Tanka Collection
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Comment from royowen
They are unusual creatures with a name to match, I've always thought of birds as God's heralds, almost like they are announcing something happy, like morning, or in the night, mournful, like the close of day, times ending, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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They are unusual creatures with a name to match, I've always thought of birds as God's heralds, almost like they are announcing something happy, like morning, or in the night, mournful, like the close of day, times ending, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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You are very kind, Roy. I always appreciate your reviews. It's good to hear from you. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
"Hand over the chocolate and nobody gets hurt." - anonymous
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Well done
Comment from JanPerry
So the loon is the little bird? And why are you crying along with the anguishful notes? Do you also feel anguish? What causes your anguish Gypsy? Perhaps include it into the footnotes since you have articulated the Japanese form of poem.
Love the images, as usual you display an artistic bent.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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So the loon is the little bird? And why are you crying along with the anguishful notes? Do you also feel anguish? What causes your anguish Gypsy? Perhaps include it into the footnotes since you have articulated the Japanese form of poem.
Love the images, as usual you display an artistic bent.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Hello, Jan,
This poem is fictional. I wrote it down in my author notes. In the poem, the loon's sound was sad and the lady was sad too, therefor there was a connection between them... bird nature and human nature juxtaposition. Again, this is not about me, it's just a poem.
Jan, Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem :) I appreciate the exceptional six stars review. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
"Hand over the chocolate and nobody gets hurt." - anonymous
Comment from Karyn2
Stunningly beautiful and eloquent Gypsy! I feel like I in turn may pour out my tears along with the poet and loon it's so emotive. "Anguishful", "melancholic" and "drenched" are the perfect word choices for the mournful tone. Divine!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Stunningly beautiful and eloquent Gypsy! I feel like I in turn may pour out my tears along with the poet and loon it's so emotive. "Anguishful", "melancholic" and "drenched" are the perfect word choices for the mournful tone. Divine!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Karyn,
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem :) Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
"Hand over the chocolate and nobody gets hurt." - anonymous
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I didn't know this about Loon. I have seen them in lakes in Minnesota and heard them sing. They sound like sopranos with quivering sound. I have never known or heard of the moaning song form them. They must hate darkness.
Well done.
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I didn't know this about Loon. I have seen them in lakes in Minnesota and heard them sing. They sound like sopranos with quivering sound. I have never known or heard of the moaning song form them. They must hate darkness.
Well done.
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Lisa, I googled birds that make sad sounds and loons came up.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem :) Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy Word Weaver
"Hand over the chocolate and nobody gets hurt." - anonymous
Comment from lyenochka
I love all the liquid imagery you used in this poem - drizzled, drench, and crying. I especially liked "drizzled with anguishful notes " but I find "anguishful" a little awkward. Maybe: "anguish-filled" or anguished.
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I love all the liquid imagery you used in this poem - drizzled, drench, and crying. I especially liked "drizzled with anguishful notes " but I find "anguishful" a little awkward. Maybe: "anguish-filled" or anguished.
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Big Sister. I changed it to anguish filled and it sounds better. I googled 'anguishful' and it came up but you know more than google LoL and more than me.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review my poem, I appreciate it. Love you.
MariVal ❤😘
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No, I don't know more than Google or you! We all know something about something that others don't know. And for poetry it's all about how sounds feel to us. Thanks for your confidence in me! 💖