Take Flight
Emerging adulthood is a myth.33 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the two line poem contest. The sprinkle of alliteration and rhyme work well - and the message reflective and wise. I like it. Well done and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry for the two line poem contest. The sprinkle of alliteration and rhyme work well - and the message reflective and wise. I like it. Well done and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and your kind words.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the two-lined poem contest. The text is a great size. You balanced the text well in the poem box. Your message is stated with clarity. You even made it rhyme. Your AN is a poem waiting to be written about changing adulthood. It added to the meaning of your two lines. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the two-lined poem contest. The text is a great size. You balanced the text well in the poem box. Your message is stated with clarity. You even made it rhyme. Your AN is a poem waiting to be written about changing adulthood. It added to the meaning of your two lines. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the review. I take suggestions to heart. Perhaps I will make the poem
Happenq
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You are welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
You're absolutely right. You never see eagles returning back to their original nests with their babies to leave them with their parents. Once they're launched, they continue to soar with the wind beneath their wings. We need to give better flying lessons...
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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You're absolutely right. You never see eagles returning back to their original nests with their babies to leave them with their parents. Once they're launched, they continue to soar with the wind beneath their wings. We need to give better flying lessons...
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Well said! Thanks for the review
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your imagery in this short poem is perfect for the message it conveys. In two lines you have invited us to think about how we prepare our children to take flight and how we must let them fly, not away, but ever upwards. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Your imagery in this short poem is perfect for the message it conveys. In two lines you have invited us to think about how we prepare our children to take flight and how we must let them fly, not away, but ever upwards. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thanks for your review and insightful comments.
Comment from mermaids
We seem to have a generation of failure to launch. Your two line poem is so true to life, birds send their offspring away into the wild blue yonder but human children seem unable to leave the house sometimes. Excellent theme for a poem and I am sure many can relate.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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We seem to have a generation of failure to launch. Your two line poem is so true to life, birds send their offspring away into the wild blue yonder but human children seem unable to leave the house sometimes. Excellent theme for a poem and I am sure many can relate.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the review and your insightful comments.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Very well written. I enjoyed your poem. The artwork was awesome, and went well with your poem. I especially liked the last part of it. Humankind could better launch their offspring. Thought provoking poem, and interesting. I especially am glad for your author's notes. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Very well written. I enjoyed your poem. The artwork was awesome, and went well with your poem. I especially liked the last part of it. Humankind could better launch their offspring. Thought provoking poem, and interesting. I especially am glad for your author's notes. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you nfor reviewing it. I rarely do author's notes, but your comments are making me rethink that
Comment from karenina
I think this is exquisitely penned. So much so that I stopped and reread it several times as I considered all the entries. I hope I'm back to congratulate you for a well-thought-out and nuanced poem!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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I think this is exquisitely penned. So much so that I stopped and reread it several times as I considered all the entries. I hope I'm back to congratulate you for a well-thought-out and nuanced poem!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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That means so much to me! Thanks for reviewing and for your kind words.
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Well deserved, my anonymous friend!
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Two Line Poetry Contest. It's hard to let go our children but it must be done.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good connection between lines.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Excellent entry for the Two Line Poetry Contest. It's hard to let go our children but it must be done.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good connection between lines.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much for your review!
Comment from Eternal Muse
You packed volumes of wisdom and imagination into these two lines. A great rendition of the contest. Admired your imagery, visuals and a fantastic presentation.
Good luck in the booths, it should go very well.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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You packed volumes of wisdom and imagination into these two lines. A great rendition of the contest. Admired your imagery, visuals and a fantastic presentation.
Good luck in the booths, it should go very well.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for those kind words!
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for reviewing it and for your kind words.
