A Narrow Trail
Forays into Forms ~ Quatern25 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
I wrote a quatern a few weeks ago. It's one of my favorite forms! I just tried a metrical echo by Dolly. I love experimenting- and I can see you do, too! Great job.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I wrote a quatern a few weeks ago. It's one of my favorite forms! I just tried a metrical echo by Dolly. I love experimenting- and I can see you do, too! Great job.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Yes, I love playing around with the varied forms. I just read your Metrical Echo and you really did a good job with it. I think you and I both enjoy the fun of figuring out 'form poetry'. FreeVerse is a challenge for me. Thanks so much, June.
Melissa
Comment from Sarah Tummey
Clever! I hadn't heard of a Quatern before. I spotted (before reading your notes) what you had done with repeating that first line.
I liked that this was a story poem - that first of all he sought clarity without success, but when he prayed for strength, the solace came.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Clever! I hadn't heard of a Quatern before. I spotted (before reading your notes) what you had done with repeating that first line.
I liked that this was a story poem - that first of all he sought clarity without success, but when he prayed for strength, the solace came.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Sarah... thanks for your lovely words and your insights into this verse. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done, Melissa. It is tough to use that line four times, but you have done a good job of it. You have also done a really good job with the rhyme scheme.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Nicely done, Melissa. It is tough to use that line four times, but you have done a good job of it. You have also done a really good job with the rhyme scheme.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Paul. Thank you. I haven't written a Quatern in about two years. I thought I would take it out for a spin :)
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
My word that looks cold. You won't find those trees brackened at that time of year. The most you would get is brown, dead decomposing fronds of bracken. But in the summer that is when it might be overgrown with bracken on the ground up to about waist height.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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My word that looks cold. You won't find those trees brackened at that time of year. The most you would get is brown, dead decomposing fronds of bracken. But in the summer that is when it might be overgrown with bracken on the ground up to about waist height.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thanks Jim... the bracken sounded good at the time. LOL. I hadn't found my artwork at the time, so went with it. :)
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
Nicely written, contemplative quatern. The repeated line is effective in each stanza. I also like the rhyme and flow of the poem. The picture invites the reader in, as do your words. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Nicely written, contemplative quatern. The repeated line is effective in each stanza. I also like the rhyme and flow of the poem. The picture invites the reader in, as do your words. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Carol. Thank you. I so appreciate your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I have not written a Quatern for a very long time and thought I would dust off this form. :). Hugs!
Melissa
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Enjoyed it! Hugs!
Comment from patcelaw
I found this poem to be very soothing and well written. You did a beautiful job with the rhyme, even though rhyming was not essential. Keep writing and sharing with us. Patricia.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I found this poem to be very soothing and well written. You did a beautiful job with the rhyme, even though rhyming was not essential. Keep writing and sharing with us. Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hi Patricia. Thank you very much. So appreciate your thoughts.
Melissa
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great poem. Beautiful write, and the photo was perfect to create the imagery with your poem. Your word flow was perfect, and the rhyming pattern, great job with that. The photo made me think of my winters back home in Michigan. I live in Alabama, so we mostly don't get snow. If we do, it's gone withing a few hours. Thank you for your author's notes, because I didn't know what a quatern is. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Great poem. Beautiful write, and the photo was perfect to create the imagery with your poem. Your word flow was perfect, and the rhyming pattern, great job with that. The photo made me think of my winters back home in Michigan. I live in Alabama, so we mostly don't get snow. If we do, it's gone withing a few hours. Thank you for your author's notes, because I didn't know what a quatern is. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, Jacquelyn. I appreciate your review and sharing your thoughts too :)
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Your Quatern was nicely done, my friend. It speaks of our journey as we travel through life. We are always traveling the unknow and it is a narrow trail with many unexpected storms and trials. Yes, Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Your Quatern was nicely done, my friend. It speaks of our journey as we travel through life. We are always traveling the unknow and it is a narrow trail with many unexpected storms and trials. Yes, Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Nancy. Thank you for your lovely review. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
Great start to February, Melissa. Your rhythm is perfect. It felt wonderful when I read it aloud. And there were so many layers of meaning. Storms are certainties for us all. It takes inner strength to face them. With your repeat line, the poem grows stronger each stanza, reaching a highlight in the last line.
That's what your poem is about to me. It is well crafted and beautiful.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Great start to February, Melissa. Your rhythm is perfect. It felt wonderful when I read it aloud. And there were so many layers of meaning. Storms are certainties for us all. It takes inner strength to face them. With your repeat line, the poem grows stronger each stanza, reaching a highlight in the last line.
That's what your poem is about to me. It is well crafted and beautiful.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello, dear Debbie!! Thank you for your insightful comments. Hope you are enjoying a lovely day... are ya'll having any winter weather? Ours is just rain, but, oh, how I wished for snowflakes! :). Thanks again.
Melissa
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It's just cold. It would be fine if I did not have to go out. But I do.
Comment from Sally Law
Such a beautifully penned poem in this form of a walk in the snow. You must be in the mood for idyllic settings. I feel the peace in this one all along the way. Magnificent!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best for your writing endeavors, Sally XOs
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Such a beautifully penned poem in this form of a walk in the snow. You must be in the mood for idyllic settings. I feel the peace in this one all along the way. Magnificent!
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best for your writing endeavors, Sally XOs
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Sally. Thank you. I would welcome some snow this winter.. not one flake so far. Glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa