A Grayer Day I Have Never Seen
a blank verse sonnet21 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Light deprivation caused by grey, sunless days can chill the soul. It can create feelings of loss and sadness. Thankfully it will end when spring brings about rebirth snd new beginnings. We just have to be patient...and write!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Light deprivation caused by grey, sunless days can chill the soul. It can create feelings of loss and sadness. Thankfully it will end when spring brings about rebirth snd new beginnings. We just have to be patient...and write!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Thank you, June. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a poem about a particularly gray and dreary winter day in the countryside. The speaker reflects on the bleak and featureless landscape and their own feelings of loss and melancholy. The language is descriptive and the rhyme scheme is consistent, creating a smooth and rhythmic flow. The imagery of the gray clouds and the snowy fields is evocative and adds to the overall mood of the poem. Overall, it is a well-written and introspective piece.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This is a poem about a particularly gray and dreary winter day in the countryside. The speaker reflects on the bleak and featureless landscape and their own feelings of loss and melancholy. The language is descriptive and the rhyme scheme is consistent, creating a smooth and rhythmic flow. The imagery of the gray clouds and the snowy fields is evocative and adds to the overall mood of the poem. Overall, it is a well-written and introspective piece.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This is a marvelous review of my sonnet, Jasmine Girl. Thank you very much!
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very colorful, although you are describing a gray tone and ambiance!!! Byvthat I mean you have created a visual in my heD about what you are describing. The bleak winter here in the north is responsible for many depressive minds, unfortunately. But the prospect of the renewed cycle of nature is a hope in itself that brighter and sunnier days are ahead.
Great pentameter stanzas, mostly iambic if I'm not mistaken.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Very colorful, although you are describing a gray tone and ambiance!!! Byvthat I mean you have created a visual in my heD about what you are describing. The bleak winter here in the north is responsible for many depressive minds, unfortunately. But the prospect of the renewed cycle of nature is a hope in itself that brighter and sunnier days are ahead.
Great pentameter stanzas, mostly iambic if I'm not mistaken.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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You are not mistaken, Mario. Blank verse is unrhymed iambic pentameter. Thank you very much for your review and comments.
Comment from Boogienights
I've had those kind of gray days, this is something I can relate to. Winter can have that kind of effect on some people, all you can do is find light and warmth. This is a great contest entry, best of luck.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I've had those kind of gray days, this is something I can relate to. Winter can have that kind of effect on some people, all you can do is find light and warmth. This is a great contest entry, best of luck.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I am so pleased you can relate to my poem. Many thanks for your high praise.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The depth of this piece is deeper than what I conceived it to be and that isn't to say it isn't good for I liked where it was going. I believe there a greater reward awaiting if you continue to massage it. idk how and do not suggest but there is a finished cake awaiting within this batter of words.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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The depth of this piece is deeper than what I conceived it to be and that isn't to say it isn't good for I liked where it was going. I believe there a greater reward awaiting if you continue to massage it. idk how and do not suggest but there is a finished cake awaiting within this batter of words.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Tom, I appreciate your reviewing my poem, but I am not sure what you think needs to be done to " finish the cake."
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As I said, idk neither. I liked what was done but to me there is a greater substance awaiting discovery. If not, ok. That's fine. I know for me I review what I wrote years ago and find more to what was so I massage it as the spirit dictates and historically what was is improved. That's what I mean.
Comment from harmony13
The author did a great job using the color gray to create a scene that
lacks vitality! These words are engaging, descriptive and creative. I
thought about days like this when it was winter in New York! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with this poem.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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The author did a great job using the color gray to create a scene that
lacks vitality! These words are engaging, descriptive and creative. I
thought about days like this when it was winter in New York! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with this poem.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I am so pleased you like how I used GRAY in the scenes of my sonnet. Many thanks, harmony13, for your kind praise and commentary.
Comment from Karyn2
The flow of this sonnet really suits the mood you are portraying. Rhyming poems can often have a sprightly sing-song feel with strong beat and metre to propel them but this careful selection allows the words to linger and absence of rhyme provides a terrific somber tone. I adore the imagery of stretched king-sized fitted sheets blanketing the landscape. This poem is full of emotion and incredible description. Great writing!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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The flow of this sonnet really suits the mood you are portraying. Rhyming poems can often have a sprightly sing-song feel with strong beat and metre to propel them but this careful selection allows the words to linger and absence of rhyme provides a terrific somber tone. I adore the imagery of stretched king-sized fitted sheets blanketing the landscape. This poem is full of emotion and incredible description. Great writing!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Karyn, I really appreciate your pointing out the distinction of using blank verse, not rhyme, in my poem. And I?m delighted you adore my imagery. Many thanks for your high praise.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
I feel you capture tone and mood excellently.the 'greyness' is well conveyed. The imagery and form combine to suggest the bleak atmosphere; A poem echoes in the mind!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I feel you capture tone and mood excellently.the 'greyness' is well conveyed. The imagery and form combine to suggest the bleak atmosphere; A poem echoes in the mind!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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Sarah, I am thrilled you thought the poem captures GREYNESS and the bleak atmosphere so well. Many thanks for your marvelous praise and the six-star bonus.
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Happy New Year!
Comment from GWHARGIS
This seemed to hit on two different levels. The first was the physical landscape. The second was the unrelinquished dreary feeling that hits us all from time to time. Your description of the grayness was awesome. It's was thorough and deep. I really enjoyed your two stanza poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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This seemed to hit on two different levels. The first was the physical landscape. The second was the unrelinquished dreary feeling that hits us all from time to time. Your description of the grayness was awesome. It's was thorough and deep. I really enjoyed your two stanza poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2023
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I am very flattered you think my sonnet works so well on two levels. I very much appreciate your high praise.
Comment from zanya
A poem to connect with our seasonal time of year as winter drags on and skies are gray 'The flat terrain was bleak and featureless' the descriptions are evocative -can almost feel the chill!
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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A poem to connect with our seasonal time of year as winter drags on and skies are gray 'The flat terrain was bleak and featureless' the descriptions are evocative -can almost feel the chill!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thank you, zanya, for your wonderful response to my sonnet. I am pleased you could almost feel the chill.