Senility
An unexpected journey48 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Well written and congrats on All Time Best. A dreadful way to end one's life. Not to recognise one's family to gradually go mad. One day a cure will be found. Let us hope.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Well written and congrats on All Time Best. A dreadful way to end one's life. Not to recognise one's family to gradually go mad. One day a cure will be found. Let us hope.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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There is promising research. Definitely provides hope. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Adri7enne
Must be very scary to realize your own mind is playing tricks on you. In an uncertain world when you can no longer count on yourself, who do you turn to? Second paragraph full of fear and non-acceptance, and finally peace. A dreadful disease, but a good topic for poetry.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Must be very scary to realize your own mind is playing tricks on you. In an uncertain world when you can no longer count on yourself, who do you turn to? Second paragraph full of fear and non-acceptance, and finally peace. A dreadful disease, but a good topic for poetry.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2023
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Yes indeed. Thank you so much!
Comment from leather
Senility is such a heartbreaking phase of life--I'm glad you tried to address it. From the illustration of a bird, I wondered if the poem was about humans or animals. Some of the phraseology was choppy--perhaps like what a confused mind might produce, so I accepted that. The third line holds together much better than the fourth line. That fourth line kept me wondering who was feeling the weight, grief, and duty--the person with senility or the caregiver?
This was a very good effort to address the topic; however, the illustration didn't seem to fit.
My thoughts go out to all who experience senility in themselves or with others. Thank you for your writing.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Senility is such a heartbreaking phase of life--I'm glad you tried to address it. From the illustration of a bird, I wondered if the poem was about humans or animals. Some of the phraseology was choppy--perhaps like what a confused mind might produce, so I accepted that. The third line holds together much better than the fourth line. That fourth line kept me wondering who was feeling the weight, grief, and duty--the person with senility or the caregiver?
This was a very good effort to address the topic; however, the illustration didn't seem to fit.
My thoughts go out to all who experience senility in themselves or with others. Thank you for your writing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to write a review.
Comment from Earl Corp
I took a class on the psychology of aging in college. The professor said that Alzheimer's is harder on the family than those going through it. I have had some health issues which caused me loss of short term memory. It ain't fun. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I took a class on the psychology of aging in college. The professor said that Alzheimer's is harder on the family than those going through it. I have had some health issues which caused me loss of short term memory. It ain't fun. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Definitely not fun. Horrible to watch someone go through it too. Thank you so much for the review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Enjoyed isn't the right word, but I gained a lot from reading this poem. Above all, the reassurance that I am not alone suffering through the pain of the waiting alongside my dad. God Bless You. kay
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Enjoyed isn't the right word, but I gained a lot from reading this poem. Above all, the reassurance that I am not alone suffering through the pain of the waiting alongside my dad. God Bless You. kay
Comment Written 15-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I?m so sorry you?re going through this. I?ve gone through it now with multiple family members and it?s different every time. Thank you so much for the review. Blessings.
Comment from JT traveller
Love the variety of words. It makes your poem extremely vivid and descriptive at the same time. Senility is an awful experience to witness someone going through.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Love the variety of words. It makes your poem extremely vivid and descriptive at the same time. Senility is an awful experience to witness someone going through.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the review. Your words have special meaning for me.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This did a very good job of describing the horror of what millions of people are dead lung with, or will eventually have to deal with.
Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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This did a very good job of describing the horror of what millions of people are dead lung with, or will eventually have to deal with.
Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the review.
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?Dealing? with?.
(Dang that Tennessee Whiskey)
Comment from jmdg1954
I read and reread your poem a few times but could not grasp what it was you were trying to convey.
That's on me, not on you the author as you knew exactly what you wanted to say and how.
I tried.... John
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I read and reread your poem a few times but could not grasp what it was you were trying to convey.
That's on me, not on you the author as you knew exactly what you wanted to say and how.
I tried.... John
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the effort and for taking time to write the review and giving the poem an excellent rating!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Belinda,
I like your unique way of describing senility.
It's a sad time for many; a person works all his/her life to make a difference, only to lose their hold on their mind.
Nice work, Belinda.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Belinda,
I like your unique way of describing senility.
It's a sad time for many; a person works all his/her life to make a difference, only to lose their hold on their mind.
Nice work, Belinda.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and the encouragement.
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You?re welcome, Belinda.
Comment from newilk
I adore the image you chose to pair with your poem,, i goes so well with the expression of aging and grace in your writing,, the idea of greying a nd molting feathers, beautiful
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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I adore the image you chose to pair with your poem,, i goes so well with the expression of aging and grace in your writing,, the idea of greying a nd molting feathers, beautiful
Comment Written 14-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much! I?m so glad you understood the poem. It does the heart good to feel heard and understood.