?
Just something to consider.
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"I need to find out who that guy is and fast." He stared out the window until the car left and then went to bed.
-Huh? He is the sheriff. Why doesn't he walk out and at least get the license plate?
"Thank you for offering, but it didn't seem right." When Seth's eyebrows rose, she continued, "I've slept here two nights in a row."
- This didn't answer the question.
PS: This is a reoccurring issue. Your male starts to fall in-love with your female. Okay, but why? There never is real reason shown. And so far, there is none here. I mean. They are super intelligent, pretty, nearly perfect women (who have been abused, please not Emma too), but there is no reason for the male, or the Sheriff here not to simply, ask Emma on a date. No reason not to, especially given their ages and statuses.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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I know you like to take things slow in your romance, and I'm not suggesting your characters do anything naughty. But... I hope it is clear that... let's take your male protagonists for example. They are all the same. They may have different jobs, and ages (on paper), but they all (including having a dog) behave exactly the same. Look at the ages of Seth and Emma. Do they act their age or any different than the people from your last book?
Just something to consider.
notes:
"I need to find out who that guy is and fast." He stared out the window until the car left and then went to bed.
-Huh? He is the sheriff. Why doesn't he walk out and at least get the license plate?
"Thank you for offering, but it didn't seem right." When Seth's eyebrows rose, she continued, "I've slept here two nights in a row."
- This didn't answer the question.
PS: This is a reoccurring issue. Your male starts to fall in-love with your female. Okay, but why? There never is real reason shown. And so far, there is none here. I mean. They are super intelligent, pretty, nearly perfect women (who have been abused, please not Emma too), but there is no reason for the male, or the Sheriff here not to simply, ask Emma on a date. No reason not to, especially given their ages and statuses.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Why doesn't he walk out and at least get the license plate? - Seth already has the license plate and the car is registered to a dead guy.
No Emma has not been abused, but she had been very protected, almost in a bubble. That will come out later. I guess unless a female produces there's no reason for a man to hang around.
I know you don't like my style of romance novels and that's okay. I am published, and have a following, other than FanStory. I do meet the authors. People show up to see ME!!!!! and to buy my books. No, I'm not getting rich, but they are selling. I will probably never be a best seller, but that's okay too.
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Hey, I mean no disrespect. This is only a review. A real review.
Emma, the college grad, does not behave like someone from a bubble. If the LP came back from a dead guy, I'm surprised Seth didn't go after him? He could've, right? I don't understand the produces part. I only ask, considering, their both in their twenties, why don't they act like it? (demeanor, maturity, and actions)
Why doesn't Seth, just say, "Let's go to a movie?" What's stopping him? He is a young single man, right?
I only suggest that reasons for these, be given. You don't have to. But... for their romance, there are no visible obstacles preventing them from doing what normal everyday people do. That's all.
My review isn't about style. It is about content and variance of characters.
Congrats on selling books.
