Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Oh, I loved this wonderful haiku written for the contest. The imagery is so beautifully written. I can just visualise it. All the best of luck with this marvelous haiku poem. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks, Ulla. Glad you liked this - turns out it was a winner.

Steve

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is a so simple it simply flies at you. I do like this one, it has the two lines that give us the picture, and the third line finishes it nicely. Very well done! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks, Sandra - glad you enjoyed this. Turns out it was a winner.

Steve

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Good morning, Steve!
What is stunning - and deeply appreciated - about your haiku is that it could easily be read two ways: as is, or with the last line being first and "fragile memories" serving as the satori - but at the end...
Delightful and deeply resonating with me...

Thank you for sharing,
diane

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks, Diane.
Yes, tossed a coin about switching first and last lines.
Looks like the committee liked it this way around too!

Steve

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

You have a well-done haiku. The presentation, the photograph, the font, and the style with its offset lines are excellent graphics that enhance the poem. The imagery is clear and inviting. Terry.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Terry, many thanks for the kind words. Turns out my wee poem was a winner.

Steve

reply by Terry Broxson on 20-Apr-2023

Congratulations!

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

Very interesting theme. The poem reveals the fragility and beauty of the most tiny creatures God has made. The word choice is judicious, such as : flutters on frail wings...
Great job!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Mario, thanks for the kind words

Steve

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Steve,
Nice imagery and wording for your haiku different and gentle and portrays the fragility of life. Nicely presented too. Good luck in the contest

Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thanks, Chrissy - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Steve!

The black and white presentation on this piece is striking... the words structured to flit like the moth across the page. As always, your form and presentation are impeccable.

Good luck in the contest!

Kim

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Hi, Kim. Thanks for the kind words. Hope all goes well with you and yours. Alaska, right? How's the weather up there? Seems mainland US is copping it at the moment.

Steve

reply by ~Dovey on 17-Apr-2023

Winter is trying her best to hang on herein Alaska. Our days are getting longer and it is warming up, but still spitting a little bit of snow each week. We are hoping it will get to seriously melting soon! Hope your family is well, too.

Kim

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is lovely. Yes, memories can be fragile, especially when you get older. Comparing them to a moths wings is very appropriate, they are indeed, fragile creatures. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thanks, Boogie. Not my favourite form, but I do enjoy playing around with the possibilities when I can find a suitable theme. This one seems to work.

Steve

Comment from Jessica Wheeler

Exceptional

This haiku is lovely.

You've captured the essence of fragility and memories quite masterfully in just three lines.

I especially appreciated your clever use of juxtaposition in lines 1 and 3 and alliteration in line 2.

"still dark" adds a stunning layer of depth.

You've written an exceptional haiku.

<3
Jessica

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Jessica, many thanks for the kind words in your fine review and the extra shiny star.

You'll have to educate this old fella on what <3 represents at the end of your review. You don't want to know what that 3 looks like when tipped on its side as I try to interpret it!

Steve

reply by Jessica Wheeler on 17-Apr-2023

Steve, I'm cracking up. The intention is for it to look like a... Heart! It?s meant to be viewed tipped on it's side- which makes this all the more amusing lol I can now see it does look like something else... other than what I intended... oops.

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

This is gorgeous--both the photograph and the haiku. We used to have a lot of moths here. Unfortunately, like other insects (except for blackflies, mosquitoes and gnats, of which we still have plenty) most of them are gone too. Sign of the times, I guess.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Mary. thanks for the kind words. We still have plenty of moths here. Another reviewer tells me they are more essential than bees for our continued existence on this planet. I have to admit I used the moth more to represent the fragility of memory than as a heroic environmental warrior!

Steve

reply by Mary Shifman on 17-Apr-2023

You are welcome. I'm not sure I agree that moths are more essential than bees but I do worry about the future of out planet. Today, I read that we're losing more and more bird species.